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After the Rain

I’ve never had a beating heart,
I’ve never had a soul,
I’ve never felt the warmness of flesh,
I’ve never been whole.

I’ve never seen a loving moment,
No one’s ever shown me love,
I’ve never looked inside myself,
And found that which is spoken of.

Only in dreams can it be caressed,
And dreams, I have not.
Only in hopes can it be seen,
And see, I cannot.

But as I lay, a rotting corpse,
I soon realize my mistake,
For dreams have kept me alive,
And hoping is all I can take.

The rain is coming;
O, how it comes,
Thunder and lightning pounding
At my deceased ear drums.

No longer can I take this,
No longer can I wait,
No longer can I stall
No longer shall I procrastinate.

For the rain is gone,
The love is true,
My cold dead heart
Beats only for you.

After the rain,
All is made anew,
Even my endless
Love for you.

I can’t hide it,
You know it too,
Though separated by spiritual boundries,
I still have great love for you.

All the world can try to stop you,
And all the world may succeed.
But they’d only make it better for us.
If you were dead, like me.

Then together, we’d be together,
And dance like we did in life
Never did I know what love my Megan had,
If I only I knew that in life.

She being the most interesting,
She being the most creative,
I can’t suppress it anymore,
It can’t be sedated.

After the rain, O, after the rain,
I did realize my fault.
For love is not a hindrance,
But a great gift from God to us all.
The poem that inspired the drawing is right here. Please enjoy.
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Athazagoraphobias Featured By Owner May 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
What a nice and hopeful poem. The rhyming was very well-done! :)
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Xathrax123 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2007
I'm glad I clicked that link :D Great job !

You use a very good sctructure(which I also prefer using) and the poem flows very niceley. Only thing I dislike is repeating I've never and no longer. Personally I try to avoid such things. I also think it's a tad too long. Prose should be long, but poetry should be either short or contain ~5-6 stanzes at maximum(my personal oppinion) and carry the message in them. If it's longer it's a song rather then poem.

I'll have to check the rest of your poems too
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kitafish Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2007
I really enjoyed the description in this piece - the title itself suggests to me the grey descending as the light returns... but that might just be a personal interpretation.

I particularly liked For love is not a hindrance, it made me smile because similar thoughts have been plaguing me for not too short a while, too.

The only thing that held back the poem for me a little was that sometimes the flow wasn't very consistent due to an uneven meter throughout. But that's coming from an open poet who finds sticking to set stanzas like you have very difficult. So really, you've done quite well.

(N.B. As for your username, is that a reference to the author of the novel given to Lestat by the Body-Thief in Anne Rice's Vampire Chronicles, per chance?)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2007   Writer
H. P. Lovecraft was a horror writer, who's style was much compared to Poe's, though I prefer Lovecraft to Poe. He was much more creative.

I've never read an Anne Rice book in my life. -_-

Thanks for the critique. I haven't gone by stanzas in a long time. I almost forgot this poem was here.
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upsidedown-insideout Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2006
And not to disrespect what others have said, but there is nothing-wrong o a long poem? Actually they’re my favourite kind, it jut gives us more detail which we thrive for, so I don’t understand why others would think you should shorten it, the only problem to long poems is if you fail to keep our attention and drone on but I personally don’t think you did either:)

sorry for thre double post and the fact that I never keep my messages 'in two' >.<
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2006   Writer
It's cool, I like your comments, you're one of the few people on here who actually looks that deep into my poetry. I don't care if you double post.
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cool then, glad so=)
:giggle: 'cause I'm a manic with a keyboard and everything double posts ^^
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upsidedown-insideout Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2006
Beautiful title^^ there are just some titles that ‘draws the reader in instantly’ and this defiantly is one in my opinion.:) I love the word usage in this, there is a certain simplicity to it that gives it that effective touching feel that melts your heart.:) The simple rhymes were ‘neat’ and beautiful also. As for the flow it was a bit off but I don’t think that had too much of an effect on the entire poem, just the length of the sentences varied a little to much but nonetheless it was still an effective poem, I guess the simplicity effected it so is that the structure needed not show itself off too much, but I thought it as a pity you broke your little pattern of words starting off at the start of the line, for example;

Only in dreams can it be caressed,
And dreams, I have not.
Only in hopes can it be seen,
And see, I cannot.

and think you should have kept it up maybe.

Anyway I must agree nicely ended, my favourite stanza was;
‘All the world can try to stop you,
And all the world may succeed.
But they’d only make it better for us.
If you were dead, like me.’

Lovely job, you put a lot of emotion into simple words, and give it such strenght and that takes talent :)
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upsidedown-insideout Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2006
Beautiful title^^ there are just some titles that ‘draws the reader in instantly’ and this defiantly is one in my opinion.:) I love the word usage in this, there is a certain simplicity to it that gives it that effective touching feel that melts your heart.:) The simple rhymes were ‘neat’ and beautiful also. As for the flow it was a bit off but I don’t think that had too much of an effect on the entire poem, just the length of the sentences varied a little to much but nonetheless it was still an effective poem, I guess the simplicity effected it so is that the structure needed not show itself off too much, but I thought it as a pity you broke your little pattern of words starting off at the start of the line, for example;

Only in dreams can it be caressed,
And dreams, I have not.
Only in hopes can it be seen,
And see, I cannot.

and think you should have kept it up maybe.

