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My heart is at the breaking point,
I can't go on much longer,
I'm weak but so weary.

My lungs will give way soon,
The road is long and narrow,
I'm suffocated but so breathless.

My legs can't go much farther,
The rocks are hard against my feet,
I'm sore but so full of pain,

And I can't even stand up now,
And I can't even comprehend,
My situation grows so cold,
This is my road, it's full of bumps,
And I'm ever alone but so lonely.
this is meant to be deep and meaningful. As you may know, i do not think highly of my poetry, because i wrote it. Everything could use improvement though. The point of me saying this is that you don't have to like my poetry, because even i dislike it.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2005
heh, here's another one I can relate too.

Good work! Keep it up!
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005   Writer
i will...in case you haven't heard, apparantly i'm supposed to be making this into a book....
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005
Yea i saw, good luck with that.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005   Writer
i hope it works out or doesn't, i don't care which.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005
*chuckles* yea... i've been hoping to get some of my stuff published. Doubt that will ever happen.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005   Writer
don't say that, otherwise it'll never happen.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005
well, first I'd have to try
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2006   Writer
exactly.
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Faerietopia Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2005  Professional General Artist
You have a unique tallent even tho you don't think so. Have you ever considered making a book?
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2005   Writer
it'd be a very short book...All that i've submitted is most everything i've written. There's some other really good ones that i can't find, and are probably deleted.
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Faerietopia Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005  Professional General Artist
Keep writing, and soon enough you'll have enough material for a book.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2005   Writer
i guess so, but I dunno if i wanna charge people to read my works. I.E., selling the book, publishing it....
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