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I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace,
A knight of subtle quips and clever wit,
She taught me how to love through time and space,
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
I gazed as if to memorise her face,
Each twitch and twinkle – I knew every bit -
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
She transformed my world with effortless grace
And tended to more wounds than I’ll admit,
She taught me how to love through time and space
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
In her, all self-destruction is erased,
All wrongdoings she lovingly acquits,
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
And in acceptance, I have found a place
Where I with sheer imperfections fit,
She taught me how to love through time and space
Our lives were destined to be interlaced
And to her I eternally commit,
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace,
She taught me how to love through time and space.
A knight of subtle quips and clever wit,
She taught me how to love through time and space,
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
I gazed as if to memorise her face,
Each twitch and twinkle – I knew every bit -
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
She transformed my world with effortless grace
And tended to more wounds than I’ll admit,
She taught me how to love through time and space
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
In her, all self-destruction is erased,
All wrongdoings she lovingly acquits,
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace
A passion borne of comet’s fire lit -
She walked the stars to softly hold my heart,
And in acceptance, I have found a place
Where I with sheer imperfections fit,
She taught me how to love through time and space
Our lives were destined to be interlaced
And to her I eternally commit,
I loved her ‘fore I met with her embrace,
She taught me how to love through time and space.
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This is Day 13: The Grá Reformata
The Grá Reformata was created by Michael King as a variation of the popular form villanelle.
It is 27 line poem that features couplets in between classic villanelle tercets. 10 syllabic count per line.
The rhyme/refrain scheme is as follows:
A1, b, A2 | b, c | a, b, A1 | b, c |a, b, A2 |b, c, | a, b, A1 | b, c |a, b, A2 | | a, b, A1, A2 |
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This is Day 13: The Grá Reformata
The Grá Reformata was created by Michael King as a variation of the popular form villanelle.
It is 27 line poem that features couplets in between classic villanelle tercets. 10 syllabic count per line.
The rhyme/refrain scheme is as follows:
A1, b, A2 | b, c | a, b, A1 | b, c |a, b, A2 |b, c, | a, b, A1 | b, c |a, b, A2 | | a, b, A1, A2 |
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DFC 2014 IS HERE!Every single year I say that I will get this organised way earlier, and every year I spent 2 or more days raging at a screen.. And then check out ->
But it is so rewarding to see you all do this and it's those feelings are always very short-lived so I keep doing it year after year.
This year featuring 31 forms that I haven't featured before. I went hunting for forms and had a lot of fun.
WHO'S READY FOR MORE DFC? I KNOW I AM!Please check out The DFC Form Chart 2014. All of the days are outlined with forms and prompts and explanations for each.
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It's CRITMAS!!! I really hope you don't mind me making some comments on this piece...
I should start by saying that the villanelle is one of my ABSOLUTE FAVORITE styles of fixed-form poetry. I can't write them very well, but I love them. You, on the other hand, are clearly a pro.
I've not seen this variation on the villanelle before, but I think you've done a spectacular job. The couplet is wonderful - fantastic imagery, and it fits with the stanzas around it at all times.
Your diction, rhythm, and rhyme are wonderful. All of my negative comments are, I admit, a little nitpicky: I feel like "acquits" in the fourth stanza from the end should be "acquit"; it makes more sense to me. Perhaps I'm reading it wrong... I'm also curious about your decision not to use punctuation at the end of lines, especially since you have very precise punctuation within lines. Perhaps I'm too OCD, but I think visually, if nothing else, punctuation would leave the ends of lines looking crisper.
Wow, I really don't feel like I can contribute much here...you've done such a fantastic job, and it is such a sweet poem ^^ without wandering into the realm of the cliche.
I should start by saying that the villanelle is one of my ABSOLUTE FAVORITE styles of fixed-form poetry. I can't write them very well, but I love them. You, on the other hand, are clearly a pro.
I've not seen this variation on the villanelle before, but I think you've done a spectacular job. The couplet is wonderful - fantastic imagery, and it fits with the stanzas around it at all times.
Your diction, rhythm, and rhyme are wonderful. All of my negative comments are, I admit, a little nitpicky: I feel like "acquits" in the fourth stanza from the end should be "acquit"; it makes more sense to me. Perhaps I'm reading it wrong... I'm also curious about your decision not to use punctuation at the end of lines, especially since you have very precise punctuation within lines. Perhaps I'm too OCD, but I think visually, if nothing else, punctuation would leave the ends of lines looking crisper.
Wow, I really don't feel like I can contribute much here...you've done such a fantastic job, and it is such a sweet poem ^^ without wandering into the realm of the cliche.