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Doing a Maid's Job - Page 8/8 by hippo2 Doing a Maid's Job - Page 8/8 by hippo2
In March, I asked you what I shall work on next. hippo2.deviantart.com/journal/… You voted for a comic with David and Amelia with TG elements. So here's the comic.

Previous Page: fav.me/d7isxbq

There's a sequel comic to this story: fav.me/d7lcokk
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Midnight-Nightscape Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Student Writer
I liked it. It was a fun entertaining story in which David got to learn one of the most important lessons of human (also work place) interaction: empathy.
 
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EmperorNortonII Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Professional Traditional Artist
Quite a story!  Nice work!
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SaphaiaNefertiti Featured By Owner May 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Fantastic story. Karma always get what it wants.
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kaaslave Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
LOL, great ending! :D

You should turn this into a sitcom.
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RalphThebandit Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Cute comic!
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Rod-Roger Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Welp, that was bad comic.
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hippo2 Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
What don't you like about it?
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Rod-Roger Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Really the premise all things consider since really all the young man did was a harmless joke. So if you wanted a TG lesson should have been done where he acted like a total Dick about it. Even then that be breaking his character
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hippo2 Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
I understand your point. Amelia clearly overreacted here. And then, things got out of control when Mr. Massri made his move on Daphne.

It's difficult to forsee the complete impact of this experience on David's character. I have planned that he is more considerate to Amelia now. In bed, he'll use his experiences from the other side of the fence to make Amelia really happy.
That is if he doesn't loose all his faith in Amelia. I don't think he will react that extreme, but Amelia might have to win some of his faith back. Or David will talk to Martha about it.

Anyway, now we have some tension in the relation between Amelia and David. I see some potential for new stories and comics.
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Rod-Roger Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
While true it could have been done much better if a little extra care was handle in writing. Esepically by have alecherous character like mr. Massri, what gets me is you made a quite a shallow foe just to make tension instead f making it more in depth. Its fine when you want a sort of bad guy a week deal but with stories like this you basically made a starwman of men who had a lubedo and active sex drive.
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hippo2 Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
It's not the libido and sexdrive I critizise. It's how he abuses his power and how he puts Daphne under sexual pressure. The last page gives an indication that he did it to his secretaries before. I critizise this behaviour.
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Rod-Roger Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Well that too but you need to be well more adult with it or if you bring that up go the full nine yards. As for the Punishment I rather the wish be him exposed and feel what he was going to do to the Hotel.
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hippo2 Featured By Owner May 18, 2014
Showing a rape scene in a comic would be too much for dA. In the first draft, the scene in the elevator was much more explicite, but because of the dA policy, I tuned it down, a lot. Or what do you mean?
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