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Simpson3k's avatar
Really nice story..and some very funny lines inserted between the naughty stuff.

Hm i think you confused the name of Yuta with Akura sometimes.
DreadLockedCipher's avatar
I love the chemistry between Makoto and the girls. It seems so natural. Also, not to self: NEVER piss off Dai. Unless you're invulnerable. Also, that ending. Just...awesome.
Gchris5523's avatar
Aw thanks man; glad ya like it! Yes, dat ending.
DreadLockedCipher's avatar
Yuta is living the dream here.
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DreadLockedCipher's avatar
Good point. This was just the warm-up.
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Hehehee, let me know when you read more, that is, if you're interested to read more...
DreadLockedCipher's avatar
I've already read it all 3 times. I'm more than happy to make it an even 4. :D
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omg THANKS MAN
chewbacca111222's avatar
Oh my, this chapter was intense. Very funny, just constantly, especially unintentionally when you said:
"I-I’m fine Makoto. Just a small crap from all the stress from earlier… and the staff lunch…”
Yeah, yeah. She just had a small crap in her short skirt from the stress. Spelling errors are so fun!
Oh, and that ending. The top of the hierarchy likes to be on the bottom of a gassy woman. So interesting!~
Again, very nice writing, and this part was hilarious!~
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Dude, you made me read through my ENTIRE story, and I can't find that error. Can you please be a bit more specific as to WHERE the misspelling is? I know where I've written that line, but it looks fine. Are you talking about the one with Ms. Atudara? Or is there another part of that line that I simply cannot find?

Yeye; she's the kind of girl like US. She's SUPER into the fetish. Thank you!
chewbacca111222's avatar
No, I copy pasted the line. Literally, right before Ms. Atudara farts and Yuta basks in the stench like the horndog she is, Ms. Atudara says she just had "a small crap from the stress". Super funny!~
Hint: Press Control and F, then type in the word crap into the search box to find it!~
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You pizza shit, NOW I know you're screwing with me! XD
chewbacca111222's avatar
What? It literally says she had a small crap! Don't look at me like that, senor wangsta fresh corn dog millionaire!~
Gchris5523's avatar
Well, I did what you told me, and I can't find it. Is it maybe on another chapter you read it on?
chewbacca111222's avatar
Oh, you pizza shit! You edited it!
Gchris5523's avatar
Wot? No I didn't; you can't edit submissions, can you?
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chewbacca111222's avatar
I am pretty sure it is this one. Here, I will note you a screenshot!~
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AwkwardMoon45's avatar
Well, I enjoyed this chapter but...what the actual hell did I just read at the end O.O talk about a major plot twist, that legit took me by surprise.
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Nice! Hopefully it was the good kind of twist!
AwkwardMoon45's avatar
Good kind of twist, yes, but because I'm very hyper right now I started laughing for some reason and then I started reading chapter 3 and it summed up my reaction in one sentence "..............That actually happened, didn't it?" XD
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For who? Me? You? The Easter Clause?
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