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Questions burn inside
Dry cracked lips
Sending out messages
Locked inside poems

Do tears flow?
When I speak
Does it sting?
When I’m near

Tears fall down
From bitter skies
Rain falls down
From bitter eyes

Part your lips
Let words fall
Close your eyes
Whisper your answers

Does it repeat?
When you sleep
Does it replay?
When you awaken

Tears drip down
From dying trees
Rain splashes up
From dying seas

It is alright
To never forgive
It is OK
To never believe

Heart sinks away
Searching for answers
Eyes still heavy
Dreaming in nightmares

Only an illusion
Call to me
Through the haze
Only a dream

We never speak
Words don’t exist
We never write
Sentences are gone
Finally finished
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winterdragon Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2004
fantastic I only have one thing that I want to bring to your attention.

Questions burn inside
Dry cracked lips
Sending out messages
Locked inside poems

you have the word inside with in 4 lines of each other and sometimes that is awesome, there is no other way to express your self, but this time I think it sounds a little redundant. But the poem iver all deserves a huge :thumbsup:
spectacular. I feel alot from this one. especially from:
Tears drip down
From dying trees
Rain splashes up
From dying seas.

thats my fave but I am a weather girl and I like to use waether to say what I am feeling too. great job my friend.
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
THANKS.... Thank you so much ( X a million) :) I'll take your comment into consideration when I rewrite the poem.
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winterdragon Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
hey no problem. really liked it . I only really comment like that whenI know the person is very capable of haveing a masterpeice.
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MidStaryNight Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2004
Oh wow, I really like this. :+fav: ^__^ I can definetly relate tot his poem. Thanks for writing, now I know at least someone else has those feelings inside. :hug:


~Olivia~
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
Yeah the feelings come and they go.... I usually get my best writing in the in between times (the limbo) state between feeling bad or good for something and feeling indifferent.
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MidStaryNight Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
Yeah, I hear that. I usually get my best writing at about the same time, but sometimes I get the feeling and I sit down and it just pours out. Also, sometimes I even just sit down, think of a feeling and all these words just pour forth. :nod: I look forward to reading more of your poems. :aww:


:heart:
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AngelofDemise Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2004
i like it
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
Oh I bought three other H. Coben books... "Tell no one", "Gone for Good", and of course your favorite one "Darkest Fear" I am on page of "Tell No One" I started it today during my lunch break. I really like "No Second Chance" I also bought "Demons and Angels" by Dan Brown and also saw an illustrated version of "The Da Vinci Code"
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AngelofDemise Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
dan brown......good writer! The Da Vinci Code was awesome. Did u read that? Hmm anyway, Harlan Coban excellent. Good reads.
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
No never read any of Dan Brown's books.
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AngelofDemise Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2004
aaaaaa you don't know what you're missing!
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2004
Thanks it still has a lot of revision before it is complete.
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jester81 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2004
I am already working on a rewrite... I had to post what I have so far. Sometimes it takes many rewrites before a work of art can be flawless. (Take F. Scott Fitzgerald's "The Great Gatsby" he wrote and rewrote that for years) Anyway I know it isn't my best, I know it isn't in the top 20. It's a work in progress.
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