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Bastian [mc136m] - Wyrm Stage by indyana Bastian [mc136m] - Wyrm Stage by indyana
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Dragon: Bastian
ID#: mc136m
Description: Machesri Glossy Mountain Haze Male Wyrm
Bondmate: Saga
Adopter: karimuffin ( Platinum Star Parent by indyana)
Mutations: Mountain Haze color mutation, Glossy color variant
Clutch: Machesri Clutch 14: Wild

Wyrm Notes: He's a Mountain Haze with flare!  Never mind the peaceful, soothing nature most Mountain Haze dragons exude-- this wyrm is a mash of Blue and Red traits with a spark of something extra.  He has the dominant, forward nature of your typical Red, with courage to back it up, but rather than aggressive, his core is inquisitive and insightful.  His prodigal telepathic skill at this young age hints that he could develop related abilities as he grows older.


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Machesri Male Egg (Current Version) by indyana


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:iconcyber-cypher:
Aww! I like how the purple creature is curling like that. They might as well be chasing their tails if they have legs, that is. ^_^

Here is a list of things you can improve on:

- The outline of the tails doesn't look smooth enough. It almost makes the curve pose less like a curve. I suggest doing line weight. :)

- Suggestion: I think it would be nice if you had put a shadow behind the creature. That way the background won't look so flat behind them.

- I don't know about you, but I think the nose should be more noticeable. It's pretty to see the nose. Make it darker, I guess. :)

Overall, your strongest points is the shadow and the pose. Hope this helps! ^_^
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EduartBoudewijn Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
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I'm seeing first of all that this is quite an older piece, so some of the points I'll name in this critique you may have tackled in the two years, but since it'll be kinda difficult to keep your current level in mind while critiquing this piece, I'll be writing this piece in a vacuum of sorts. 

I really like the design of this little wyrm, the way he is construccted makes him look very cute while also feeling solid. You have a good understanding of the form of this character as shown through your usage of shading. 

Having said that I think your most important improvement lies in the shading. Your shading (while placed properly) is very even in terms of values and very extreme. The highlights are all close to white and the shadows are close to black. Spreading your values around a bit more can really help your image feel more alive. Usually you reserve your extreme black and white shades for only a few points in an image to emphasize those area's. If your whole image in shaded in black and white the contrast loses all meaning and your image becomes a bit difficult to read. The white highlights also make him look very shiny, while I'd image that his hide would be more scale- or leather-like. Try to use some reference images to display your materials properly. 

I really love how you've shaded his eyes for example, this is a great area of the image that should have a lot of black-white contrast, but having that same contrast in the rest of the image takes away from the eyes. 

The grey background with a small shadow works to ground the character, but if you're willing to put a bit more work into the background, I feel like you could achieve an even better effect for your characters. If you're only interested in showcasing the character, that's fine, but even a very simple background with some basic colors and values can really help to tell a better story with your characters. Of course in the end this is your own decision. 

I do like the look of this character and I think that if you keep improving you'll get even better in a short amount of time!
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Spider-Bat700 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2017
Adorable. And, as far as purple reptiles go, he's much better than Barney. 
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks!
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Dianthus07 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2017
KAWAIIII!!!
No seriously, he's adorable! :meow:
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you ^_^
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:iconvanilla-flowers:
Vanilla-Flowers Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
Ah another one!! So cute!! I have to check this project out :O
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Please do! Always looking for new adopters. :)
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Summer-Rose-Ruby Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
You did a lot better than the last one great job
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah ha, this one was actually a couple years ago.  I'll admit that I also think this one came out a bit better on color shading though.
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Summer-Rose-Ruby Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
Your right 
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:iconleathertachi:
leathertachi Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
awwwwwwww so cute!!!
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you!
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leathertachi Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
^^
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:iconannasasake:
AnnaSasake Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
byefoxy and toy chica hugging 
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:iconannasasake:
AnnaSasake Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
You Broke Foxy's Heart (Chat Icon)   i  saing   hi   i      sad
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AnnaSasake Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!   cute      XD  Emoticon: Drunk     and   i   am    a    girlFoxy caramelldansen       i   love    art  fox-emote and   i   love    youFoxy Love 
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AnnaSasake Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
hi
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LegitHerobrine Featured By Owner May 1, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
*dies from cuteness*
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Blackheart7x Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
awww so cute :happybounce: Heart Heart Heart 
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karimuffin Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015  Professional General Artist
XD he's so CUTE AND PURPLE.

I honestly had no idea what to expect with this baby. I'm really entertained that I got a loud glossy variant for a not so loud character. His pose is absolutely perfect, especially to go with that description.

And I really do love the way you do eyes. *waddles off to find him a name*
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
He is very much is own dragon, and he apparently thinks Saga needs him in her life. ^_^  Don't worry, he's not all flash and bang.  Just enough to be interesting.
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karimuffin Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2015  Professional General Artist
:heart: I couldn't imagine him as all flash and bang. Though it's reassuring that Saga isn't completely up the creek without a paddle. She's worried about the curiosity though.

I've dubbed the baby Bastian, by the by.
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:iconindyana:
indyana Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:heart:  Will updated the records soon. 
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ixris Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my god, that pose is so flipping playful.  How darling!
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