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Meet me under the willow tree
It's our own summer shade;
The sweet, warm grass between our toes
Inside the emerald cave.

Kiss me under the willow tree
The leaves an autumn gold;
They flurry by as you walk me home
Before the night grows cold.

Hold me under the willow tree
We'll watch the winter snow;
Sharing warmth and sharing love
I'll pray you never go.

Marry me under the willow tree
Spring blossoms above our heads;
Birdsong follows the eternal vows
As you carry me to our bed.
This poem really came out of nowhere!
The way I imagined it while writing, it follows two childhood sweethearts who used to play in their 'emerald cave' as children, fell in love as teenagers - meeting there perhaps in secret - and returned to their favourite spot to marry. Although it's written by season as if it all happens within just one year, much more time (15 years or so) elapses during the poem.

Thanks very much for reading!

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Great job on this one! It really paints a picture in your head of something romantic, lasting years on. How a simple willow tree can have such precious memories.

This actually is really original too. The first two lines I though, 'I've seen this somewhere before', but I was completely wrong. So 5 stars on originality!

I love the way this turns something as simple as 'Meet me under the willow tree' into a romantic, lovely, heart-warming story about the lasting love of a couple. That's one of the best parts.

The poem has a great impact, too. The way the pictures come upon your head so easily is amazing. Most poems you have to re-read a couple of times because they are a little confusing, but this is easily read, and paints a perfect picture of I Love You!
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Now reading over it for the third time, I believe the best part about this poem is that it has a perfect balance between love and description. You portray such a beautiful environment with just your words! From the first stanza I could envision a girl waiting peacefully beneath a large weeping willow on her true love, perhaps wearing a white sundress and sitting there barefooted. Overall, very detailed and enjoyable to read. It's a great poem to kick off the spring with, even though it starts off in the summer. Nice utilization of the four seasons! Truly a lovely job on this piece, Kezzi!
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A-Shadow-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eeep! I found it!^^

I had added this poem to my favorites on my old account and missed it so much. But now I'm back from a hiatus and found this again! I'm so happy because this is my favorite poem by you. :heart: I'm so glad I found it again...
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! I'm really happy you like this poem, it means a lot. ♥
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A-Shadow-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:iconyourewelcomesignplz: It was a pleasure to read it again. ^^
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Teracobi Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Well, I don't usually go for this sort of thing. I like those really sad disturbing poems, because in pain (internal, of course) there is meaning. Or something. Ignore me.
But this holds a special element for me because the weeping willow is like my tree. We're good friends. (Though really: [link] ) And you did a nice thing with the words there, I like rhymes.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm really happy you like this, despite it not being your usual preference! It means a lot, thank you. c:
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Teracobi Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Sure! Preferences my butt; beauty catches my attention, and beauty cares not for my preferences.
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I love this. I've got these two characters that kiss for the first time under a willow tree and so this feels special to me.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you like it! c:
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Nonawiththefreckles Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I love this! It's a very cute poem (Willow trees are one of my favorite trees :D )
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much indeed! c: & Same <3
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Nonawiththefreckles Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Your welcome! :) <3
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Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
[link] Featured here!
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much, I really appreciate it! :la:
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Dani-the-Naiad Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Photo-11 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
I'm very fond of this tree! :) Shame I only ever seem to find it around towns rather than my own personal preference of finding one in a forest. :+fav:

(You're literature is fantastic)
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! <3
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vintagemusicbox Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2011
Love the refrain of "under the willow tree."
Very sweet.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! <3
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Heavynne Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2010
This so sweet! It makes me feel warm indeedy <3
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:dummy: Thank you! <3
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jay-ennaju Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
awww i lurve dis!! X3

*favs*
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! c:
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magnagloriousness Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2009
It's adorable.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! c: Glad you enjoyed it.
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magnagloriousness Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2009
No problem. :D
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Miesjelluh Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2009
lovely....

may i use it for a couple who is going to marry soon ?
i'd love to write the text next to my drawing...

i hope i may, but also if not. wonderful poem...
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course you may! :la:
It would be an honour for my poem to be used in this way~
I'm so glad you like it! <3
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Miesjelluh Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2009
thank you
i will use it... as soon as i know if she liked it aswell, i will tell you.

x
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karin-chan1994 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
This made me warm a tingly inside nice job.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
^w^ Thank you, so glad you enjoyed it!
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karin-chan1994 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Your welcome
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hakeberhut Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2009
. . .The best word I could use to describe this poem is "fluffy."

And I mean that in the best way possible. It just made me want to go "awwwwwww. . ."

XD
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ^w^
Thanks for reading~ :heart:
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dwine Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2009
very very pretty
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! c:
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PKMNnerdfighter Featured By Owner May 6, 2009
THIS is adorable.

You have such talent.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much!
I'm really glad you liked it~ <3
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Safiimaginante Featured By Owner May 5, 2009
I love willow trees and I loved the poem!!!



(^^)
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
^w^ Thank youu!
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seasaltsymphony Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
I DON'T LIKE TEH CUTESY.

xD

It's really good, great compared to your recent stuffs. :)
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snurtz Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Student Writer
YOU
GAVE
ME
CHILLS.

This is now my favorite poem. MY FAVORITE. :love:
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
8DD I'm so glad you like itt!
<3
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SomethingSmall Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
Damn. I didn't know that you hneeded a subscription to critique art.
So, here is what I think:
The first line immediately took me under a large beautiful oak tree during the middle of summer with a warm breeze blowing by and the sounds of insects and birds echoing in my ears. Then I was swept to a world of crushed brown leaves and colder temperatures and stronger winds. Later transporting me to branches piled up with gentle snow and tiny flakes falling on damp hair. And ending under that same willow tree with the feeling of spring and love in the air.
It's adorable and romantic. You really manged to capture the feelings that go with each season.
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much! ^w^
I'm really glad you enjoyed the poem~ <3
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SomethingSmall Featured By Owner May 12, 2009
you're entirely welcome.
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PearlStorm Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
Wow, I love this. The imagery is really beautiful. =)
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! ^w^
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PearlStorm Featured By Owner May 5, 2009
:D
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evy-and-cats Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
it`s beautiful!
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Kezzi-Rose Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks very much! ^w^
<3
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