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chewbacca111222's avatar
*Dale Gribble* Boo! You suck! Not nearly enough farts in this part! Where is Akura's butt in this one?
Seriously though, very well done with a great cliffhanger. You really got to double check your time and stuff though, because at the start...The farting session is going to take place at 4:55pm, but then immediately when he is thinking to himself the time to make it to the recital, he says the session would be done at 5:05pm, which is only 10 minutes. It is a minor detail, but a detail nonetheless! Otherwise, keep up the good work (even though it is already written)!~
Gchris5523's avatar
Dang it, Dale. N-Not every single chapter needs a fart! I-It's story driven... ;~;

Yeah, but it's because of the earlier idea from the point of time which he starts from.
chewbacca111222's avatar
But, I would check your math, because it doesn't feel right, not that it matters! What matters is...Fart! You need more farts!~
Gchris5523's avatar
I'll be sure to double check it.
chewbacca111222's avatar
Ok then, but I fear it is too late. I wouldn't worry about it, but make sure to double check in the future!~
Gchris5523's avatar
okk, thanks chewy!
FelixTheAverage's avatar
That cliffhanger though.
Nive work! Love your stories.
Gchris5523's avatar
Yes; Best cliffhanger I've made. And thanks man! It means a lot!
Sekkaasun's avatar
The new format is very nice. Keep it up.
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