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Thank you for your interest in the project, C3 and I are very grateful and honoured by your contribution and collaboration.
I am Jack Danya Kemplin, the current owner and Editor-in-Chief of C3: Collective Crow Comics. C3 is a fanfiction website that has existed since October 2000, specialising in The Crow comics created by fans.
We are currently in need of an Artist for a full colour 4 issue comic book mini-series, the art style may be either Traditional Comic style (Marc Silvestri/Michael Turner/Randy Queen: Witchblade, Darkness, DarkChylde, Fathom), or Art Nouveau (Alphonse Mucha), or Ben Templesmith-style, or Bud Cook-style or Connie Faye-style.
Because it will be fanfiction there will not be any pay for this, it will be out of love for The Crow comics, and for your portfolio and promotion of your name. C3 has previously had projects with now famous comic book creators such as Ben Templesmith.
I use 3 e-mail addresses, kemplin2@juno.com for small e-mails, jackkemplin@gmail.com for ones with large attachments, and collectivecrowcomics@gmail.com is technically the one these sorts of stories are normally submitted through, but submitting it through the jackkemplin one serves the same purpose.
Plot:
In ancient Thebes, Pharaoh Amenhotep III’s newest and youngest bride, Tadukhipa, is caught in the embrace of High Priest Nakht; when the Pharaoh discovers this, he has his guard’s mutilate and curse both of them, mummifying and burying them alive, far away from one another, so they may never rest nor find each other again.
The goddess Ma’at, seeing this great injustice, chooses to send The Crow to resurrect them, so that balance can be brought back to the scales of justice by her feather of truth.
This series will consist of 4 issues:
Issue 1 tells the story of the avatars’ affair & murder.
Issue 2 telling the first half of the story from Tadukhipa’s point of view.
Issue 3 telling the first half of the story from Nakht’s point of view.
Issue 4 they find each other & work together to end the story.
More plot details:
Whenever Tadukhipa & Nakht reminisce of their deaths on their respective issues, they were chased by the guards, Nakht rushed Tadukhipa to the Temple of Ma’at where he hoped they could hide. While in there they prayed before a giant statue of Ma’at, begging for protection & justice. The other temple priests then appear out of nowhere & grab ahold of them & lead the guards & the pharaoh in. While still in front of the great statue of Ma’at, Tadukhipa & Nakht’s bodies’ are slashed up (Leaving Crow-like markings), they are wrapped up, & placed, alive, into sarcophagi. They are then buried on opposite sides of the desert.
Amenhotep is 48, Tadukhipa is 15, and Nakht is around 20.
When Tadukhipa returns, she, having been one of the queens, knows who the guards who did this to them were, so she goes after them.
When Nakht returns he, having been the High Priest, knows who the lower-priests who did this to them were, so he goes after them.
They meet up at the end to kill the remaining guard’s & priests as well as the pharaoh.
There will be two Crows in this story, the one guiding Tadukhipa will be albino & female, & named Munnin; the one guiding Nakht will be black & male, & named Huggin.
The rejuvenating rain that falls on the mummy avatars, will be a blood red rain.
At one point towards the end of the final issue, Tadukhipa disguises herself as a dancer with Isis-wings & a sword, so she may kill the Pharaoh. In doing so, she will look like Ma’at, goddess of Justice.
Munnin was sent to her by Ma’at, Huggin sent to Nakht by Thoth, husband of Ma’at. The Goddess Ma’at witnessed their murders. Ma’at & Thoth are both depicted as birds.
CHARACTERS
Tadukhipa:
A 15 year old Mitanni princess who’s father Tushratta arranged for her to marry her uncle, 48 year old Amenhotep III, Pharaoh of Egypt. At her wedding, she meetings Nackt, later falling in love with him, and when their affair is discovered, the pharaoh has them both mutilated, & mummified & buried alive. She is resurrected by the goddess Ma’at & The Crow, to bring justice & balance.
