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i.

seen, undoubtedly
so gracefully stepped;
exhalation of debt
owed to none

a miniature trek
of the tongue
laden with melodies
sung to the back
of the sun

there's a wonder in hearts,
a pull to the stars
from the oceans,
a flight
from the moorings


ii.

there's a wander to hearts
as sure as the stars
fill the oceans
with light
till the morning


iii.

all held breaths
do expire
and all heroes
turn liar
inevitably

can you tell
is the fire
worth the burn,
the dive
worth the struggle
to breathe


iv.

if you can
tell me

if you're able
trick the words
into stable forms

shapes ripped from wavers
torn straight out of air

and devil-may-care
I will answer


v.

I can dance around
any conversation
with ease

my teeth
skim surfaces sweet
then retreat


vi.

there's a blunder in hearts
short circuits the stars
fill with motions
in spite
of our mourning


vii.

can you call it adoring,
being subject to the spin of the system?


viii.

I took a stroll
through the orbits

let the gravity enormous
have its way with me

and when the sun
strayed from me

I found myself
coldly amorphous


ix.

what on earth
did I do
to deserve this
x.

the impact
on the surface
was negligible
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Venry Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student General Artist
This was terrific :clap: congrats on the DLD
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012   Writer
:bow:

thank ya kindly!
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2012   Writer
Endless appreciation.
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Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012   Writer
:heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2012
:D
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Kymira12 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello! :wave:

I have featured your wonderful piece of literature in my Journal. When you have time, you should check it out here [link] :la:

P.S If you would like me to remove it, just send me a note and I will :hug:
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner May 27, 2012   Writer
I am honored!

:heart:
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Kymira12 Featured By Owner May 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww! Well you deserved it! :D
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Paulwe Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
At first I though that it was a bit... well, have you heard the term 'purple prose'? It seemed a bit over-literary.

But after reading the whole thing, I must say, it's excellent.
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   Writer
haha, that sounds like me all over.

I appreciate the keen examination. :D
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Paulwe Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, it's just that I'm sort of jaded when it comes to literature, what with all these crappy free verse poems and Twilight ripoff novels, so you'll forgive me if I jump to conclusions sometimes.

I like the poem because it has an unconventional subject and the style is so interesting. Keep up the good work!
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gliitchlord Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   Writer
I definitely appreciate it.

<3
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