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Love the story, I always find very sexy. I wish there was a little more fun between Sam and Liana, but at least we have our imagination...

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Trader Princess Prologue
Trader Princess
Prologue
 Zon Kaarvan exits the Jedi shuttle, wearing his regular Jedi Robes with his family’s crest, an animal skull with two horns coming together but not quite touching, on his shoulder. He spent a good year on his home planet of Dorin, meditating there as he gathered himself and trained in hand-to-hand combat. He has his double-sided training saber on his back, a black belt with four pouches on it. He spots his master, Entum Tris, standing not too far away from the shuttle with his arms crossed over his chest. One of his tendrils are missing due to an explosion he was caught in during the Serien War.
 Entum walks up to his apprentice, smiling at him. “Von, it’s a pleasure to see you made it back safely. How was your time on your Dorin?”
 Von nods his head appreciatively. “It was an insightful experience, master. I understand more why you spend so much time in the garden, but now I have a little more understanding of where
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Zon Kaarvan Prologue
Zon Kaarvan Prologue
 Zon Kaarvan grabs the two training blades, looking at the two through the goggles he must wear, as do all other Kel Dor’s when they’re not on their home planet of Dorin. The nine-year-old inspects the blades length, width, and sturdiness before he does the same with their hilts. “Padawan, are you done yet?” Zon looks back at his new master, a male Nautolan wearing Jedi Robes, but is not wearing a under shirt underneath it.
 “Not quite, master. I’m sorry, but the blades just don’t quite feel right.” He says as he holds the blades up. “Then again, I could never really find a weapon that suited me. It all felt wrong, off, like they weren’t made for my hands.” Entum chuckles as he shakes his head in disbelief, gripping his training sword in one hand.
 “You really are something, Zon. Just choose one of them, and try your luck with…”
 “Hold on, I might have an i
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Zon Kaarvan's Bio
Name: Zon Kaarvan
Species: Kel Dor
Class: Jedi Knight
Physical description: About one-point-seventy-five meters tall with the Antiox Breath Mask and protective goggles, and has the crest of his family on the right shoulder pad over his robes, which consists of an animal skull with two horns near the top coming out of the sides, with the tips coming back in where the tips are almost touching.
Bio: Having grown up on the Kel Dorian home world of Dorin until he was about six years old, Zon feels a strong bond with his family, whom are the head of a manufacturing company that makes Republic One-man fighter’s, and wears the family crest in honor of them. He has four fingers on his hands, and when his goggles are taken off, others would be able to see he has white iris’s that confirm him being a Force Sensitive. His master, Entum Tris, has taught him how his skills with a lightsaber is not the only skill set he should focus on, as his master usually beats him in their duels due t
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Star Wars Skylax and the Defender
Star Wars
Skylax and the Defender
 “You better word that better.” Skylax says to Sergeant Verlatox, a male human who was all too eager to leave the Triumvirate to join him, now stands in front of Skylax, who was just enjoying a nice glass of Rodian Wine, a type of wine from the Rodians that he most enjoys and can’t get enough of. A fine glass of wine while enjoying the outdoors. “I was having a rather nice evening, enjoying the nice summer day with the finest wine in all of the galaxy, and you mean to ruin this moment by telling me that, out of the six spec of troopers I sent in, only two have returned?”
 Sergeant Verlatox nods, obviously thinking twice about telling him this and about betraying the Emperor. “M-My lord, I apologize for ruining this moment for you, but I feel it is my duty to not sugarcoat the truth. Six Special Operation troopers went in, but only two returned. However, it is not all a loss.”
 Skylax is obviously
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Shark Hunt Part 2
Shark Hunt
Part 2
 Tika and Anto are lying on the couch, Tika’s back up against Anto as his arm is around her waist. She is fast asleep as Anto admires her sleeping form, smiling as he uses his free hand to move some hair from in front of her face. God, is she ever beautiful. What did Anto do to deserve her? He then looks up as he hears Anna and Galtiss enter the main area, the two talking about something he can’t hear until they get closer.
 "... that a capable detective turns into a war hero and later vigilante?" Anna asks curiously. The Amiss chuckles with a clop of his beak.
 "That is a long story, but the short version is that I was sick of the red tape on Coruscant where the regulations were tying my hands every time I wanted to do something, especially when a politician or senator was involved. One day I had to leave a case when a senator who was involved in some weapon smuggling intervened with my seniors. To feel better, I broke him his jaw right in
