Thanks for writing such a fun story. I hope to keep enjoying so long as you're willing to continue writing. It's a breath of (bitterly cold) fresh air. Making FOE not just fun again but funny, dealing with the Steel Rangers' helmet issues, bringing the story into a wintery climate, introducing Snow Hounds and Super Stallions, Inkwell's Scrooge McDuck level of obsession with ammunition and Crosshair's timely shouts of DOOM. It's nice to have a story where I smile and laugh when I read it.
I was trying to mix and match between the Zebra Rifle on the FOE Wiki, the Chinese Assault Rifle from Fallout 3 and a few random inspirations. I figured Crosshair would be industrious and mod his rifle or make sure he had a model well suited for Wintertrot conditions. On the cloak I figured he would be using it not only for warmth but to blend in with his surroundings and break up his profile for when he wanted to snipe pirates and such without being seen. If I had the skill or tools I would have included the ruins of the city during a windy snowfall. Next time maybe.
If you'd like an additional beta reader/editor let me know. I'd love to give back for the enjoyment I've gotten out of the story.
In all seriousness, it looks pretty good. If (next time you draw something similar) you catch the image again being too large, you can have them crouching instead, as this will help maintain the dynamic pose while still allowing for the entire character on the page.
One last thing, if you hadn't mentioned the orange, I'm not sure I would have noticed. The image is a bit grainy, so it is hard to tell exactly how you colored in the eyes, but it seems like there a lot of black lines in the iris that is eating up the color.
Last thing, I've always imaged that scopes in FOE universe would be relatively large, mostly in part because of the nature of pony eyes being disk shaped.
Well... with the job market being what it is...
Good advice. This was me just getting the image in my head of Cross standing up after sniping an enemy that Inkwell engaged in close combat before rejoining the team or just him walking through the city and stopping to figure out how to pass some obstacle or dangerous area. It was also me not paying attention to the size I made the paper. I ran out of 8.5x11 drawing paper so I'm using very large sheets that I'm cutting down to a smaller size.
Yeah. It's really old paper (probably 15 years or so) and it has yellowed a little and wasn't that high in quality to begin with on the grainy issue, but I also don't use higher settings on my scanner (it's old just like the paper) and it takes forever to scan something in high resolution and again to upload it to DA. On the eyes, I should have colored first and then shaded as opposed to the other way around. I used the wrong orange, thinking it was a brighter variant than the one I picked up.
Most of the scopes probably are and should be larger. I didn't want to make the scope too big here for fear of it unbalancing any part of the drawing. I also figured that Zebra Rifles are similar to standard military issue assault rifles where if a scope is added it would be something like an a-cog with a 4x optical zoom for mid distance shooting. In a ruined city Cross probably wouldn't have line of sight to a range that would merit using a large powerful scope (unless in specific circumstances) because there would be obstructions, debris, sight distance reducing weather conditions and what not. That and a smaller scope reduces his profile (especially when prone) and makes it harder for enemies to catch any light off of it. And, when moving to engage in close quarters, you sight in over the top of the scope so he needs to make fewer adjustments to how he aims and holds the rifle with the smaller scope.