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Severed

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By jester81   |   Watch
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Published: November 9, 2004
Sliced deep
Protruding muscle
Crimson red
Running slowly

Skin deep
Ugly flesh
Bloody hand
Falls aside

Buried deep
Darkly dressed
Crimson red
Lowered Slowly

Digging deep
Dirty flesh
Heavy hands
Pounding earth
© 2004 - 2019 jester81
Written in my old style of writing. About losing love due to suicide
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winterdragon's avatar
WOW! :worship: this is almost flawles. it is straight , to the point and powerful. excelent job
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well I did m7y best to fill in the blanks . but I loved it
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jester81's avatar
Thanks. I wanted the readers mind to fill in the spots left behind by my words. That's why I used two words for every line of the poem
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silentscream47's avatar
i like this a lot. it really puts strong images into my head...
awesome work. i especially like the 2nd to last stanza.
-*- :petting:
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Aww thanks. The words Crimson Red in the second to last stanza are the colors of the coffin if you didn't catch that. (Crimson red lowered slowly) Thanks again I wrote it because you wanted something like the stuff further back in my gallery.
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yeah.. i didn't catch that but thanks.
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I agree, it does put vivid images in the head... wow, this has some powerful emotions. :petting:


~Olivia~
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Thanks again. This was written pretty quickly, I thought it turned out OK for such a short and quick poem
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