Artistic inspiration for Tadukhipa:
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Nackt:
A 20 year old Egyptian High Priest of the Temple of Ma’at in the Karnak Temple Complex. He presided over Amenhotep & Tadukhipa’s wedding, later falling in love with her. He was killed along with her when their affair was discovered. He was later resurrected by the god Thoth & The Crow, to bring justice & balance.
Artistic inspiration for Nakht:
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Amenhotep III:
The 48 year old Pharaoh of Egypt, he is sickly, has rotting teeth, and looks older than his years. He has reigned over Egypt since he was 12 years old and has many wives including Tadukhipa, her aunt Gilukhipa, his high-queen Tiy, & he has even married 3 of his own daughters. When he discovers Tadukhipa & Nackt’s affair, he has them mutilated, mummified, & buried on different sides of the desert.
Artistic inspiration for Amenhotep III:
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Plot:
Tristin Scott & Jack Danya Kemplin
Writing:
Jack Danya Kemplin
Art:
(artist)
Lettering:
(letterer)
Editing by:
Jack Danya Kemplin
C3: Collective Crow Comics
Editor:
Jack Danya Kemplin
The Crow™ © 2017 James O’Barr (under exclusive license to Top Dollar Comics, Inc and Crowvision, Inc.) The Crow™ and “THE CROW”, The Original Motion Picture © 1994 Crowvision, Inc. All rights reserved.
Any similarities between characters, names, and/or institutions, living or dead (or undead) is purely coincidental, but for instances of satire, and should not be inferred. This is a work of fanfiction, no part of it may ever be printed or sold without permission of Crowvision, Inc.
Issue 1: Temple of Love
PAGE 1:
Panel 1:
The harsh sun shines down on the ancient city of Thebes, in Egypt.
CAPTION
Thebes, Egypt
18th Dynasty
Panel 2:
From a balcony, the pharaoh Amenhotep, while a servant fans him, arrogantly scoffs at the exhausted slaves toiling below in the background, constructing monuments.
AMENHOTEP
If they only knew the glory their work shall bring to the gods, they would labour with more joy, and take pride in their toils. We all must suffer to bring them honour.
Panel 3:
Another servant, a messenger, holding a sealed, rolled up papyrus scroll, enters the room which leads to the balcony; Amenhotep still being fanned in the foreground.
MESSENGER
Your Majesty, a message has arrived from the king of Mitanni
AMENHOTEP
Bring it to me
PAGE 2:
Panel 1:
Still being fanned, and with the messenger standing in the background, the Pharaoh reads the unrolled scroll.
CAPTION
“To my Nimmureya, Amenhotep III, the king of Egypt, my brother, whom I love and who loves me:
For you may all go well. For your household, for my Kilu-Hepa, Gilukhipa, my sister, your wife of 20 years, who you love, may all go well. For your wives, for your sons, for your magnates, for your chariots, for your horses, for your troops, for your country, and for whatever else belongs to you, may all go very, very well.
For I, Tushratta, the king of Mitanni, who loves you, your brother-in-law; For me, all is not well--The Hittites desire my kingdom and are attacking us. We are in need of a great army, yet one we have not. We therefore must ask of this from you, my brother, whom I love.
In thanksgiving for the sending of your troupes, I Tushratta, King of Mitanni, and my Queen, Juni of Mitanni, shall give our Tadu-Hepa, Tadukhipa, our daughter, to be the wife of my brother, whom I love. May Simige and Sauska go before her. May they make her the image of my brother's desire. May my brother rejoice on that day.
I herewith send her, and she is on her way. May my brother now honor her at his pleasure. May Sauska, Ishtar, the mistress of heaven, protect us, my brother and me, a 100,000 years, and let us act as friends. May Simige and Sauska grant my brother a great blessing, and exquisite joy. May they bless him and may you, my brother, live forever.”
Panel 2:
Amenhotep lays the scroll down and dictates to the messenger.
AMENHOTEP
Inform Tushratta that I agree to his deal, and tell the generals to prepare the troupes, they are to leave for Mitanni immediately.
