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I am mostly looking at this from the technical perspective. It appears to be a hoverbike of sorts, with a turbine in front and what I a...

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I am mostly looking at this from the technical perspective. It appears to be a hoverbike of sorts, with a turbine in front and what I assume exhaust on the other side. I have worked on aircraft engines before, and I can see that the parts between "entrance" and "exit" do not make much sense. For instance, the metal ribbed parts under the fuel tank look like regular piston engine parts - and there doesn't seem to be much connecting the flying parts at all. The air taken in by the turbine has nowhere particular to go, except maybe blow around the now useless piston engine which has no wheels to drive. Also, with this much fuel, it probably wouldn't get very far, even if it was a full-fledged turbojet.

Bonus: how is the steering achieved? The handlebars seem to be fixed solid, with no visible linkage to anything. I assume the meaning was to rotate the front part, like the front wheel on a regular bike, but steering with a jet engine usually happens with the plane's rudder, and sometimes with vectored thrusting, which happens in the back.

Of course, all of that can be explained away with magic, but it seems to attempt at least some technical realism (given that the girl is doing mechanical repairs and not waving some magical implement).

Same with lift generation - this thing needs wings and aerodynamic surfaces, there are so-called lifting bodies - essentially wingless aeroplanes with the fuselage generating lift, but they are fairly complicated and probably do not scale down well. The body is much smoother as well. (BTW, your "engine" does not have a cowling, neither on or off for repairs, that'll give you a lot of drag and waste engine power).

Also, the location seems to be a bit out of nowhere, a concrete wall with walkway seemingly hovering above fields in the distance. Perhaps that is logical in this character's universe, but it looks so unattached.

As for the rest, the idea is great and a jetbike does look cool - would love a more technically proper one, though. Some bits look a bit unfinished - mostly forgotten pencil strokes, as other has pointed out.

That all being said, I do really like the concept.

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3wyl Featured By Owner May 3, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
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htmlcoderexe Featured By Owner May 3, 2018
Whoa, that sounds scary! Sounds like a great idea, but a bit too... what's the word... inorganic? Also, it mentions something about receiving comments, what is that used for?

Or am I being paranoid and it's not some kind of weird viral marketing? Apologies in advance if I misunderstand.
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3wyl Featured By Owner May 4, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
ProjectComment is not for everyone. No doubt others feel the same way, but the good thing is that no one is stopping you from leaving the group or not joining the group. :)
 
I am not sure what you mean about "receiving comments, what is that used for". If you browse DeviantArt, there are many people who do not receive any comments. That is why ProjectComment is here. We ask people to give comments, so others may get them. In return, they get comments from other people. This is an improvement for some people who comment and comment, but get no comments.

I don't understand how this would be viral marketing. The group is a platform for members to give and get genuine comments to one another. If that was not the case, ProjectComment would not still be here, almost 10 years later. We have 500+ examples of constructive comments given and received by members of ProjectComment.
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htmlcoderexe Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2018
This honestly sounds a lot more positive, but I guess I am a bit paranoid with online stuff. My main problem is, I kinda have the attention span of a squirrel on speed, so 200 words is a bit above the average comment that I would, so to speak, be arsed to write at any given moment, you know? Is there like a lite version of this? I mostly write random gibberish, but it is positive random gibberish. Don't really care about the getting comments back thing, either (if I understood your system correctly). Yes. A lite version. The one-night stand to your couples club with weekly meetups.
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TheOnyxSwami Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2011
Thanks for the fave!
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htmlcoderexe Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
No problem man, awesome art needs more love (and faves)!
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TheOnyxSwami Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
You said it!
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htmlcoderexe Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011
I started coding the Ai project, although in VB. Looks like getting a cold (code! get it?!) improved my programming skills - I did some things I couldn't previously, and it's bug-free on first compile! Using placeholder images sucks, though.
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TheOnyxSwami Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
Thanks for the fave!
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knitty1121 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for the fave!
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