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Evaporated with the rain

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There was a white blackbird on the path
perched calm in the middle of nowhere
singing tunes
of sadness.

There was a red blackbird on the road
perched tranquil against the wind
singing songs
of revenge.

There was a green blackbird in the way
perched cheerful above the water
singing melodies
of hope.

There was a black blackbird on the footpath
perched silently after the storm
reciting verses
of mistrust.

"I guess the plains are thirsty
I guess the mountains are hungry
I guess that the stones do not understand
the song that I want to show you ".

"Where are the colored blackbirds
who escaped from their cages?"

"Evaporated with the rain
along with their trills and wise words. "


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Translated from Evaporándose con la lluvia.

There are lot of things that get lost with the translation such as the word "mirlo" that transform in blackbird so it is a bit shocking the parts "white/red/green blackbird" or "black blackbird".

besides rhyme, it also get lost the rhythm and the words "senda, camino, sendero, vía" that are translated randomly as "path, road, way, foothpath".

Also the gender it is lost. The white blackbird was female.
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AnnaPaar's avatar
how come i never read?
maybe because hidden away in garden...

is a beautiful poem...
now go see spanish version... original...

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