PAGE 3:
Panel 1:
Amenhotep returns to the balcony, looking over the construction.
Panel 2:
And looking back, he calls for one of his wives.
AMENHOTEP
Gilukhipa, come! I have news to share with you.
Panel 3:
The 35 year old woman joins next to him.
GILUKHIPA
Yes, my lord?
AMENHOTEP
Your brother, Tushratta, is under attack from the Hittites, so I am sending our armies to defend his kingdom.
GILUKHIPA
That is most gracious of you
AMENHOTEP
In return, he is sending me a new wife
GILUKHIPA
Whom, my lord?
AMENHOTEP
Your niece, Tadukhipa
Panel 4:
Gilukhipa is somewhat shocked at hearing this, but restrains her look, so as to not appear as if in protest to the pharaoh.
GILUKHIPA
But she is so young
AMENHOTEP
You have not seen her in many years, and time goes by quickly.
You must remember that if I were but a few years older, I could have been your father; yet look at us now.
Tadukhipa is 15 years old, well within marriage age.
Panel 5:
Amenhotep looks out at the sunset with a weathered and saddened look on his face.
AMENHOTEP
She is young, and I am old; the years have passed before me and I grow closer to leaving this world every day.
Though I have one surviving son, Amenhotep IV; my eldest son, Thutmose, whom I loved, and who was to succeed me in ruling this land, died.
We can never know when we will pass on to the next life--what if my younger son also dies before me? Then who will rule once I am gone? Who will carry on my dynasty? Who will make sure I am mummified properly, with all of the things I shall need in the afterlife?
Panel 6:
Amenhotep turns to Gilukhipa.
AMENHOTEP
You were sent to me in the hopes that you would bear me children, and in these 20 years, though you have been good and faithful, more sons you have not been able to give me.
Tadukhipa is young, she has many years for which she can give me sons.
GILUKHIPA
Yes, my lord.
PAGE 4-5:
Double page spread:
An epic battle, the Mitanni and The Egyptian armies slaughtering the Hittites.
PAGE 6:
Panel 1:
From a different balcony Amenhotep, fanned by his servant, looks down onto the main street of Thebes, watching the procession of the arriving Tadukhipa.
Panel 2:
Distant street level view: She is riding in a chariot, plated with gold and inlaid with precious stones, being drawn by a pair of horses with gold & jewelled reigns, followed by a fleet of camels adorned with gold and precious stones.
Panel 3:
Closer view, focusing on Tadukhipa: She is wearing a purple, green, & crimson dress, and adorned in bejewelled golden bracelets, armlets, necklaces, and a diadem headpiece. Her hair is long, full, black, and beautiful; her skin, soft, youthful, and without blemish. Her calm, assured countenance shows that she is a princess, doing her royal duties.
PAGE 7:
Panel 1:
View from distant above at a slight angle to the right: Inside of The Temple Complex of Karnak, Amenhotep and Tadukhipa are next to each other, kneeling in front of a giant statue of Ma’at. Between them & the statue stands the temple High Priest, Nakht, who is standing and also facing the statue, his arms lifted in praise, in one hand he is holding a book. Filling the temple, on either side of the main aisle, stands countless Egyptians.
NAKHT
We stand here, as in life and death, before the gods, whom we must all honour, praise, and offer thanksgiving.
Panel 2:
Normal angle view, from slightly behind and to the right of Amenhotep and Tadukhipa, looking towards Nakht and the statue: Nakht now faces the kneeling couple, his arms holding the book out towards them. Nakht is young and Handsome.
NAKHT
Place your hands upon the Book of The Dead, the book authored by the god Thoth, the book which we must all live and die by.
Panel 3:
Close up: Amenhotep’s hand now rests confidently upon the book, as Tadukhipa timidly places her hand over his.
CAPTION (TADUKHIPA)
I may not wish to marry this man, my uncle, who is old enough to be my grandfather; but I am a princess of Mitanni, and I shall do my duty.
Panel 4:
Looking from Tadukhipa’s perspective at Nakht, who is looking back at her with romantic desire in his eyes.
