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The world seems brighter,
..as my heart replaces my eyes.
My mind feels lighter,
..as I can sense the truth from the lies.

In a much more beautiful world,
..where looks to everyone is worthless.
Confidence returns to each boy and each girl,
..as they smile with comfort; tearless, fearless.

My hand feels cold and stiff,
..as warmth sneaks away from me.
But the warmth of the spirits gave me a life,
..high into the sky where I can see...

Here the world seems louder,
..as my heart replaces my ears.
My mind feels crowder,
..as the words I hear reminds me my fears.

In a much more darker world,
..the creation of light must exist.
Hiding in the corner; I shrugged and curled,
..accepting the hatred demon's kiss.
Inspired:

Jaded Butterfly - Nic Promotion MTV (Black And White One)
Tiramisu - Nic's New Movie
Deep River - Utada Hikaru's New Song
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marka Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2002   Filmographer
I'am full of wonder where such words comes from
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scottdoom Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2002  Hobbyist Photographer
Pretty great poem. It's really good. I don't like the third thing down though, I don't know why. The rest of it is good though.
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tormented169 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2002   Writer
Smells like sex and candy..
or maybe just good poetry!
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-dragon- Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2002   Writer
very good, i really like this =D (Big Grin)
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aysel Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2002
the demon kiss bothers me a bit too... :o (Eek)

it seems out of place in the placid poem you've written.

good job, keep writing + improving! :) (Smile)
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3image Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2002
im not big on ppoetry but thats very nice..i like it....good job/



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bedrik Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2002
i donīt comment often on poetry, but this one is good. only the end botheres me a little "hatred demons kiss" is a little bit to pathetic for me
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vica Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2002   Interface Designer
/me feels all fuzzy inside but cold outside....

niceness :D (Big Grin)
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neural-shock Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2002
i know this isn't much of a comment but... Thumbs Up
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syragon Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2002
same here, i read it yesterday, forgot to add Love

Aww
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lockheart7ca Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2002
Tears of joy ...This is beautiful hun...Hope you don't mind..I'm adding this to faves...Your poem touched my heart..Heart
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smoglin Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2002
wow, im not big on ppoetry but thats very nice. every sentence flows from the last, i think its really good.
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