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The way you have made Trappy's expressions. The way you have drawn everything. I can legit feel what he is feeling at the moment .... It's so well done, that's why I rate the impact 10/10. And I see you got lazy in making his feet it the first box hun XD but I would have been as lazy as you anyway lmao XD.

And I only see 4 kids .... WHERE IS GOLDIE'S GHOST AAAAAARGH (sowwy I wuw Goldie (No I don't ship her (yes I take Goldilocks as a she and don't give 2 pancakes if someone doesn't like her to be a girl XD)(and I am bisexual so-) with me lmao)) Or Goldie's ghost IS there but another child is missing ...... FRACKING-

I also just LOVE how you illuminate the ghosts. One day you will make me cry on how good you are at this :') o wait yo you already made me cry lol XD

Also, I'm not able to tell what that thing is behind Springtrap in the 5th frame, is it a tree and star or something else? Just asking cuz bad eyesight after that Hellfire drawing XD

Other than that, I'm too lazy to find out a flaw because raisins, but it's really good my friend.
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Okay, okay, I know it seems a little unrealistic for me to put 5/5 stars on everything, but as I was going through the list, there just didn't seem to be a reason not to! (I put my points into bullet points to make it easier to read since I'm a little all over the place.)

- For starters, the color pallet you used is beautiful and yet still makes a solid impact! (I like how the borders are also purple, it's a nice touch!) Purples, pinks, and indigo colors usually help convey a softer tone (in my opinion) but when used here, you created a great environment that conveyed mystery and a slight hint of fear, that's a job well done!

- I like seeing the lighting increase in the third panel, to show how the ghosts are approaching-that's a great attention to detail that a lot of artists often overlook! I also like how wide and alarmed Springtrap's eyes look in this panel, it does a great job of portraying his mood. (The eye glows are nice, btw.)

- Speaking of lighting, I love how you used it to convey depth in the souls of the lost children on the last panel. Additionally, the classic crying eyes are conveyed so well! They look very lost and empty, especially since the eyes are mostly all of what you can see. I also like how their speech bubbles look more spirit-like as opposed to Springtrap's. (Another small detail that makes a HUGE impact!!!)

- While I'm rambling about those small details, I love how you've designed the characters to fit your style! They look soft and cute-looking, (like the backgrounds and atmosphere) and still manage to convey those not-so-cute emotions like rage, sadness, and in this case, fear. You're also great at showing the age of the characters! This is something I struggle with personally, so maybe I'm a bit to easily impressed by this, but I love being able to tell who is a child and who is an adult.

- One thing many comic artists struggle with is designing a comic so that the reader can easily read it, (The page layout, to put it simply,) I have no problems reading the comic and/or understanding what order I'm supposed to read it in. I like how you ended most of your pages with the last panel being a cliffhanger, it really leaves me wanting more!

Jeez, I have so much more to say such as how your lineart is beautifully colored to how much of an impact the reader gets from this piece, but I'm sure you don't want to hear me ramble on anymore about this, (ha ha) so in conclusion:

NICE JOB :)

I love this comic so much, it's a delight to see an update on my notifications! I know you probably wanted to hear me point out some negatives to help you improve, but I can't find any, and I'm not going to go really nitpicky about one pixel not being colored, if you know what I mean. I feel like all you can do from here is practice if you want to improve! Other than that, I've got nothing left to say. Have a spectacular day and keep on drawing!
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indianblade Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
Chilren when going up to your murderer you must first catch his attention... Also you can not all hide behind Billy... (It looks like they're hiding behind the one kid don't judge me)
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AnimalLover670 Featured By Owner Edited Jun 28, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
In a weird way this reminds me of the Tell Tale Heart.

