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Bastian [mc136m] - Wyrm Stage

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A Bishen Realm / BishenRealm adoption.  Bishel dragons are growing adoptions earned by submitting art or writing for each stage.

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Dragon: Bastian
ID#: mc136m
Description: Machesri Glossy Mountain Haze Male Wyrm
Bondmate: Saga
Adopter: karimuffin ( Platinum Star Parent by indyana)
Mutations: Mountain Haze color mutation, Glossy color variant
Clutch: Machesri Clutch 14: Wild

Wyrm Notes: He's a Mountain Haze with flare!  Never mind the peaceful, soothing nature most Mountain Haze dragons exude-- this wyrm is a mash of Blue and Red traits with a spark of something extra.  He has the dominant, forward nature of your typical Red, with courage to back it up, but rather than aggressive, his core is inquisitive and insightful.  His prodigal telepathic skill at this young age hints that he could develop related abilities as he grows older.


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Machesri Male Egg (Current Version) by indyana


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Cyber-Cypher's avatar
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Impact

Aww! I like how the purple creature is curling like that. They might as well be chasing their tails if they have legs, that is. ^_^

Here is a list of things you can improve on:

- The outline of the tails doesn't look smooth enough. It almost makes the curve pose less like a curve. I suggest doing line weight. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>

- Suggestion: I think it would be nice if you had put a shadow behind the creature. That way the background won't look so flat behind them.

- I don't know about you, but I think the nose should be more noticeable. It's pretty to see the nose. Make it darker, I guess. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>

Overall, your strongest points is the shadow and the pose. Hope this helps! ^_^
indyana's avatar
Thank you for the critique!
Cyber-Cypher's avatar
You're welcome! :)
EduartBoudewijn's avatar
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I'm seeing first of all that this is quite an older piece, so some of the points I'll name in this critique you may have tackled in the two years, but since it'll be kinda difficult to keep your current level in mind while critiquing this piece, I'll be writing this piece in a vacuum of sorts. 

I really like the design of this little wyrm, the way he is construccted makes him look very cute while also feeling solid. You have a good understanding of the form of this character as shown through your usage of shading. 

Having said that I think your most important improvement lies in the shading. Your shading (while placed properly) is very even in terms of values and very extreme. The highlights are all close to white and the shadows are close to black. Spreading your values around a bit more can really help your image feel more alive. Usually you reserve your extreme black and white shades for only a few points in an image to emphasize those area's. If your whole image in shaded in black and white the contrast loses all meaning and your image becomes a bit difficult to read. The white highlights also make him look very shiny, while I'd image that his hide would be more scale- or leather-like. Try to use some reference images to display your materials properly. 

I really love how you've shaded his eyes for example, this is a great area of the image that should have a lot of black-white contrast, but having that same contrast in the rest of the image takes away from the eyes. 

The grey background with a small shadow works to ground the character, but if you're willing to put a bit more work into the background, I feel like you could achieve an even better effect for your characters. If you're only interested in showcasing the character, that's fine, but even a very simple background with some basic colors and values can really help to tell a better story with your characters. Of course in the end this is your own decision. 

I do like the look of this character and I think that if you keep improving you'll get even better in a short amount of time!
Spider-Bat700's avatar
Adorable. And, as far as purple reptiles go, he's much better than Barney. 
Dianthus07's avatar
KAWAIIII!!!
No seriously, he's adorable! :meow:
indyana's avatar
Thank you ^_^
Vanilla-Flowers's avatar
Ah another one!! So cute!! I have to check this project out :O
indyana's avatar
Please do! Always looking for new adopters. :)
Summer-Rose-Ruby's avatar
You did a lot better than the last one great job
indyana's avatar
Ah ha, this one was actually a couple years ago.  I'll admit that I also think this one came out a bit better on color shading though.
leathertachi's avatar
awwwwwwww so cute!!!
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AnnaSasake's avatar
sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!   cute      XD  Emoticon: Drunk     and   i   am    a    girlFoxy caramelldansen       i   love    art  fox-emote and   i   love    youFoxy Love 
LegitHerobrine's avatar
*dies from cuteness*
Blackheart7x's avatar
awww so cute :happybounce: Heart Heart Heart 
karimuffin's avatar
XD he's so CUTE AND PURPLE.

I honestly had no idea what to expect with this baby. I'm really entertained that I got a loud glossy variant for a not so loud character. His pose is absolutely perfect, especially to go with that description.

And I really do love the way you do eyes. *waddles off to find him a name*
indyana's avatar
He is very much is own dragon, and he apparently thinks Saga needs him in her life. ^_^  Don't worry, he's not all flash and bang.  Just enough to be interesting.
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