CAPTION (TADUKHIPA)
Wow, that priest is the most handsome man I have ever seen!
Get a hold of yourself, Tadukhipa, a princess’ life is not her own, princesses do not have the luxury of choosing whom they marry.
Panel 5:
Looking from Nakht’s perspective back to Tadukhipa, who is gazing at him with similar romantic interest and desire.
CAPTION (NAKHT)
This woman is as beautiful as the goddesses!
What am I thinking, she is the new queen, of course she looks like a goddess; I must not allow myself to get distracted by that which is the pharaoh’s.
PAGE 8:
Panel 1:
As the kneeling Amenhotep & Tadukhipa’s hands lay upon the book, Nakht, despite his feelings, continues presiding over the ceremony.
NAKHT
May the goddess Hathor bring you love, may Kebechet bring you purity on this day, may Isis protect your marriage, may Tawaret bring you many children and may Bes and Bastet protect them, and may the goddess Ma’at use your union to bring order and balance, justice and harmony to your kingdoms, and may they reign for 100,000 years, in this life and the next, and forever and ever.
Panel 2:
From Nakht’s perspective: The aged Amenhotep looks over, lustfully, at the nubile Tadukhipa, as she hesitates before saying her words which are to seal the bond.
Panel 3:
Normal, semi-side perspective: Tadukhipa stares deeply at Nakht, him equally so at her, as she speaks. Amenhotep continues to look at her lasciviously.
TADUKHIPA
I enter into his home, I shall move all of my belongings into his house, I shall dwell within it all my life.
Panel 4:
Nakht says the closing prayer.
NAKHT
It has been declared in front of the gods!
Declared upon the Book of The Dead!
All have witnessed this oath!
May the feather of Ma’at weigh it, and see that it has been made in truth within the depths of your hearts. May the gods protect and guide you, may they find honour in this union, and may this kingdom prosper forever.
Panel 5:
Straight on view from Nakht’s perspective: Amenhotep and Tadukhipa have risen to standing, their hands which were on top of the book, now clasped together in union. The crowd behind, on both sides, breaks out in roars of cheering.
NAKHT
We have a new queen!
PAGE 9:
Panel 1:
Distant shot: A large, lushly decorated bedroom, one of the walls is made up of ornate pillars, beyond which the slowly setting sun glows softly red. In the left of the view is a bed, fit for a pharaoh and his new queen, with feather stuffed mattress and pillows, and covered in silks of the richest colours. Near it stands Tadukhipa in her wedding dress, behind her is her aunt Gilukhipa, helping to undress Taduhipa, preparing her for her night with the Pharaoh.
Panel 2:
Straight-on close-up of Tadukhipa, looking slightly nervous; Gilukhipa, with a gentle and wise look, standing behind her, unwrapping parts of the dress off of Tadukhipa.
TADUKHIPA
Aunt Kilu-hepa--
GILUHIPA
My dear, it’s Gilukhipa now, we are no longer of Mitanni, we have left it and its names behind. We now belong to the pharaoh, and as such, are now daughters of Egypt and must go by Egyptian names.
Panel 3:
Tadukhipa, with a lovingly look, turns to face her aunt; Gilukhipa, having been in the same situation, tries to both comfort and advise her niece.
TADUKHIPA
Oh, my dear Aunt, do you not miss our home at all, do you not miss your old friends, your old name?
GILUKHIPA
Of course I miss it, I miss seeing the sun rise over its horizon, seeing the beauty of the clothes, tasting the food, hearing the sweet words and the songs of the Mitanni; but Egypt has now been my home for 20 years, I have grown accustomed to this land, to its foods, its songs, and its names--I am now just as much Gilukhipa as I was Kilu-hepa; and you shall be as much Tadukhipa as you were Tadu-hepa, you will get used used to this land, in time.
Panel 4:
Gilukhipa returns to her removing of Tadukhipa’s garments and preparing Tadkhipa for her night with her husband. Tadukhipa still worried, unsure, and questioning her place in the future.
