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After the support from my friends, I decided NOT to delete the series and will keep them up. I will however try to make some changes to the final chapter, DP 7, just to make them more acceptable to everyone...though I won't promise my writing will improve.

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Master-of-the-Boot Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
If I can offer some advice. One thing you struggle with is character descriptions. 

You describe a character's appearance in a full paragraph block in every detail. To make it easier and give the story better flow, just summarize the appearance in one or two sentences and then maybe drop hints about their appearance over the course of a few pages. Like describe Davy Jones as a mutant, crab octopus man. Then later talk about him adjusting his red sash and bicorne hat and so forth. 

I'm not insulting you, because your work overall is very solid. And I'd still be very sad if you deleted anything. 
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chann1 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
What kind of changes are we talking about here?
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JusSonic Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
Yeah, I will get back to you on that when my hiatus is done.
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mikaela2015 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
Well whatever happens, you still got my support on the story
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chann1 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
Okay. And do you need suggestions for Mundungus?
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JusSonic Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
Maybe. Whatcha got in mind?
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chann1 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
I was thinking Argit from Ben 10.
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mikaela2015 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
That's a good idea

I was thinking of Myaxx from the Ben 10 film Secret of the Omnitrix
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mikaela2015 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2016
Awesome mate
:):):):):):):):):):):)
I'm happy for you and I look forward to reading more of Danny Potter and your future stories
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