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Ivuur Pafen
Name: Ivuur Pefan
Nickname/Alias: N/A
Race/Species: Ithorian
Place of Birth: Onboard the medical space station ‘Alderaan’s savior’ above the planet Alderaan, so… technically Alderaan, since that was where he was raised.
Current Age: 21 standard years
Gender: Male
Height: 2.0 Meters
Weight: 189.5 pounds
Appearance: A simple male Ithorian with a cybernetic left arm, and a long burn scar that goes from the back of his left shoulder down to his right hip.
Clothing: Simple Jedi robes with a belt around his hip that stores several pouches that mostly carry herbs or some sort of medical advice. Nothing that could stop a severe injury, but enough to keep the victims alive. He wears black gloves, and when he takes his upper robes off he is seen wearing a black V-neck T-shirt.
Force Speciality: He focuses more on the healing aspects of the force, hoping to become a Jedi Healer, like his great grandfather was. He is also good in using Force push and Force Pull, but not in
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Teen TItans! BBRAE Episode 2
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Episode 2
Party Stopper
 Speedy and Aqualad are on the back of two separate dolphins, on their way towards where Aqualad felt his fish friend met his demise. The two are in their usual Hero attire, Speedy in his red, sleeveless shirt with red pants and Aqualad in his blue-scales one piece that covers everything from his feet up to his neck. Speedy quickly checks the string on his bow, making sure that it is in good shape before checking on the string to make sure it won’t snap on him.
 Once satisfied, he looks back to see the coast coming up quickly to them. Just another thirty seconds, and they’ll be there. “Hey Aqualad!” Speedy yells over to him. “What do you think this thing we’re looking for could be?”
 “I don’t know, Speedy, but we should make sure it doesn’t represent a threat. If it does, we take it down.” He replies back as the shore is now only ten seconds away. “Keep your
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Teen Titans! BBRAE Episode 1
Teen Titans! BBRAE
Episode 1
The Get Together
 “Cyborg, how many girlfriends have you had since you became, you know, Cyborg?” Beast Boy asks as he sits on a crate almost as tall as him, but wide enough to fit about three of him if all three of him were back to back. Cyborg, who is currently under the T-car, has his robotic left arm as a wrench as he makes some small adjustments to the car.
 Cyborg looks at Beast Boy with a raised eyebrow at the question. “Girlfriends? B, why is my dating life suddenly any of your business?” Cyborg asks as he pushes himself out from underneath the T-Car. Beast Boy sighs as he looks down at the ground.
 “I’m just curious, especially since, oh, you know,” He points above him to a yellow banner hanging above him, with the words in large, red letters, that say, ’Welcome, Titans East’. “We’re about to throw a huge party, and I’m going to show up with no date!
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YuGiOh! Soul Seeker Duel 1
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Soul Seeker
Duel 1
 Police sirens go off in the streets of Emblem City, the police cars speeding through the city towards an abandoned apartments building. Inside of the building is a middle-aged man in tattered clothing, holding a magnum in his right hand, looking out the window as the police cars surround the building.
 “Damn, they found me.” He says, and then looks at the two bags of valuables he recently stole from the nearby museum. “I guess I’ll go down…” He brings the hammer of the gun back. “With a bang.”
 ”Duel field activated.” The man looks around in confusion as the room is surrounded in what appears to be digital code. “W-What is this? Who’s there?” He hears someone clapping from right outside the room. A figure in a brown overcoat steps around the doorway, his black gloved hands clapping together.
 “So ‘smart’ of you, hide in a abandoned build
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Stari Chronicles Book 1 Chapter 2
Stari Chronicles
Book 1: Shadows of the Past
Chapter 2
 Maryna Caballa meditates in the middle of the training room, allowing the force to flow through her and allow her to become one with the flowing force. She becomes her strongest when she lets the force flow through her like this, Maryna no longer fighting, but instead letting the Force fighting through her. She opens her eyes as she feels energy signatures approaching her.
 No life stems from them, but they are causing Maryna’s danger senses to go off. She waits until they have surrounded her, their weapons trained on her. Right before they fired, Maryna opens her eyes to see five different training droids surrounding her. Now is the time to act. She jumps up in the air as the droids fired where she was, the laser’s scorching where she was sitting.
 However, as Maryna lands behind one of the droids, whom is dual wielding two blaster Pistols, she instantly knows it was not her moving. She did not command
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I thought I'd give some quick thoughts on two Star Wars books and the first volume of "Dark Times" I have just finished, no real reason. Thought I'd keep my channel from being completely dead. So here we go!