TADUKHIPA
And Amenhotep, is he a good husband?
GILUKHIPA
He has given me an amazing roof over my head that only the gods can dream of, rich clothing, and exotic foods, for all these years, does that not make him a good husband?
TADUKHIPA
But what his temperament, his personality? Is he a friend? Do you get along?
Panel 5:
They turn to one another again, as Gilukhipa tenderly tries to tell Tadukhipa the realities of life which one must accept in order to be thankful for what they are handed in life. Tadukhipa still wrestling with these things which confront who she is inside.
GILUKHIPA
Tadu, You know I am not his first wife, nor even his second; his true love will always be his first, the Great Royal-Wife Tiye, mother of his seven children, mother of three of his later wives. His heart beats for her, and they rule together.
TADUKHIPA
So he does not care for you?
GILUKHIPA
He has taken good care of me, isn’t that enough?
PAGE 10:
Panel 1:
Tadukhipa gently wraps her hands around Gilukhipa’s lower arms, and looks at her aunt with a face that searches for answers on life, on the heart, on one’s dreams, as if pleading for her aunt to understand how she feels.
TADUKHIPA
Dear aunt, do you never yearn for a man who actually loves you, one who the very sight of makes your heart flutter?
Panel 2:
Gilukhipa, with a strong and regal, though slightly sombre face, looks at Tadukhipa, placing her hand on her niece’s upper arm. Tadukhipa looks down, with a sad, yet sternly dutiful face.
GILUKHIPA
A princess of Mitanni and a wife of the Pharaoh is not allowed such whims, you know that.
TADUKHIPA
I know…
Panel 3:
Gilukhipa’s perspective: From slightly above, extreme close up on Tadukhipa’s face as she looks with large, questioning, almost hurt, eyes.
TADUKHIPA
...but have you never experienced that?
Panel 4:
Gilukhipa becomes agitated by Tadukhipa’s insistent questioning, her prying breaking Gilukhipa’s heart, reminding her of how she felt at that age right after she arrived in Egypt, while she was awaiting Amenhotep; breaks her heart to see her niece struggling the same--breaks her heart that she has to snap Tadukhipa into reality, and break her heart.
GILUKHIPA
It doesn’t matter whether I have or not!
You should refrain from such thoughts, they will only get you in trouble.
We belong to the pharaoh, if we were to stray, we would be punished and know the jaws of Ammin.
It is best to be thankful that the gods have blessed us with such honour and luxury, and know that a princess is not free to love anyone other than her lord and her land.
Panel 5:
Gilukhipa’s perspective: Tadukhipa, now standing almost nude, with only small bits of transparent fabric hanging over her breasts and crotch, looks downwards, her eyes cold and rigid with the knowledge of her duties and that no matter how much she wishes or desires something, that she does not have control over her own life; yet through her eyes’ dead facade, can be seen their puffiness with her sorrow and a faint tear of heartbreak running down her cheek.
TADUKHIPA
Yes, I understand, Kilu...Gilukhipa, my wise and beloved aunt, now sister.
PAGE 11:
Panel 1:
Gilukhipa lovingly places her hands on Tadukhipa’s cheeks, gently lifting her nearly nude niece’s sombre head.
GILUKHIPA
Be good to Amenhotep, give him a son, and he will be very good to you--
SFX
Step
Step
step
Panel 2:
Perspective from the entrance to the room: Standing in the entrance, to the left, back facing the viewer, stands Amenhotep. In the distance of the room, Tadukhipa stands, her lithe, young body nude except for the transparent fabric which drapes over her breasts and crotch; she stands, looking incredibly sexual in figure, yet also vulnerable, her face full of trepidation. Her aunt Gilukhipa elegantly scatters away.
GILUKHIPA
--Here, your bridegroom comes to claim his maidenhead.
PAGE 12:
Panel 1, 2 & 3:
The aged Amenhotep circles Tadukhipa like a vulture, eyeing her supple body like a piece of meat, ready to be devoured. Tadukhipa nervously standing before him, almost shaking like a kitten faced with a ravenous dog.
