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Imagine a TV show, probably on the CW Network about twenty somethings who solve crimes.
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zombieslavegirl's avatar

Nicely done! I like the nanotech angle. Not what I would have come up with for that photo! It's a fun read. :)

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

I don’t do much tech MC as I am first and foremost a hypnosis fan. But, I go where my muse takes me. I loved the pic. It said “Bad Girl” in a trance to me.

southerncrossfire44's avatar

You've done it again, my friend, another winner! Of course, I can see why you were inspired by the pic!

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Thanks. I think that might be my idea of a perfect foot.

southerncrossfire44's avatar

Yeah, it's a very nice foot. If only we could see the other one, too!

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Agreed. As I’ve mentioned in other responses, the model seem to fit the “Bad Girl” mode, which inspired her role in the story.

Great to see you back again. This was a fun story. Always good to revisit eviltwinmordred TV! A plot device reminiscent of your old Reversal of Fortune. I'm something of a evitwinmordred/previous name completest. :)

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

I’m sad to say, I don’t remember “Reversal”. The ravages of aging.

It was a riff on a post Attack Angels Reardon. A drug was administered through bare feet. - unusual for one of youe stories. I have tried to send this multiple time so not sure his is working. I'll try to also send the text but I have my doubts on my ability.

SoftSubmission's avatar

Lovely plot backed up with terrific MC Mordred. You are so very good at taking the victim from defiance to acceptance. The characters in this short are very well done and the reader can already glean some of the issues and backstory going with events and personalities. As I have said before, you are so great at putting in so much with so few words. That's an art. Not a whole lot of people have it. I hope this story continues if that is your plan.

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Thank you. I have no plans to continue it, but you never know.

quadee365's avatar

Very well written. It's always nice to see you in my watch feed.

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Thanks, Quadee. I look forward to yours as well

4321Sleep's avatar

So glad to have you back in action, and what a great story to kick things off! Confident and cocky college detective Delilah assumes that she's about to one-up her own friends, but our villain knows exactly how to use that simmering resentment against her.


I love the fact that the Phantom really didn't need to do much beyond tweaking Del's moral compass to turn her from crime-solving heroine to obedient, devoted servant. Here's hoping for a future installment in which Penny and Tricia's talents are also put to better use!

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Thanks! Yes, I think the Phantom is pleasantly surprised how pre-programmed Del is.

XennerdReborn's avatar

I savored every bit of this, dude. Wonderful work here. I hope you keep it up! 8-)

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Thanks. Just a small little scene. I thought the picture said, bad girl controlled.

XennerdReborn's avatar

I didn't see Del as "bad" necessarily, more "naughty" and "mischievous." I guess just not in an evil or genuinely diabolical sense, if you know what I mean.

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

That’s a fair point. I don’t think she’s evil, but she is the “bad girl” of this group of heroines.

XennerdReborn's avatar

That's exactly the vibe I got. May I please have a hint as to what your next story will be about? ;)

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

Don’t know yet. With these smaller tales, I tend to look at photos on Pinteres, when a particular pic inspress me, I start writing. If the idea works for me, I finish it.

XennerdReborn's avatar

Would you ever use a picture of a celebrity? Like this one with a barefoot woman?


https://inglam.ru/img/2020/07/mary-louise-parker-usa-today-2006-004.jpg ;)

EVILTWINMORDRED's avatar

I stay away from easily recognizable celebs, and I prefer natural or very light nail color. Lovely pic though.

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