Concerning Rosamond Grey Page 1 by Hestia-Edwards on DeviantArt

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Synopsis:
In the late 19^th century, little Rosamond Grey snuck into the woods one night, and was found unconsciousness the next day. For years afterwards she suffers from seizures from an unknown ailment. Dr. Glass is loosing hope for her cure, until a strange foreigner hints of a different cause…

Materials: SuperBlack ink, I-C paper, G-pen, maru-pen, spoon pen, Copic markers, Photoshop for words and cleanup.

For easier reading, check out the comic at rosamondgrey.smackjeeves.com

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LadyAlluvia Featured By Owner Edited Jan 10, 2017 Hobbyist General Artist

I read the first two chapters for my comment:

What I like in this comic is how very detailed the pictures are, we can see the details on human faces, clothes, the surrounding within the house, furniture and the nature outside the house. The art of pictures is amazingly well done also adding light and shades to the complete picture.

Aside the caligraphy font in first pages that was hard to read I don't have anything else to notice about the improvment suggestions. Just keep the simple font so everybody can read it.
The whole story gives a feeling like it is going to be a mystery connected to detective work; I wonder will drama elements and romance also be involved?

What surprised me about characters is the sudden appearence of Ellli Oldfellow, who just pops out after, apperently being seen stalking Rosamond. He sends a letter to Dr.Glass and asks for a meeting while the doctor doesn't know who Elli even is and agrees to meet him? Calling a police should be more logical behavior here since he has been stalking after all, instead of letting such a stranger act like a doctor himself? Can he prove he is a doctor himself even? Getting on somebody's property without permission is still a crime. So if he wasn't hired to be here, it means he either has a personal interest in Rosamon, or he is hunting mysteries around the world for own interests? The sickness might be special but still accepting help from a stranger, who is a stalker also makes me question Dr.Glass's common sense for just including him like that. Elli might be a criminal as well or a psycho.
What I would also want to know is, how is Mr.RockBurn related to Rosamond? Is he a family freind, relative, her financee...? And where are her parents in the whole story? We see servents around her but parents aren't mentioned.

Hestia-Edwards Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2017 Student Traditional Artist

Thank you for the review.

I might change the hand lettering to a font for the printed version, as some people wanted hard copies. I'm glad the art is pleasing.

I wondered if I made the doctor too easy-going, but not many people have mentioned that he should have notified the police. Rockburn's relationship to Rosamond is shown in the first few pages of chapter 3. And of course you find out more about Oldfellow later on.

Thank you for the time to read the two chapters. :D (Big Grin)

Aribraxas Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2016

Okay, I'll read this and put it into a Favorites Folder for yay. That way if anyone looks in my favorites they'll find it in it's own collection.

Hestia-Edwards Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2016 Student Traditional Artist

Thank you for reading, and for all of the favorites.

Aribraxas Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2016

I put webcomics I find and like into their own collection folder. I'm making a webcomic to and I know how hard it is to get out there. You can check out my webcomic sometime if you'd like. :happybounce:

Or You can look at my favorites and check out the other webcomic artists I've found on Deviantart, there are some many interesting people here. Meow :3

The-Moniklr Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2016 Student Digital Artist

Color me intrigued! This seems like a fascinating story. :3 It's very atmospheric, but maybe you could push the shadows on her figure a little more? :3

Hestia-Edwards Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2016 Student Traditional Artist

Thank you, I'm glad it got your interest.

It is quite possible that the shadow is not long enough.

LadyAlluvia Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2016 Hobbyist General Artist

you should link the next page into the description of every page simply. That makes it easy for readers.

nightchildmoonchild Featured By Owner May 18, 2016 Hobbyist Writer

I like your art style. She looks cute!

Hestia-Edwards Featured By Owner May 18, 2016 Student Traditional Artist

Thanks!

Nel-Tu-Animoke Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2016 Hobbyist Traditional Artist

The beginning is nice, it got me a little curious.

So I'm gonna read the next page at least.
The use of strong shadows adds some mystery and creepiness to it. I like how the viewer gets a closer look at the main character panel by panel, I think that's a great way to introduce her.