AMENHOTEP
Yes…
...good…
...I see you are even more beautiful than Gilukhipa was all those years ago
Panel 4:
Close-up: Amenhotep stands to the right of Tadukhipa, his face extremely close to hers, his rotted, crumbling, blackened teeth, close to her mouth; her beautiful, youthful face, nervously wretching back in both apprehension of what she knows is to come, and disgust at his foul breath, as he seedily interrogates her, his left hand running across her lower belly, she responding meekly.
AMENHOTEP
You have a fine body to produce heirs.
Did your aunt prepare you for what is to come?
TADUKHIPA
Yes, my lord.
Panel 5:
He stands tall behind her, his thin, wrinkled, blotchy, almost mummified looking arms wrapping around her, cupping and squeezing the bottom of her breasts, pushing them upward; her face falls at his torturous taunting foreplay, her eyes closed, thin streams of tears falling from them, her lips bitten sorrow and fear. Amenhotep’s face flushed with lustful ecstasy.
AMENHOTEP
And you understand your duties?
TADUKHIPA
Yes, my lord.
Panel 6:
Amenhotep, still standing behind Tadukhipa, grabs her hair with his right hand, pressing his face against her scalp, his nostrils flared as he breathes in her scent.
AMENHOTEP
And you are ready?
TADUKHIPA
...Yes...
AMENHOTEP
Good
Panel 7:
Amenhotep violently throws Tadukhipa onto the lush, decadent bed.
AMENHOTEP
Then let’s get to it!
PAGE 13:
Full page:
Amenhotep’s perspective: The bed runs tall across the vision, engulfed in Amenhotep’s dark and ominous shadow. Tadukhipa laid atop it, her arms drawing her backwards towards the headboard, her hands clenching the blankets in terror.
PAGE 14:
Full page:
Amenhotep’s ominous shadow over the bed, shows that he is carelessly walking away. The blankets are recklessly bunched up, Tadukhipa arms wrenched above her head, grasping desperately onto the blankets, her face covered in tears and wincing in pain, the fabric over her crotch, drenched in blood.
PAGE 15:
Panel 1:
Gilukhipa appears above Tadukhipa’s writhing body-
GILUKHIPA
Tadu...Tadu, I am so sorry...
Panel 2:
-lovingly wrapping it in clean linens-
GILUKHIPA
...He is becoming erratic in his old age...
Panel 3:
-cradling her bloodied and weak niece.
GILUKHIPA
...He used to not be like this...
Panel 4:
Tadukhipa, fragile, bruised, weakly looks at her dear aunt.
GILUKHIPA
...I am so, so very sorry. I should have known he was starting to go mad when he began to take on his own daughters as wives to produce heirs--I am so sorry.
PAGE 16:
Panel 1:
Dawn breaks around the aunt who has been cradling her tender niece throughout the night.
GILUKHIPA
We must carry out the rituals now.
Panel 2:
Gilukhipa runs a string of twine between two of the pillars-
GILUKHIPA
There are traditions which must be kept
Panel 3:
-And hangs over the string, Tadukhipa’s blood-soaked coverings.
GILUKHIPA
The people must see that their pharaoh has been honoured and his new bride is doing her part to continue the royal lineage
Panel 4:
Gilukhipa closes up around Tadukhipa a full opaque white linen dress-
GILUKHIPA
Now you must be purified-
Panel 5:
-and shrouds Tadukhipa’s head in a similarly coloured veil.
GILUKHIPA
-through the sacred baths in the temple.
PAGE 17:
Panel 1:
Guards carry Tadukhipa through the street in a lectica / litter / sedan chair / sedia gestatoria, flanked with guards carrying flabella. Gilukhipa stands on the lectica behind Tadukhipa’s throne.
Panel 2:
The guards have now lowered the lectica to the ground, in front of a large stone door within the temple complex. Tadukhipa steps off of the Lectica onto the stone floor, while Gilukhipa is ahead of her, Gilukhipa’s arm about to push open the large door.