He must feel pretty damn guilty. Did William/Purple Guy use Springtrap's suit to kill the children? I mean, he was an animatronic in a pizzeria for children, so it makes sense for Springtrap to care for them. It would also make sense for William to use one of these animatronics to lure them away from any adults and kill them like that. This also explains why he had the corpse of William inside of him. I'm predicting that William used Springtrap's suit to kill the children and that in the end, that didn't really work out as well as he intended. And Springtrap feels guilty.
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WarriorcatsMaplespot Featured By Owner May 1, 2018
One question: WHERE GOLDEN SENPAI!?!
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:icongorth02:
Gorth02 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2018
Kids this is why you don't do drugs look at springtrap
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:iconindianblade:
indianblade Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Hobbyist Writer
XD more like that's what I see after/during an anxiety attack!
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AlexBG2003 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2018  New Deviant
LOL XD
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:iconcocoaisme2334:
CocoaIsMe2334 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
LEAVE HIM ALONE ALREADY JESUS CHRIST YOU AREN'T HELPING
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:iconmilocloodie:
MiloCloodie Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2018  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Beautiful
And please leave Springy alone ;-;
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:iconneon-lololol:
Neon-lololol Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2018  Student Digital Artist
.... oH NOW I KNOW WHAT THAT THING IN THE 5TH FRAME WAS!!!! IT WAS JUST THE LINE THAT ATTACHED TO THE DIALOGUE BOX TO SHOW THAT IT WAS SPRINGTRAP SPEAKING-
ARE YOU CEREAL-
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:iconpjsansy:
pjsansy Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ya know, actually his face in the first panel reminds me of mecha sans
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:iconpjsansy:
pjsansy Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know, springtrap isn't frisk, but still.
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:iconpjsansy:
pjsansy Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2018  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh no.............
Trauma...............
Yo!
These kiddos look like multiple little charas goading frisk into a genocide lol
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MonokromeDemon Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
CREEPY GHOST CHILDREN!!!
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:iconpinkandred:
PinkandRed Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's settled, I'm drawing fan art. I love this.
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:icongrawolfquinn:
GraWolfQuinn Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2017
: OOO !!! Really? Can't wait to seee!!! <333
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:iconkattepigen:
KattePigen Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
As i said... the sins of the past is bound to catch up to you when you are at your lowest...
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:icongrievers27:
Grievers27 Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
oh no
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:iconcorbinlouisblais:
corbinlouisblais Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2017
Welp, the kids found out their killer is still alive.
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:iconfnafandspringtrap:
fnafandspringtrap Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2017  Student Digital Artist
The lighting in the 3rd panel is AWESOME
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:icontwinkleweird:
twinkleweird Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Is it bad that I find those ghostly dead kids adorable?
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:iconvirtualwolfie:
VirtualWolfie Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2017
★_★
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DarkDragondoesFNAF24 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
NOOO LEAVE SPRINGLE ALONE *calls ghostbusters* who ya gonna call? GHOST BUSTAZ
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:iconannasofia7:
AnnaSofia7 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2017  Student Writer
But what if they catch springle accidently? D:
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:icondarkdragondoesfnaf24:
DarkDragondoesFNAF24 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
SH--  *sees springles being caught* NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
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Csokaka Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
Bruh xD

Nice one
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:icondarkdragondoesfnaf24:
DarkDragondoesFNAF24 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
*ghost busters theme intensifies*
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WillowRustle64 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Why do I pity a murderer.
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:iconblueshadow13:
BlueShadow13 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
The last panel is when that one kid you really hate transferred back into your class
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doripingvin Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
His face, omg!
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angelandspringtrap Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I saw you made a meme of that fourth frame in the comments and you said something about the dead kids ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
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Aquaspringflare Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*drinks sweet tea* this is one of the best pages because of the lighting and shading,shading was always hard for me...good job*trys to drink sweet tea but there's no more*dang need more teaLlama Emoji-09 (Drinking Tea) [V1] 
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:icontwiliightzone:
twiliightzone Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
nooooo don't hurt springtrap anymore ;-;
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:iconbonniebro136:
Bonniebro136 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Professional Filmographer
awwwwwwww DEAL WITH IT BRO. DONT BE A WUS. DONT LET UR DREAMS BE DREAMS
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:icongrawolfquinn:
GraWolfQuinn Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017
mOTIVATIONAL
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Bonniebro136 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Professional Filmographer
wow, how funny and original =p
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:iconoctobi:
octobi Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017
KICK HIS ASS, KIDS!
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:iconsimplealpha:
SimpleAlpha Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Student Digital Artist
NO, DONT BE RUDE TO SPRINGTRAP
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:iconoctobi:
octobi Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017
he killed kids. it's gonna take a lot for him to redeem himself.

and after the twisted ones i hate him more--
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:iconkimbleeisintheshower:
Kimbleeisintheshower Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Poor Springie
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ShadowDragon1000 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Now I think I understand y Springtrap hates to be alone. If I saw them if every time I was alone I would probably not want to be alone either.
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MiloTheCheeto Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017
Is this what Springtrap feels every time he's alone?
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GraWolfQuinn Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017
yes :')
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:iconsimplealpha:
SimpleAlpha Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017  Student Digital Artist
I think it is what Springtrap feels when he's alone. Poor Springtrap ;-;
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Mal21-meme Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
I'm new here and holy this series is so cool!
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GraWolfQuinn Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2017
Hey, welcome to the party~! ^^ Hope you enjoy your stay B)
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PastelRibbonsxx Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
O SHI
SPRINGPAI RUN
RUUUUN
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00game00 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Student General Artist
WOW, this page looks absolutely beautiful!! Oops! Heart 
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Delilah, YOU REALLY NEED TO COME BACK VERY QUICK (even when I know she is not coming back soon I'm still asking ؛-؛)
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KingGigabyte Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Professional General Artist
I love this ! 
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PuppetFactory Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
springy is trapped
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StarEmber Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2017
The expressions/emotions are so well captured in these panels, in a way it can make you feel what he also feels when encountering such a thing.
Really amazing work on this c:
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