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Inside a dark cavern,
Inside a mind,
There is only one thing,
That you may find.

A skull, the head,
Where it all starts
Where emotions are bred,
And where there are hearts

Down further, the ribs,
The casings to protect,
They cage in the one heart,
That beats harder then the rest.

To the Left and right, What else should we find?
But the arms, the antennaes, that feel for emotion.
They search in vain, however, they may find one kind
Of love that suits them and their mission.

At the bottom, there exists the legs,
The movers, the ones that walk and run,
When love is found, they become crazed,
They wish to find faster the only "one"

And non-existant is the brain,
When it comes to emotion,
There is no thinking involved,
To put love into motion.

Resist temptation,
Search a little longer,
You'll find someone who is greater, and more caring then all the rest.
A poem that helps me to understand the untouchable feelings of the human psyche. Its not necessarily a love poem.....
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RosinAngel Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2005   General Artist
I really like this, you show tallent. Very good :)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2005   Writer
why thank you.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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freez3l Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
See, this is the kind of writing about love that actually works. Can one tie it down with ink? Hell no. It just happens. You find that one person and bam, Cupid's shots start regging.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
thank you, and with a little work, this poem can be good...
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freez3l Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
Hell, I'd say it's pretty good as it is, seems ever so slightly "forced," though.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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freez3l Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
:nod:
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
i know what you mean, thats why i'm going to work with it.
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little-sky Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
don't know how to describe your poem but i love it!!
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
thank you, but i am going to do a lot of revising...
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Lord-Fox Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
i'm loving this piece, but you didn't right much about the lips :)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
i figure its more about the emotion then the sensation, but i will contemplate that for my revision. thank you.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
Truer words have never been spoken
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FenrirsFollower Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
i think this explans it all very well, yet love is unexplanable and therefore this attemp is void, i'd say don't examen love, leve it while you can...

yet this is good stuff, you should perhaps try and rewrite it again put it up.. untill your really satisfied. :)

just an idea.

FF.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
ah i see, yes i know, its hard to not examine this sort of thing...I think I'll rework it until it's really great....then keep it to myself.
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