Ahsoka = WHAT!? I READ A DISNEY CANON BOOK!? Surely this is a sign of the end times. But in all seriousness, I read this because my brother was a huge Ahsoka fan, he read it, and he wanted me to read it as well. So I did, and... eh. It's okay, there are some pretty good parts, but there are also some parts I either didn't like or just didn't understand, like how one of the female characters introduced in this book kissed Ahsoka in the end. It felt like it came out of nowhere to me, like "Hey, you know what this book needs? Some romance, have there be one kiss at the end that turns things really awkward and then NEVER bring up again." It's not a bad book, but I feel like it's there simply to fill in the blanks. That's not bad, but I do have some issues. One, why is this only a single year after Episode 3? For me, I would've gone closer to five as that would give the sense that Ahsoka truly has had to go through some hard times, watching the Empire do all these terrible things for so long but being too scared to do anything in fear for her life and anyone close to her, but that's just me and I will admit it only being a year isn't a negative, just odd that its only a year. Personally, I feel like you could've just read the Wookiepedia page on Ahsoka, learn about these events on there, and not have that different of a experience. "Oh, but you're just saying that because it's Disney Canon." To prove you wrong, here's literally the very next Star Wars book I read and just finished up not even a week ago.

The Approaching Storm = You remember in Episode 2 when Palpatine suggested that Anakin and Obi-Wan be Padme's bodyguards, and Mace Windu says that would be possible due to them returning from some peace talks? This book is about that peace talk... and my thoughts on it were the exact same thoughts I had on Ahsoka. It's there, fills in some information, read wookiepedia to get the same experience, and... that's it. I do like that it's not just Anakin and Obi-Wan, but also Luminara Unduli and Barriss Offee as well with them, giving some other Jedi time to shine, but... yeah, it's only there to serve as foreshadowing that some groups of people are already planning on leaving the Republic and joining Count Dooku, whom you don't see or hear from until the end. If you want to read either of these two, I don't think you'll regret it, but I don't think these books are "Must reads".

Dark Times Volume One = The comic is dark in tone when it wants to be... but this has a problem with me. The story starts off with two characters shortly after Episode 3, one Jedi and one Separatist ally, and they're trying to fight off the 501st. The battle ends with all the males of the species dying out except for the one with the Jedi, and the women and children are captured before being told by the Emperor that, since none of them are males, they would do the Empire's work force little good but they could be sold for money to at least help give the Empire some more money themselves. So... Mission failure, until the two find a ship filled with a crew of... god, I don't even know how many people. Besides the main two characters, I remember the Captain, Captain Heren, and the female human pilot who is not shy about showing off some skin. :eyes: Besides them... every other crew member on here, and there's like five others, are forgettable. I like the idea of the story, and the execution isn't bad, but only the two main characters are given enough time and focus for us to care about them. It is also dark because the non-Jedi character, Bomo, had a wife and daughter who was sold to slavery. They then find out the wife was killed when her daughter was about to be sold, being killed for causing too much of a ruckus, and the daughter... was sold to some rich guy who kills her because he can... and that he also wants to eat her. This is literally screaming to me, "HEY! LOOK HOW DARK WE ARE! LOOK HOW DARK WE ARE! CANNIBALISM IS SO EVIL AND DARK AND EDGY!" I am about to read Volume two... but I don't feel much excitement for it.

There, channel's still limping along now. Hooray? Anyways, if you all have read any of these three, let me know what your thoughts were in the comments below, and I will see you all next time!
You all know that feeling when you're writing something, but then realize you could've made a better start to it all but you're too deep in to go back so now you're forced to decide whether to dump what you got or just go with it and hope it's not that big of a issue? Yeah... I'm kind of in the middle of that right now.

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I love star wars, am a NaruHina fan, have written a few stories on Fanfiction.net, am part of boy scouts, and I like playing video game's

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I thought I'd give some quick thoughts on two Star Wars books and the first volume of "Dark Times" I have just finished, no real reason. Thought I'd keep my channel from being completely dead. So here we go!