Anyway I must agree nicely ended, my favourite stanza was;
‘All the world can try to stop you,
And all the world may succeed.
But they’d only make it better for us.
If you were dead, like me.’

Lovely job, you put a lot of emotion into simple words, and give it such strenght and that takes talent :)
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PurpleTallest Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2006   Writer
Aaron, that is so sweet.

You + Megan=adorable love.

Your poem made me feel all warm inside. It was so sweet and romantic.

May you two be together forever.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2006   Writer
well, that's what I'm hoping too. Its hard though, when your so young.
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Pessi-Mystic Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
i love this poem it is written with such emotion and feeling.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
why, thank you very much.
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Pessi-Mystic Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
well u deserve it, its a great poem.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
well, thanks for your continuous compliments on my poem. May i suggest other readings from my gallery in this genre?
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Pessi-Mystic Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
ok well i will do, how about u have a look at mine, n see what u think, not quite as long as yours mind
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2006   Writer
I promise to you i will, but it will be tomorrow, its getting late here.
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Pessi-Mystic Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2006   Writer
cool that ok, thanks. hope u got some sleep!
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hiddenregret Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2006
i like it just the way it is... i feel dead too...:)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2006   Writer
who doesn't feel dead at least once in their lifetime?
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hiddenregret Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2006
ive been dead all my life,i was never alive ...well maybe once upon a time
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dontkillthellama Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2006
its sweet... but i think its a bit long... you made it last longer than it should have... it reminds me of the corpse bride :)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2006   Writer
poems can be as long as the author desires, and when it was shorter, it didn't feel done.
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dontkillthellama Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006
thats cool... but i suggest you have a look over it... read through it a couple of times... :) please
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006   Writer
...if you insist, but don't expect any changes to be made.
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dontkillthellama Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006
:) thats ok... but if you want to improve... you should be open to some critisism... even if you dont change anything... listen anyways :) it helps me
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006   Writer
I know, I'm listening to you, I'm just afraid to change something that everyone else seems to like the way it is.
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dontkillthellama Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006
dont be afraid... If you want to change something then do it... and if you dont want to listen to what someone says, dont... some people might just be being nice... who knows... do what you want buddy
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006   Writer
oi, now I have to think, first time I've done that in a while.
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Synthetik909 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2006  Professional Artist
Incredible work... very strong emotions! Powerful work.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2006   Writer
well, your getting interested, aren't you? thank you for your comments.
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M-Allcock Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2005
Cool rap song, deep meanings man ;)
Just kidding, this is really well done, but it feels like it needs a rhythmic change somewhere, being so long and everything.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2005   Writer
Well, it's not meant to be a song...it is just a poem, i think the rhymes are fine, but i will take it into consideration. Thank you for your suggestions.
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Sporenza Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2005   Writer
This poem was truly heart felt, and I was in the perfect mood to read it.

I've recently just re-established my faith in love. And what a great way to consolidate by that poem.
:heart:
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2005   Writer
I had forgotten that you hadn't read this one before. thank you, glad i could help with your re-establishment.
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freaky-blue-eyes Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2005   Writer
very nice poem, the way the words manupulate your feelings than plays with them is remarkable...:thumpups:
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freaky-blue-eyes Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2005   Writer
:thumbsup: there we go
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2005   Writer
hehe, yes, ebert and roper give my poem, 2 thumps way up, :lol: all joking aside, thank you
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SkippyJr Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005  Hobbyist Filmographer
Very nice writing,
Very kind words and descreptions,
I liked this poem.
:)
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005   Writer
thank you.
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Faerietopia Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005  Professional General Artist
I love the sensibility you show in this poem. And yes, it's a feeling that attacks us all. No one could have describe it better. Two thumbs up.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
thank you. While i'm at it, thank you all. I'll continue to write poetry.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
:clap::worship::clap:
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005   Writer
.....thank you, i never expected this one to be this popular.
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SillySnowFox Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2005
Yea, I know whow that goes. The ones you expect to be popular arn't and the ones you dosn't expect are.
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FenrirsFollower Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2005
a long powerful poem, it's .... just... so... uhmf.. again i can find no words to discribe it, i think if you start labeling it, it wouldn't be enough, saying it's good is an insult. i love that you have been able to draw away from the whole, "poems have to rime", thing.. i find poems that break that "rule" to be greater than, rims..

simply amazing. :) and i look forward to read more

FF.
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2005   Writer
Thank you for the great comment, people tend to gravitate towards this poem. Breaking free of the constrictions of poetic "rhyme" is one of my trademarks i suppose.

I will continue to write, if those who are out there continue to read.
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UNIesque Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2005   Digital Artist
Ooo that was long...but awesome! I didn't know you could write like that. o.o I wish my lil' bro could do stuff like that...;_;
And I won't tell your sis about it.
But she just informed me she became a deviant so there's no telling when she'll find out...
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H-P-Lovecraft Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2005   Writer
seriously? thanks a million, i'm kind of self concious about my poetry. Grayson can't do this stuff because.....he's extremely beyond help, to put it blatantly. well, if Katy joined, i suppose the more the merrier.
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PoeticNonesuch Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2005
Very nice descriptions of emotions throughout, but I especially liked the last stanza. It was beautiful. Nice job :)
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