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Dialogue
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Gilukhipa opens the door to reveal a large Mikvah
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Future things to write for this issue:
The Pharaoh agreeing to send the statues at a later date, once Tadukhipa has born him children.
Tadukhipa often takes leave to go to the temple & pray, so that she may spend time with Nakht (Comment on her foreign beauty and wonderful smelling her hair).
One night, a fellow priest spies on their affair, & informs the pharaoh.
Shortly after the pharaoh is informed of this, she returns home.
The Pharaoh sicks his guards on her, she running from them.
She runs to the temple to inform Nakht that the affair has been discovered & she is being chased.
They try to find a hiding place in the Temple of Ma'at, but can't.
So they pray before the giant statue of Ma'at, begging for protection & justice.
The other temple priests then appear out of nowhere & grab ahold of them & lead the guards & the pharaoh in.
While still in front of the great statue of Ma’at, Tadukhipa & Nakht’s bodies are slashed up (Leaving Crow-like markings),
they are wrapped up, & placed, alive, into sarcophagi.
They are then buried on opposite sides of the desert.
Issue 2: Tadukhipa’s story
PAGE 1
Panel 1:
The harsh sun shines down on the ancient city of Thebes, in Egypt.
CAPTION
Thebes, Egypt
18th Dynasty
Panel 2:
The silhouettes of two men treck across an endless waste of desert, thebes in the distant background behind them.
Panel 3:
Closer, torso-up shot of the two men, both looking slightly dehydrated, MAN 1 looking angry, while MAN 2 looks sorrowed and annoyed.
MAN 1
Now look what you’ve done! Gone and gotten us banished! I told you to not be so reckless in our endeavours.
MAN 2
Hey, how was I to know there was a temple guard watching me?
MAN 1
You must be an idiot to not think the Priests of Amun would protect the treasures of the gods!
I should have never became friends with you, look at where it has gotten me, I am going to die in this desert-
PAGE 2
Panel 1:
MAN 1’s complaints are interrupted when he trips forward. MAN 2 laughs.
MAN 1
-Aaaarrrrgggggg!
MAN 2
Hahaha!
Panel 2:
He has tripped over a large mound of freshly upturned sand. He begins to sit up, and brush himself off, while MAN 2 looks on.
MAN 1
What would they bury this far out here?
MAN 2
Hey, we might find our treasure after all!
Panel 3:
MAN 1 isn’t going to let MAN 2 get all of the credit for this, the two semi-playfully argue.
MAN 1
Thanks to me, not you! I tripped on it.
MAN 2
Yeah, but if it wasn’t for me, we wouldn’t be out here.
Panel 4:
The men, with their hands, start scooping away at the mound.
MAN 1
Well don’t just stand there!
Help me dig it out!
MAN 2
Last one to it is a dung beetle!
PAGE 3
Panel 1:
Extreme close up on carved wood covered in ominous-looking hieroglyphs, MAN 2’s pointed finger running across it.
MAN 2 (Off Panel)
That which lies within this sarcophagus is cursed to ever wander, never to find rest.
At the end of time, may the feather of Ma’at pass judgement and the scales of Anubis be tilt against them, let Ammit devour their heart.
Panel 2:
The two men, now standing in the large hole they have dug into the ground, nervously stand before a sarcophagi, which is covered end-to-end in the ominous hieroglyphic curse.
MAN 2
Uumm...on second thought, you open it!
You are right, you deserve it.
MAN 1
No, you, my good friend.
You are the reason we are out here, after all.
And besides, you are the one who was so hungry for treasure,
so please, have at it.
MAN 2
Okay,
but if it is treasure, I get all of it.
Panel 3:
Close up on the upper side of the sarcophagus, a clay seal prominently centred in the framing.
MAN 2 (Off panel)
Now to get a rock large enough to break this seal
Panel 4:
MAN 2, in the foreground, picks up a large rock, the sarcophagus behind him, MAN 1 behind it, and over the top of the hole they are in, can be seen the horizon, which is quickly filling with swirling, enchanted, dark clouds.
