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I think everyone knows what's right with this: the shading's amazingly improved, the anatomy's great, the lighting's awesome. What's wr...


Something I've noticed a lot in your drawings, the bra never seems to match up with where the nipples should be. It seems to be a commo...

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I think everyone knows what's right with this: the shading's amazingly improved, the anatomy's great, the lighting's awesome. What's wrong, I think, is slightly harder to explain. I think it's how the ass connects with the thighs (it doesn't just look flat here, it looks kind of wrong. No offense to the artist), and how the smile looks. Creatiffy might need to look at traditionalist artists to see how they're able to nail facial expressions to make them look really powerful, like some of the stuff AtroxChobatsu retweets. Other than that, the work's clearly getting so, so, SO much better.
Something I've noticed a lot in your drawings, the bra never seems to match up with where the nipples should be. It seems to be a common problem in a lot of porn art, but even though I love your artwork, I have to point out that it's especially prominent. Here it just looks like way too much of the breast is going forward, or perhaps the bra itself is just too low. Maybe show the bra naturally starting to loosen up a bit, or draw it a little more towards the center? Thanks for reading, love your work. :D

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