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In the late 19th century, little Rosamond Grey snuck into the woods one night, and was found unconsciousness the next day. For years afterwards she suffers from seizures from an unknown ailment. Dr. Glass is loosing hope for her cure, until a strange foreigner hints of a different cause…
Comment: I was pretty pleased with this page, particularly with the backgrounds. I am also closing in on the reason why I think Rosamond and Mr. Rockburn look off: their chins are too long. So I will continue to work on that.
Characters and story are original to Hestia-Edwards
updated 4/14/18--this one took forever to clean up. What a mess.
You did something right and I am not sure what it is.
It's most likely my curiosity what role Eli Oldfellow plays.
I'm sorry that I can't give you a detailed critique but Comics are just not mine.
If I did something right, I'm not sure what it is either, to be honest.
The story has the right flow- the right mixture of story telling and action.
Something I usually want in the things I read.
That's somewhat easier when writing a text, I think, since you can mix describing the surroundings (the snow crackled under their boots as the marched to their destination) with character interaction.
It's something I worked on for rewriting old pieces.
I also go by feeling but I told myself that I have to be more desciptive to make the things I write more alive.
I guess my thumb rule is describing what my senses would tell me.
Your detailed backgrounds probably contribute to it.
I guess that is an experience thing.
I have read a lot of books in the past(one per day as a minimum) so I may just have a good feeling what my stories should feel like.
What theme did you write about?
As a literature addict I am always interested into stories.
I wasn't overly concerned about themes at the time (being told that themes come when the story's more developed), but my first serious attempt was a high fantasy that I finished a few chapters; I had the habit of rewriting the first chapter to perfection. Later I wrote another high fantasy set in the same world but earlier, and finished it at 27,000 words. Later I tried an urban fantasy, wrote a chapter or two, hit a creative block and took a year off story-writing. Then I discovered comics, and here I am.