The hair has a really nice flow to it. The character guy has a good expression on his face. The colar bone looks really well, I think it`s the best structured part of this pic. & you put in shading with the pencil which is good.
My only thing is that his face looks long, & that`s a personal preference. x.x There are characters with long faces, though. Um...The space between the eyes is good though so you got some structural work down pretty good. But his eyes just seem out of place. They are about in the middle of the head far as vertical placement goes.
But other than that, this is just fine. :3