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My Sweet Indulgence- ch1 pg8 by genaminna My Sweet Indulgence- ch1 pg8 by genaminna
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The last one I have. ^^; I might re-do this page later. :/
I wonder if anyone (who saw them at my other site) will notice something different... :giggle: probably not, lol...>_< )

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"My Sweet Indulgence" story, art and all characters included are © Rejena Smiley
(Which is me!) ^^
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lndzbrdn Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
If that were my sister, I'd have to initiate an assassination. :lol: And Kichan's hair looks really good! o.o Very nice. :thumbsup::heart:
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POE1 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
Good facial expressions :clap:
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
teheheh, thanks!! :giggle: :heart: ^.^
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Yoshi23 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
this is awesome!!!! :heart: all your pages are jam-packed, it makes the reading more interesting ^___^ i'm looking forward to reading more!! you're doing such a wonderful job, your style is seriously amazing!!! :clap::clap::clap::faint:
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol, oh the flattering, lol...:faint: :heart:
thank you so much for reading, love :love: :hug::hug:
Tho I'm still working on it [my style] all the time! ^^ :hug:
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Yoshi23 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
aww you're welcome!:glomp:
why of course ^___^ heheh i'm always changing my style too ^^;
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
hehe, well, the more we learn~ :giggle: :D XD
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Yoshi23 Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
:nod: yup, that's true ^_^
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s-blue-faerie Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2008  Student General Artist
lol interesting :)
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
hehe, I'm glad you think so :hug: :D thanks!
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s-blue-faerie Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Student General Artist
your welcome :hug:
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Jenca Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so cute! I love Kichan's friend in the background! Fight for justice! lol, good job.
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
haha, thank you~ :D :hug:
glad you like her friend, lol! :XD: XD
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Jenca Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, lol! :hug:
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HPhantasia Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008  Student
Wow. Her sister is so much more conservative. :wow:
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol, yeah >_> heheh :lmao: :giggle: XD
:hug::blowkiss:
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Trin-chan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
I think your original story is very nice. You have your own style as well and it complements your story :)
Something you do better is the layout. It's sometimes quite confusing (especally pg6 was not very easy to understand - i got it after looking a while at it, though).
Perhaps more gaps between some pictures (like on pg7) would help? On the other hand sometimes blending, like the right and lowest picture on pg 8, fits very well, too.
All the detail of the background (and it must be a lot of work to draw that much background) it takes a lot of focus from the main characters. Like the bushes around the upper right speech panel or the well on the left.
I like your use of the patternstuff, though :) Makes it look more professional.
Summary: I like your stuff but plz make it a bit easier to understand on first glance, that makes reading and viewing your stuff more enjoyable.

Thanks for reading and keep up the good work :D
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks for that! :hug:

God knows I can always get better at my paneling and such, lol!
(My current biggest problem I'm trying to fix)

These were done a year ago tho, but that's no excuse, since it's still something that hasn't been completely resolved yet. I'll take all of your advices tho, in the next coming pages! :love: thanks!! :hug::hug:
I'll try to make the bg's less distracting too, hehe ^^; there is a happy-medium for everything, heheh. ^^; :hug: thanks! :w00t: ^^

p.s.-- page 6 was hard to understand? *_* (I ask because, it's almost the simplest arrangement, to me) Did you mean at first glance, because of the 'order', or because of the confusing detail and such? Like, if I put a space between the 1st panel and the 2nd row of 3 panels, do you think that would make it any better...? : o
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Trin-chan Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
:D
I thought pg 6 was hard to understand because I allways have problems if the pictures are aligned vertically. I never know what pic comes first and which next and so on. I came up with the solution of top right, middle right, upper speech bubble left pic, lower speech bubble left pic and then lowest right.
I don't think spaces could be very helpful here.. perhaps a bit... but how about "layering"? My suggestion would be like this:
[link] (plz excuse the crappy drawing... but I hope it get's my point across. and S means speechbubble)
The most important thing when you begin on the right side and use "normal" western reading direction is IMHO that you have to make sure that the fist panel is looked at first. otherwise it get's confusing.. :D
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol, but the western way is left to right, so the biggest panel (on the left) would be read first... It doesn't begin on the right side-- it beings on the left. ^^; ...
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Trin-chan Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2008
then I didn't get it right *g* sorry... ^.^
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
It's okai hehe ^^; sorry about the confusion ^^; (perhaps I should put it on the first page that you read it left to right...) ^^;
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Trin-chan Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2008
i think it's allways good if the speech bubbles that are meant to be read frist are the highest on the page.. this way you read from top to bottom without confusion regardless of the reading direction ;) and i think i got it right and wanted to read it in western style... but perhaps it did not make as much sense to me as "my" solution... but in the end it does not matter as much... because, how do you say in english..., i got the gist out of it? :D

