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Commu - Robot Building by FuyonaSoul Commu - Robot Building by FuyonaSoul
Commission for Panzer-Fox of his OC looking at a blueprint (I didnt draw that I just blurred it and made it darker. I forgot whose it was.)
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Art by me/ FuyonaSoul 
Metal Forge belongs to Panzer-Fox
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Nice! I haven't seen a drawing like this/really anything MLP here in a while. To be honest, I do not have very much to say. But! On with the critique! Remember, anything I say here is for YOUR benefit and made as friendly advice.

Basic Anatomy (Mostly dealing with MLP style, but some with positioning)
MLP cartoon pony anatomy is different than real world pony anatomy, yes? Although you did a good job, Metal Forge's head and wings look a bit awkward. Again, the MLP style does differ from your own, so differences in style are not bad, just different.

-Stallion heads are sharper and a bit longer/more blocky depending on the stallion. An earth pony like Big Mac (Sweet Apple Acres) has a large, square head while a small pegasus stallion like Soarin (Wonderbolt) will have a long, blocky head that slopes down almost like a mare's. Here, his head is too round. I understand that the hair will block a lot of it, but even without it, it seems a bit too round.

-Pegasus wings are simple. Most adults (including Metal Forge) follow the 3-4 wing feather rule. Pegasi normally have 3 underlining covert feathers and 4 primary/secondary feathers. 3 feathers on the inside, 4 on the out. Alicorns have more feathers and infants/children have less. Outside of the number of feathers, the wing positions look a bit off. It's like both wings are facing the saem direction, which isn't a natural pose. Perhaps make his left wing (the one behind him right now) move a bit farther in the opposite direction so that the wings look a bit more spread out.

-These ears are a bit big. Regardless of style, the ears are a bit bigger in proportion in this picture. The ears should be a tad bit smaller to fit his head. In lore, creatures with those ears tend to be bats or wolves. They also dip down too much like a humans. Humans have ear lobes; ponies and horses alike don't.

RATINGS: 4.25 stars
Vision: 4 stars Simple, but it gets its message across.
Originality: 4.5 stars I haven't seen anything like this in a while. I know it's a commission, but it's a pretty nice commission!
Technique: 4.5 stars It's simple, again, but it's effective. It's smooth and the colors are well blended.
Impact: 4 stars Just another pony drawing another robot.
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Panzer-Fox Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017
Aww i look adorable! the face is a little weird looking but eh I don't care. lol. Good work fuyo! 
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yea the face is odd but I'm glad you like it anyway!
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Panzer-Fox Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017
*huggles Fuyo* 
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hope it's what you wanted or better.
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Panzer-Fox Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017
It's fine Fuyo. I understand you have difficulties drawing ponies. ^^ I like it just the way it is.
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you.
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FallenWish-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Love seeing art of this guy! ^^ *created the oc for him so thats why* 
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I see...?
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FallenWish-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Ya. I make people oc's. And I always love seeing art of them. I really like your style Fuyona! ^^
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I create ocs for others too...
I don't go bragging about it.

And thanks, I just wish I can get more commissions on a semi decent daily basis.
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FallenWish-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Im not trying to brag. I just think its awesome when I see them. 

Hmm. I can try and promote you
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I honestly don't care where or who an oc came from, as long as credit was used enough times by the owner of the oc.
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FallenWish-Creations Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
*shrug* Ya. But idk. Its fun to see. 
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FuyonaSoul Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Saying "oh, I created that oc for them" is bragging.
And I know you created it.
.-.
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