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Our promises were made
The moment I opened that box
To be true
To be faithful
To love forever

On one bent knee
I held open the box
Grasping the ring
You gasped
Pulling me to my feet

Our promises were broken
The monent you opened your mouth
To lie
To cheat
To hurt forever

On bent knees
You apologized
For all the wrong you had done
I sighed
Pulling you to your feet
Actually titled "With This Ring..."
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winterdragon Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2004
:( I feel so sad. this is an exceptional peice but I think I have seen a revision for this. none the less it is great. write on my friend, write on. (forgive the pun)
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
You have seen a revision. Where? I am interested in reading it. I based my poem on real events with my one of my ex's. (THE INFAMOUS HEATHER!!!!!!)
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winterdragon Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
LMAO I am not sure but I have seen one ( I think) hmmmm well it is still a good poem. :)
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
Thanks. :)
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MidStaryNight Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2004
:') That's amazing! :+favlove:


~Olivia~
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2004
At the rate you are going, your entire favorite list will consist of my entire gallery. lol. Joking. I really appreciate all the :+fav: 's lets me know my work is appreciated. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.
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MidStaryNight Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2004
:hug: No problem, you deserve it! :aww:
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JillValentine44 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2004
Woah, thats really good! Great job!!
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2004
Thanks. It's all true... :( But I am better now :)
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