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Scott Pilgrim Comicverse, Kim/Scott
  What does Scott remember about Kim?

"Why don't you -- like, tell me about you and Kim, or something?" Ramona said, flopping across the bed.

"Kim?" Scott asked.  "What about her?"

"You dated her."


"Is your memory of that time period hazy, too?  C'mon, inform me."

"Okay...there was this girl in my...history class...I think...and it was Kim.  We had to do a thing together.  She had freckles?"



She had freckles, dusting her shoulders and the top of her chest and her thighs.  And it was...he had seen them before, or some of them, but he had never...they had never...god...

"Are you..." Is this... "okay?" he asked.

She nodded.  "Mmhm."  Her leg shifted, and it rubbed, and god.

"Okay."  He should say something, shouldn't he?  Or ask what she...what she wanted.  He opened his mouth, but didn't have the words.

Her touch drifted across his chest, around his waist.  She looked calm, but her hands were shaking.  "Shh," she said, and, "Listen to this song.  This is a really good song."

He listened, to the melody and the rhythm, to the sound of her breathing, to the rustle of the blanket, and he felt her around him, and he saw freckles...


"Um...We started a band -- I had a band with my other friend, and we needed a drummer, and Kim was...uh...a drummer."

"Okay...That's it?"

"Yeah, I moved.  I moved here.  It kind of ended.  We changed..."
This particular drabble is based on two specific scenes from the comics, but I think (hope) it stands well enough on its own that you can understand it even if you don't remember/haven't read them. The dialogue framing the piece is an actual conversation between Scott and Ramona in volume 3 (tweaked ever-so-slightly), and the flashback itself is based on a single panel from the beginning of volume 2.

Also, this is the closest thing to a true drabble I've ever done. I suppose that's a kind of accomplishment.
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epyonavenger Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2010
Quite the interpretation! For a first "true drabble" it's quite masterful. Also, I got a chuckle out of Scott's internal monologue there. Guy needs to keep his head in the game. XD
generalzoi Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2010
Yes, but it's Scott. He does the best he can. :D

I like putting my own little spin on what happened in the comic. Because really, who knows what they were thinking?
fortheloveofpizza Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
It sometimes amazes me when I read something you wrote and whatever pairing you decided to work with, it just works and makes sense. I think that is a true testament to how well you are getting these characters and just how well your writing is.

I really like this drabble. Because of its scarcity it gives it this kind of poetic feel, which adds to the nostalgia. And that frame where the Kim quote is from is totally one of my faves. Good job! :D
generalzoi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
Thanks! I've long had the habit of thinking of characters from movies or books as fully developed people in their own right, and I think that really helps when it comes to writing things like this. It doesn't feel like it's my story so much as theirs, I just happen to be telling it. Hopefully that does not sound totally crazy...

Haha, I don't do poetry much, but it's pretty cool that's what you got.
writer212 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
Wow...I really like how you interpreted the panel from Scott's point of view; the phrasing was very true to the character. The dialogue tweak works pretty well, though it's disappointing that the original dialogue doesn't make much sense in this context (not that it's your fault; you made the right move to make the writing work).
generalzoi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
Yeah, the dialogue didn't quite work, but for some reason Scott saying, "She had freckles?" just kinda stuck with me, and I really wanted to do something with it. I think the dialogue at the beginning works pretty well, but finding a way to close it was a chore. Oh well.
flamehead23a Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
wow. this is fantastic. it's fantastic for two big reasons.

A) it fits so seamlessly in with the canon, I can fully and completely incorporate it into my head-canon one hundred percent guilt free

B) you're right. it's a true drabble. that's something I don't think I've ever accomplished. props.
generalzoi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
I don't really have any guilt about my head-canon, messy as it may be, but I'm glad this drabble seems to fit so well. It wasn't actually conceived as a drabble, but there's only so many words you can write about a single panel. I think it turned out well for what it is.
flamehead23a Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
very much so.
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