Keep it up :D
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Trin-chan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
It should have been "sth. you could do better.." in line 3 of my comment
DA should offer edit buttons.. *sigh*
And plz excuse my english ;)
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol, it's okai ;) :D XD
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clamjamfly Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Hahaha!

I'd LOVE to see more! This comic is making me feel comforted inside, for some reason. Maybe it's because there's some beetchy diva telling guys they're ugly? Just my cup of tea. B)
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
heheheh! :giggle::lmao:
I'm so glad you feel that way! :love::love: :D
Comfortable? :) That's a nice way of saying that; I've heard it before on this comic ^^ :hug: hehe, thanks so much! :hug: :D
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
ERM
* I've NEVER heard it before on this comic
LOL >.>
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Jennoasis Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
YAY MORE AWESOME PAGES! :D
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol! wheee~ 8D XDD
thanks! :hug:
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Jennoasis Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008
Of course!
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ArtisticParadigm Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
If I saw my sister acting that way, I would get mad too!! That just means she's being way too critical :omfg: Loving this so far!! Looking good ;)
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks so much, gal~!!
yeahs, she is being very critical, rights? ^^;
*sigh* ^_^ :hug: :D
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ArtisticParadigm Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hehe yea XD But I still like her :]

You welcome :love:
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SRHtheHedgehog Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Ah this is so good *w* I'M KEPT IN SUSPENSE! 8D
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol! 8D I seem to always do that...:paranoid: lmao ^^; ^^; XD thanks! :hug: :w00t: :D
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Spiritstalker Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
"Fight for justice!" LOL. xD I would buy this. Really, I would. You obviously put a lot of time/effort/art-love into your comics.
I wanna read the rest of it. <-- (whiny 5-year-old self) Hehe. ^_^
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
heheheh! :giggle: :blush: thank you so much!! :hug: Really, you would buy it? : o ! yay! :hug: even tho you say it online already? hehehe :giggle:
Not forcing you to say yes, but it would be interesting to show those huge companies that you can still makes sales for the higher quality 'official' stuff after someone's already 'experienced' it.

I'm glad that you see that I put lots of time, effort and art-love into my comics :love: hehehe~!! :hug: :giggle: :D thanks again!
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Spiritstalker Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2008
Yeah, I'd buy it, as long as I could find somewhere to buy it. :nod: Even though I've already seen it, its spiffy and looks like it'd be worth shelling out some money for. Mhm. :D I'm sure that there are plenty of other folks who feel the same way.
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BekaDavisStudios Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
*gobbles up your comics greedily* More please. :D *burp*
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lol! :D I hope, soon!! ~:hug:
:aww: ^^ thanks for reading!! :D
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Kupo-chan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Aha, lordy, you ink so damn well! I mean-- It's like, breath taking how wonderfully you can. And traditionally, that makes it a billion times better!

I'll comment on all of the pages soon, they deserve it!
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
hehe, it's okay if you don't hehe~ but thank you so much for the nice words~ :hug: :D :hug:

lol, traditionally is the way that feels the most naturally for me, so...^^;
hehe, thank you!! :hug::glomp: :D :blowkiss:
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Carl-Riley-Art Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
nice page!!
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
thank you!! :thanks: :D :D
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Campbell Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
More! I demand more!
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
lmao! :lmao: more soon, I hope! :giggle: hehe, thanks!! :hug::hug: :D
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beyrob Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
My dear, that girl is an ice cold bitch. Sure she's attractive but come on snap outta it! :P. It seems her sister is a little more Earthy, so I like her already :D.

:hug: I love it so far. :heart: hehehe
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genaminna Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
hehehe, yay! XD :hug: thanks for your opinions! lmao, and yes, I agree!! ^^; ^^; XDD haha~ glad you like Kichan~ :D :D at least you like *one* of 'em haha~
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beyrob Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
I don't know anyone else yet ^^; maybe when i get to know them :D
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