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When the storming clouds hovers above,
My body starts to shiver within.
But the thought of being a lone with you,
I just know the warmth will soon to begin.

When I see your shadow cast on the wall,
I know that the clouds are clearing away.
And the thought of having you in my arm,
I just know we'll be able to see the brighter days.

Even if a hurricane struck down on us right now,
I wouldn't move even an inch away from you.
But the thought of being a lone with you,
I just know this dream couldn't be anymore true.

Even when the storm is clearing up,
I still don't want to let you go.
And the thought of having you in my arm,
I just have the feeling this love will last, I just know.
Yeah! Yeah! Yeah! Inspired by Senses, Nicholas Tse :) (Smile)
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DeliriousDreams Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2003  Professional Writer
Good Words!
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sanguru Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
caught this one being spammed in the shoutbox, but it turned out to be a great thing to click on it. amazing piece, the flow is amazing and the message intense. beautiful work.
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thlayli Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2002  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful imagery. Not to pick on your English skills, but there are some very wrong parts.

Just for instance: "I just know the warmth will soon to begin."

You need to either say "is about to begin" or "will soon begin", "soon to" is not proper English.

Nice work again, I'm just trying to help out. :) (Smile)
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dimi15 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2002   Photographer
Great writing style you got there. You elaborated the theme quite well.Thumbs Up

Latest poem : [ link ]. Comments more than welcome. =D (Big Grin)
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novacaine Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2002
I like the way you incorporate the seasons with your love for her. Very cool... I like
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hallot Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2002   Writer
nice piece...

personally I think it needs some violance, hehe

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aysel Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2002
this is sweet. like Rich said, its very pure... like a virgin.

I would weep, but my tears have been stolen; I would shout, but my voice has been taken. Thus, I write.
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-rich- Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2002
Nicely written, a unique style as well. The idea is pure, and you captured it nicely. Good stuff man.

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evilfutsin Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2002  Professional Filmographer
Beautiful! Thumbs Up
Absolutely beautiful, dude. Nice work. I love the word usage and how the sentences are pieced together, nice job on it all. :) (Smile)
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