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Chapter 3 Page 1 of Concerning Rosamond Grey

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Published: May 5, 2015
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Synopsis:
In the late 19th century, little Rosamond Grey snuck into the woods one night, and was found unconsciousness the next day.  For years afterwards she suffers from seizures from an unknown ailment. Dr. Glass is loosing hope for her cure, until a strange foreigner hints of a different cause…


Comment: I was pretty pleased with this page, particularly with the backgrounds. :) I am also closing in on the reason why I think Rosamond and Mr. Rockburn look off: their chins are too long. So I will continue to work on that.

Materials: Pilot drafting ink, Pro-white,  I-C paper, maru-pen, spoon pen, Copic markers, Photoshop for words and cleanup.

Characters and story are original to Hestia-Edwards

updated 4/14/18--this one took forever to clean up. What a mess. 
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MrRemoramanHobbyist Traditional Artist
GOD IN HEAVEN, I love this victorian feel!  I've tried to capture it, but you really have it down!  The third panel is simply stellar! I love it!
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
Thank you...Though I confess, I took a photograph and traced it. ;) But it turned out pretty well. 
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MrRemoramanHobbyist Traditional Artist
You cheater!

Just kidding, it's ok.

Check out my stuff some time, if you HAVE the time. I've been trying to get the "art of the mansion parlor" down, but..eh...
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SnailforPresidentHobbyist Traditional Artist
I love the detail put into the furniture of the third panel
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
Thank you very much. :D
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7thCommentor General Artist
I have read through it all and I can not tell why I am intersted how this continues.
You did something right and I am not sure what it is.
It's most likely my curiosity what role Eli Oldfellow plays.
I'm sorry that I can't give you a detailed critique but Comics are just not mine.
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
Yay! HugI'm glad you enjoyed what I have so far. And, whether it's in a comic or written form, it's hard to give a critique if there isn't much there to start with, so no worries there. 

If I did something right, I'm not sure what it is either, to be honest.Sweating a little... 
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7thCommentor General Artist
Hmm. I thought about it and I think it is the pacing.
The story has the right flow- the right mixture of story telling and action.
Something I usually want in the things I read.
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
Thanks for spending time thinking about it. :) I confess I do the pacing "by feel", and am unable to calculate how it works. 
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7thCommentor General Artist
I don't really know how to regulate pacing in a comic ^^;
That's somewhat easier when writing a text, I think, since you can mix describing the surroundings (the snow crackled under their boots as the marched to their destination) with character interaction.
It's something I worked on for rewriting old pieces.
I also go by feeling but I told myself that I have to be more desciptive to make the things I write more alive.
I guess my thumb rule is describing what my senses would tell me.
Your detailed backgrounds probably contribute to it.
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
What's weird is that I originally wrote fantasy stories before getting into comics, and I could not figure out how to pace a story: do I add description here, how much, when do I describe a character, how much action do I describe after a dialogue, etc. For some reason, pacing in comics make more sense to me. 
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7thCommentor General Artist
Interesting.
I guess that is an experience thing.
I have read a lot of books in the past(one per day as a minimum) so I may just have a good feeling what my stories should feel like.

What theme did you write about?
As a literature addict I am always interested into stories.
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Hestia-EdwardsStudent Traditional Artist
Goodness! How did you find enough interesting books to read? I think the most I read was in high school, and averaged 36 books a year (ranging from Narnia to the Iliad).

I wasn't overly concerned about themes at the time (being told that themes come when the story's more developed), but my first serious attempt was a high fantasy that I finished a few chapters; I had the habit of rewriting the first chapter to perfection. Later I wrote another high fantasy set in the same world but earlier, and finished it at 27,000 words. Later I tried an urban fantasy, wrote a chapter or two, hit a creative block and took a year off story-writing. Then I discovered comics, and here I am. :)
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