Aliases: Kep Jekura, Blatimus MacNeil Current Residence: Look out Wisconsin, I'm Back! Favourite style of art: Impressionism Operating System: X MP3 player of choice: Lasonic i931 Boombox Favourite cartoon character: Flash Gordon
This is a really nice work of fan fiction and you have done very well to be true to the original show. My only real critique of the work you have done is that you need more of the story direction needed for writing an actual television script. With your narration we have too much of a glimpse inside the characters. That needs to be better reflected in the dialogue or somehow better implied.
I think if the series were to continue after Requiem the series needs a major overhaul.
Requiem is a major turning point in the story. The kids aren't really kids anymore after all their challenges in the Realm. I wouldn't expect them all to go back. I think that those who do go back should reflect the major changes they have incurred from their prior experience. For one they are older now (as are we who originally watched the show). I think a strong underlying current would be to reveal why those who stayed home did so. If I were to pick who stays home I would choose Eric, Diana, and Bobby. That brings back Hank, Presto, Sheila, and a full grown Uni. Part of the challenge would be to somehow tease the audience with cameos of the old crew. We also would need to quickly add new members to round out the group. Though Venger is redeemed in Requiem, we really need to experience that with the cast in the initial episodes. Also we need a solid transition if Venger is to be dungeon master.
We have all been dreaming about this show for years now. I have watched the series 5 times since I picked up my copy a couple years ago and I don't want to quit watching.