MAN 2
This should do
MAN 1
Hurry up, a storm is coming in; let’s open this, find out whatever’s inside, and then find cover!
Panel 5:
Close up of MAN 2’s hands smashing the rock against the seal, it crumbling.
SFX
Smash
MAN 2
Well if you want any of whatever is inside, help me push this lid open!
Panel 6:
The two men push the lid as the storm builds in the background.
MAN 1
This better be gold and gems, and not some damn corpse!
[Pant Pant]
MAN 2
Of course it is treasure, why else would they want to scare us away from opening it by writing some bogus curse.
[Pant Pant]
PAGE 4
Full Page Splash:
Close up, straight on: The face and upper torso, with crossed arms, of a barely wrapped, dry, rotted, female mummy with a face contorted in agony, pops up from the open sarcophagus! The lighting is darkened by the stormy sky.
TADUKHIPA
AAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PAGE 5
Panel 1:
The men frantically hurry to get out of the hole, away from the corpse, and to try and find some shelter from the oncoming storm which rages in the sky.
MAN 2
Let's get out of here!
MAN 1
She’s not our only concern,
how about the storm?!
MAN 2
There’s got to be somewhere we can go!
MAN 1
We are in the middle of desert!
There’s nothing around us but sand!
TADUKHIPA
AAAAAaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Panel 2:
Shot from below, looking straight up into the sky: A single white crow feather glides down in a circular pattern from the heavens.
Panel 3:
The feather wafts above Tadukhipa’s mummified corpse.
Panel 4:
The feather lands upright in Tadukhipa’s hair, wedging its quill into a thin strip of wrapping which encircles her head. Blood-red rain sprinkles against her.
SFX
Ka
SFX
Drip
Drip
Drip
Panel 5:
It begins to rejuvenate her-
SFX
Drip
Drip
Panel 6:
-partly repairing, restoring, and hydrating her pale, parchment-like corpse-
SFX
Drip
Drip
Panel 7:
-until her skin, while still pale with death, has become supple; her muscles and curves have returned. The wounds from the attack on her remain, but the effects of death and mummification have been repaired.
SFX
Drip
Drip
PAGE 6
Panel 1:
Issue 3: Nakht’s story
PAGE 1
Panel 1:
Panel stretched long across the top of the page:
The harsh sun shines down on the ancient city of Thebes, in Egypt (Exact same as panel 1 of issues 1 & 2).
CAPTION
Thebes, Egypt
18th Dynasty
Panel 2:
Almost identical to panel 1, but with the enchanted swirling storm clouds coming in.
Panel 3:
Same, but with even more clouds & darker, the daylight blotted out, & lightning flashing across the landscape.
Panel 4:
The rain is soaking into the sand, causing the objects beneath to begin to rise up.
SFX
eeerr
eeerr
eeerr
Panel 5:
Nakht’s sarcophagus slowly rises out of the sand.
SFX
Eeeeeeeeeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Panel 6:
it has risen completely out.
PAGE 2
Panel 1:
Lightning strikes the sarcophagus.
SFX
KLASH
Panel 2:
close up on the lightning striking the seal.
SFX
KLAZZ-CRACK
Panel 3:
The lid blows off!
SFX
KLA-BOOM-SPLICK
Panel 4:
Nakht’s lifeless mummy lies inside the broken, charred, smoking sarcophagus.
SFX
Sizzle
Sizzle
PAGE 3
Panel 1:
Shot from below, looking straight up into the sky: A single black crow feather glides down in a circular pattern from the heavens.
Panel 2:
The feather lands on Nakht.
SFX
Ka
Panel 3:
Blood-red rain begins to pour down on Nakht--
SFX
Drip
Drip
Drip
Panel 4:
It begins to rejuvenate him, bringing reparative hydration to is dry, parchment-like skin.
SFX
Drip
Drip
Drip
Panel 5:
His eyes open and he breathes life.
NAHKT
[gasp]
Issue 4: Their Story’s End
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