Ahsoka = WHAT!? I READ A DISNEY CANON BOOK!? Surely this is a sign of the end times. But in all seriousness, I read this because my brother was a huge Ahsoka fan, he read it, and he wanted me to read it as well. So I did, and... eh. It's okay, there are some pretty good parts, but there are also some parts I either didn't like or just didn't understand, like how one of the female characters introduced in this book kissed Ahsoka in the end. It felt like it came out of nowhere to me, like "Hey, you know what this book needs? Some romance, have there be one kiss at the end that turns things really awkward and then NEVER bring up again." It's not a bad book, but I feel like it's there simply to fill in the blanks. That's not bad, but I do have some issues. One, why is this only a single year after Episode 3? For me, I would've gone closer to five as that would give the sense that Ahsoka truly has had to go through some hard times, watching the Empire do all these terrible things for so long but being too scared to do anything in fear for her life and anyone close to her, but that's just me and I will admit it only being a year isn't a negative, just odd that its only a year. Personally, I feel like you could've just read the Wookiepedia page on Ahsoka, learn about these events on there, and not have that different of a experience. "Oh, but you're just saying that because it's Disney Canon." To prove you wrong, here's literally the very next Star Wars book I read and just finished up not even a week ago.

The Approaching Storm = You remember in Episode 2 when Palpatine suggested that Anakin and Obi-Wan be Padme's bodyguards, and Mace Windu says that would be possible due to them returning from some peace talks? This book is about that peace talk... and my thoughts on it were the exact same thoughts I had on Ahsoka. It's there, fills in some information, read wookiepedia to get the same experience, and... that's it. I do like that it's not just Anakin and Obi-Wan, but also Luminara Unduli and Barriss Offee as well with them, giving some other Jedi time to shine, but... yeah, it's only there to serve as foreshadowing that some groups of people are already planning on leaving the Republic and joining Count Dooku, whom you don't see or hear from until the end. If you want to read either of these two, I don't think you'll regret it, but I don't think these books are "Must reads".

Dark Times Volume One = The comic is dark in tone when it wants to be... but this has a problem with me. The story starts off with two characters shortly after Episode 3, one Jedi and one Separatist ally, and they're trying to fight off the 501st. The battle ends with all the males of the species dying out except for the one with the Jedi, and the women and children are captured before being told by the Emperor that, since none of them are males, they would do the Empire's work force little good but they could be sold for money to at least help give the Empire some more money themselves. So... Mission failure, until the two find a ship filled with a crew of... god, I don't even know how many people. Besides the main two characters, I remember the Captain, Captain Heren, and the female human pilot who is not shy about showing off some skin. :eyes: Besides them... every other crew member on here, and there's like five others, are forgettable. I like the idea of the story, and the execution isn't bad, but only the two main characters are given enough time and focus for us to care about them. It is also dark because the non-Jedi character, Bomo, had a wife and daughter who was sold to slavery. They then find out the wife was killed when her daughter was about to be sold, being killed for causing too much of a ruckus, and the daughter... was sold to some rich guy who kills her because he can... and that he also wants to eat her. This is literally screaming to me, "HEY! LOOK HOW DARK WE ARE! LOOK HOW DARK WE ARE! CANNIBALISM IS SO EVIL AND DARK AND EDGY!" I am about to read Volume two... but I don't feel much excitement for it.

There, channel's still limping along now. Hooray? Anyways, if you all have read any of these three, let me know what your thoughts were in the comments below, and I will see you all next time!

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HEROMASTER85 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2018
A rebel battle tactic inspired by the animal kingdom

m.youtube.com/watch?v=bk7McNUj…
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FelgrandKnight34 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2018
Interesting tactic, I suppose. However, there's another one I think you would like where a spider that is a spider-eater manages to outsmart a species of blind spiders by plucking on the chords of it's web to draw it closer to it before it would jump out and latch onto it's back.
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HEROMASTER85 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2018
Picture or video me please

But the tactic is for tie subs or tricking ties to fly low forcing the ties between the devil and the sea

Another is called bait ball, where fighters trick the ties to swarm in a tight formation, interceptors and droid fighters will be the birds, the standard fighters are seals and dolphins, and backstabber ties or other fighters I’m still thinking of are sharks and tuna

Once ties are crashing into each other due to trying to maximize enemy damage that’s when u know their tight and so u send in a ship to be a whale to shoot an nuclear blast size ion pulse missle that would disable the entire imperial fleets ties
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Snowmonkeytail Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2018  Student General Artist
Thanks for the favs 😀
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FelgrandKnight34 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2018
No problem :)
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MitchThe1Soul Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2018   Digital Artist
Thank you for the fave
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FelgrandKnight34 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2018
No problem :)
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DrogarMythos Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2018  Hobbyist General Artist
Happy Birthday Fel! Yay i did it on time!
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FelgrandKnight34 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2018
Hooray! Thank you!
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