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Literature
WRITING ADVICE: Tensing up
PAST PERFECT (PLUPERFECT) - PAST - PRESENT - FUTURE
Had verbed - verbed - verbs - will verb
I walk into the room, and everybody stares at me. At my flash clothes, the hair, the grin, the swagger. Not one of them thinks to tell me about the banana peel someone had left on the floor.
Most stories are written in PAST tense. So when you need to talk about something that happened in the past, you use the PAST PERFECT.
This chapter is in PRESENT tense. Well, you'd use PAST tense, right? Well, it's not that clear, now, is it? Readers are used to the PAST PERFECT for flashbacks, and using just the PAST tense can feel awkward.
I walk into the room, and everybody stares at me. At my flash clothes, the hair, the grin, the swagger. Not one of them thinks to tell me about the banana peel someone left on the floor.
Either version communicates effectively, so ultimately, it's up to the writer. 
Personally, I like to avoid the pluperfect tense when I'm writing in past tense. It can get a little d
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Literature
WRITING ADVICE: Pattern Recognition
"Look," Alex said furtively to Patty, as the teacher droned on. "Who are you going to take to the dance?"
"Don't know," Patty shrugged, twirling a pencil between her fingers thoughtfully. "Haven't decided who to ask yet."
"Well, I hear the janitor's free," Carlos said from behind her, smirking malevolently. "You could always ask him."
"Ahahahaha," Patty laughed in a forced-sounding way.
One common mistake writers make is falling into patterns. The story that inspired this kept writing dialogue the same way every time.
"First part of whatever is being said," character said adverbly, as they and/or someone else did several different things. "Second part of statement."
This would not have been so bad if they didn't over-write, if they had just stuck to the meat-and-potatoes version;
Character did something indicating their emotions. "First part of whatever is being said," character said. "Second part of statement."
Or if they had mixed it up a little. The meat-and-potato
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Literature
Writing Advice: Verbing adverbly
"You know what I hate?" u63r said angrily.
"No. What do you hate?" Alex queried curiously.
"Said bookisms," u63r answered peevishly.
"Said bookisms?" Alex parroted quizzically, scratching their gender-indeterminate head.
"Said bookisms," u63r confirmed, nodding. "It's like the writer is afraid to just say words like 'said' or 'asked'. And it just ends up being intrusive."
"Hold up," Alex interrupted, raising a hand. "Was there something specific that set this off?"
"Yeah, this one fanfic," u63r admitted. "Not only that, but he combined it with that redundant narration I mentioned earlier, where the dialogue 'tags' tell us information we already got from the dialogue. If the prior speaker is cut off, *of course* the next person who speaks interrupted."
"Do you think 'asked' is an example?" Alex 
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Literature
Writing Advice:How not to write group dialogue
"All right, team, let's huddle," Dad said.
They huddled, made their voices low and quiet.
"Junior, you keep him busy, keep him distracted," Mom said, as one hand fiddled with her pearl necklace.
"Got it," the elder son said.
"Gladys, beans and macaroni and sausage for dinner. When it's time for bed, read him a story," Dad said.
"Right." Grandma nodded.
"I get to stay up watching television, and I get two deserts," Junior said.
"One desert," Dad said.
"One and a half deserts," Junior said.
"This is not a negotiation." Dad pulled back the cuff of his suit, and said "We have to be there in...twenty minutes."
"So...What you're saying is that you don't have time to argue," Grandma said.
Her daughter rolled her eyes. "Don't take his side, Mom. You're not the one who has to deal with him when he's bouncing off the walls," she said.
"You know that's a myth, right? Sugar doesn't really make kids hyper," Junior said.
"Quiet, you," Dad said
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Literature
Writing Advice: Shut out shout-outs
Due to the subject matter, I included a larger-than-usual number of references in this one, just for fun. You probably won't find all eight, unless you happen to watch a certain podcast about a certain red-masked superhero and his nubile ginger sidekick partner.
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Okay, so you're watching the latest Game of Thrones episode. There's tension, there's shouting, it's very dramatic, you're on the edge of your seat. What next? you think, shoveling popcorn into your mouth.
And suddenly the characters start acting out the "What?" scene from Pulp Fiction.
Your hand stops. Your brow furrows. You mouth hangs open.
This doesn't make sense. The writers just...gave up. They made no real effort to integrate the reference into Westeros. Where'd that paper bag come from? Why is the Mother of Dragons is pulling a Big Belly Burger out of it? What is this?
I'll tell you what this is. Your hypothetical self has just encountered a
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flowerpowerstock Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2017  Professional Traditional Artist
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:icondashomgplz: You are now 20% cooler for joining Humanized-MLP! :icondashomgplz:
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I love your take on the social justice sallies on tumblr.
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COMETBUNNY Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
Thank you so much for the watch~
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Jon-Wood Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Actually, I had you Watched as Kittypaint, and just found you again through tumblr. (I'm badWasabi).
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