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Conceivable Conclusions.

Maybe we fall because we know we can
And we stall when it comes to a helping hand.
Because we refuse to accept and to understand.
That a man would be willing to aid another man,
Without some sort of under hand, profitable plan.

Maybe we project our perceptions on to others.
Quotes that emerged and persevered by our mothers.
Home truths that we go on to eventually discover.
Making it the only way we can connect with each other.
Spurring us to find like minded friends, associates and lovers.

Maybe we lie because the truth is too bitter to bear.
We are inclined to believe that others do actually care.
And that they will only listen so that they are able to compare
Our circumstances, even though we know life is made to be unfair.
That is why when the mighty fall, we all avidly stand by and stare.

There are a lot of fine details forgotten in the final figure.

There are a lot of surreal strokes painted into this picture.

There are a lot of what if's and maybes to consider.

Any eventuality could be a reality.

What you may call insanity,

Another may call clarity.

Kela Lewis-Morin
I thought I might as well take advantage while I had some time and finish of a piece I have been sitting here lol. I wanted to have this piece set out as if a person is thinking to themselves attempting to understand human beings. I put some rhyme in there as usual just to make it flow better. I hope it works and I hope you guys like it :)
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Bravo! :clap: You sure do have great understanding for such a young person, if I do say so myself! More precious than riches that is, for it shall make life for you more pleasant, and bearable. :)
Mysocalleddeath Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
DSteffi Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Student Writer
This is awesome. The flow is perfect and those last two lines as well.
pinktwirlz Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello! My name is Madolyn, and I am a critic for #FreeVersePoetry. Please don't be offended by anything I say, since it is all intended constructively :)

I would like to say I particularly enjoyed this poem. The message is clear and true, and voices thoughts that most people can relate to. Reading it aloud it is easy to spot the rhythm, and it works really well with the words used. I think the change in style towards the end there was also done very well, it was a very nice conclusion to end off the beginning portions, and didn't detract anything from the piece (which is easy to do if you change styles in a poem).

I didn't have many qualms with this one, but one of the things that stood out was the use of punctuation. Punctuation can make or break a poem, and here it just isn't used very well. The sentences start and end at awkward moments, and it may have sounded all right while writing it, but to the reader the starts and stops are rather jarring. A lot of times things like this aren't noticed by the writer because we know how it is intended to sound, and that is how we see it. I know this is something that hinders me greatly, especially in prose. I would recommend reading it aloud and redoing the sentence placement. The words are fine, it's just the periods and commas that need rearranging.

Overall, you did very nicely. :) It could use some formatting and rhythm revision, but the idea is solid and conveyed pretty well. The last few lines after the style change were very cool to read. The entire piece had the feel of a spoken word or rap, and it works. ^^ Nice job!
AdilaRain Featured By Owner May 17, 2013   Writer
I sometimes still have trouble trysting a few people, thinking that they have some kind of motive behind it.

Great Poem!
DanskiConti Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Last three lines make it for me. Thank you :)
Kishin-Vex Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student
Nice work
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