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Dark as midnight was her hair,
And her eyes were sapphires bright.
Her voice was like the song of birds
As she danced with feet so light.

This was Luthien, Thingol's daughter,
For she danced with elven grace,
While in the shadows watched Beren,
An man of mortal race.

Luthien saw him watching her,
So she cast a spell and fled.
And there Beren, a statue, stood,
Though he was not dead.

Eventually, the trance wore off,
And Beren found her once more.
He called out the name "Tinuviel,"
And Luthien fled no more.

She loved him from that moment on,
But this was not Thingol's will,
And he would not let Beren marry her
'Till he brought him a Silmaril.
Another high school poem.

Luthien, Beren, Thingol, and Silmarils (c) J.R.R. Tolkien
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Zireael07 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Brilliant! I love it!
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JenniferElluin Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! And thanks for :+fav:ing this one too!
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this! :D...I have some bad poetry I wrote a while back, but after that one review....:(
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JenniferElluin Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
"That one review"? Uh oh. Is this anything like the "one review" that killed my first attempt at fanfiction? Because really, I think you should take that kind of a review as a challenge to write something really awesome and blow the reviewer's mind! :D
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!

Err...I interpret Luthien's inner thoughts as being quite different the the popular view (I don't see why she couldn't have moments of self-doubt), one person took offense that it didn't rhyme, and now I'm depressed because I looked at the reviews again....
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JenniferElluin Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I definitely think Luthien would have had moments of self-doubt!
Took offense that it didn't rhyme? But poetry doesn't have to rhyme! In fact, most of mine doesn't!
Do not be depressed, Resto - the reviewer obviously doesn't know what he or she is talking about. :hug:
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
So do I...I mean, Tolkien really gives us no idea of what her emotions were most of the time, just what she did.

I know it doesn't...I had three reviews, and two of them negative. :( The other one took offense that most of the lines were questioning...

Thank you! :hug:
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
Curvo, have I told you that you are multi-talented?

[OOC: I like the way you tell their story, lol.]
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JenniferElluin Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:aww: Ah, thank you, Aunty Earwen!

[Thanks! :D]
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ninquetari Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
You're welcome!
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