Give Core MembershipPAST PERFECT (PLUPERFECT) - PAST - PRESENT - FUTURE
Had verbed - verbed - verbs - will verb
I walk into the room, and everybody stares at me. At my flash clothes, the hair, the grin, the swagger. Not one of them thinks to tell me about the banana peel someone had left on the floor.
Most stories are written in PAST tense. So when you need to talk about something that happened in the past, you use the PAST PERFECT.
This chapter is in PRESENT tense. Well, you'd use PAST tense, right? Well, it's not that clear, now, is it? Readers are used to the PAST PERFECT for flashbacks, and using just the PAST tense can feel awkward.
I walk into the room, and everybody stares at me. At my flash clothes, the hair, the grin, the swagger. Not one of them thinks to tell me about the banana peel someone left on the floor.
Either version communicates effectively, so ultimately, it's up to the writer.
Personally, I like to avoid the pluperfect tense when I'm writing in past tense. It can get a little d
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"Look," Alex said furtively to Patty, as the teacher droned on. "Who are you going to take to the dance?"
"Don't know," Patty shrugged, twirling a pencil between her fingers thoughtfully. "Haven't decided who to ask yet."
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This would not have been so bad if they didn't over-write, if they had just stuck to the meat-and-potatoes version;
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Or if they had mixed it up a little. The meat-and-potato
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"Said bookisms?" Alex parroted quizzically, scratching their gender-indeterminate head.
"Said bookisms," u63r confirmed, nodding. "It's like the writer is afraid to just say words like 'said' or 'asked'. And it just ends up being intrusive."
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