No matter what I say,
the music sinks it’s fangs into my heart.
I want you so much-
if I only knew your name,
I’d utter it with such longing
you’d be summoned to my side.
How much longer do I need to wait here in the dark?
If I only knew your face,
I’d search this world,
until you were found.
I hate how lonely I am without you.
What must I do to grab your attention?
Is it even possible for you to need me too?
Or am I alone in this unattainable desire?
I want to seduce your heart,
make your pulse race,
engage your intellect,
and inspire your wildest dreams.
Chase after me-
I’m lost here in this twisted dream.
I locked everyone out,
my walls won’t fall so easily anymore.
Lie to yourself if you want to,
but don’t lie to me.
Please don’t forget me,
even if I do.
Congrats on the Daily Deviation!
I don't know how much you're into poetry, but I'd suggest trying to show rather than tell. What I mean by that, roughly speaking, is trying to rely more on concrete imagery (for example) to convey desires and emotions and so on, rather than abstract statements.
Hope that's at least a bit useful.
Nice! It's kinda similar to some lyrics I also write. Not in terms of how it's written (the form), since it's very, very different from the lyrics I write, but it's similar to some of my lyrics in terms of what is written (the content). Very nice! I love this!