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Chapter Ten


“Sad story?” Victor asked.

“Hey, not everything has a happy ending.” Eliza said.

“I hate sad stories.” Kowalski sighed. “The most of the time I started to cry.”

Ray chuckled. “I have a handkerchief for you, when it becomes very sad.”  he teased.

“Oh, please.” Kowalski said. “But thanks anyway.”

“Well, what is the story?”  Anita asked.

“Ehm, it’s this one.” Eliza said and she clicked on the story called: Losing A Beloved.

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Losing A Beloved
A little problem

Anita walked into the U.Z.Z. base. “This just can’t be true.” she whispered.

“Good morning, agent Knight.” Ray said and Anita looked up.

“Good morning, Ray.” Anita said, totally missing the sarcasm of Ray’s voice.

“Is there something wrong?” Ray asked, but Anita shook her head.

“It’s nothing.” she said. “Where is Victor?”

“He’s in the Training Room.” Ray said and Anita nodded.

“Hey, where were you this morning?” Victor asked when Anita walked into the Training Room. He was practicing his high kicks on the old plates.

“I had a doctor appointment.”  Anita said when she sat down.

Victor looked to her. “Was it something serious?” he asked and Anita nodded. Victor sat next to her. “How serious?”

“Very serious.” Anita said and she looked to Victor.

“What is it?” Victor asked.

“I’m…I’m pregnant.” Anita whispered.

“You are? But…how?”

Anita smiled. “I think you know how.”

“I meant, when did it happen?” Victor looked to her. He knew that they had a kinda like a date, but he can’t remember a thing after what happened on their ‘date’.

“Twelve weeks ago.” Anita said.

“So I must be the father.” Victor whispered and Anita nodded. Victor looked to her and he saw that she already made up her mind. “Anita,” he said and Anita looked to him. “If you think that I’m going to let you raise our kid alone, you’re wrong.”

“What do you mean?” Anita asked.

“I mean that I want to be part of our child’s life.” Victor gave her a little smile.

“Really?” Anita said and Victor nodded. “You don’t know how much that means to me.” and she gave Victor a hug.

“But the others need to know it too.” Victor said. “Just like my mother.”

“I think it’s fair to tell it to your mother first and then we say it to the others.”

Victor nodded. “Shall we go? It’s quiet here.”

“Where to?” Anita asked, but Victor didn’t say a thing.


“Mum, are you home?”
Victor and Anita walked into Mildred’s house.

“I’m in the kitchen.” Mildred said and they walked to her. “What’s going on?” Mildred asked when she saw Victor and Anita.

Victor looked to Anita. “Maybe it’s better to tell it in the living room.” he said and Anita nodded.

Mildred looked how they left and she followed them a little bit later, with the tea.

“So, what’s going on?” she asked when she sat down in the living room.

Victor and Anita looked to each other. “Mildred,” Anita started. “There is something you must know. I’m…I’m…”

“Anita is pregnant.” Victor said and Mildred looked to Anita.

“Is that…” Anita nodded. “But why are you telling me this?”

“Because I’m the father.” Victor said.

Mildred looked with disbelief to Victor and Anita. She didn’t know what to say. “So, I’m going to be a grandmother?” she said.

Victor and Anita nodded. “Mildred,” Anita said. “It’s okay. I mean…If you think I should…”

“No, no don’t even think about that.” Mildred said. “I…I like the idea. But it’s just…It’s new to me. I mean…” she sighed.

“It’s alright, mom.” Victor smiled.

Mildred looked to her son.  “But you need to know that I’m very happy for you both.”

Anita looked to her. “Really?” she said and Mildred nodded. “Thank you, Mildred.”

“How many weeks are you pregnant?” Mildred asked.

“Twelve weeks.” Anita smiled. “It’s not that long.”

“I’m really happy for you two.” Mildred said again.

“Thanks, mom.” Victor said.

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Anita looked to the screen. “I’m pregnant?” she said.

Eliza looked to her. “You are?” she asked.

“What? No, of course not. I meant the story.”

“I would like to see that happen.” Ray teased.

“Well, it’ll never happen.” Anita and Victor said and they looked to each other.

“You’ll never know.” Eliza teased.

“Well, at least not before I got married.” Anita said.

Kowalski smiled. “Are you that old-fashioned?” she teased.

“No, but with work like this, I’d like to wait after my marriage.”

“But, this isn’t a really sad story.” Kowalski said and she looked to Eliza.

“It’ll be sad, trust me.”

“So, how does it continue?”

“Let me see.” and Eliza searched through some chapters. “Do you want to know how it ends?” she asked.

“Sure, why not?” Victor said and the others nodded.
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Losing A Beloved
Just the two of us

Anita looked around her. She stood in the nursery which she and Victor finished today. It was now waiting for their baby, just like she and Victor did.
Anita sighed a little bit and sat down in the rocking chair. “Just a few more weeks, sweetie. And your father and I can finally hold you near.”

“You can’t wait, can you?” suddenly sounded and Victor sat down next to her.

Anita shook her head. “It won’t take long either.” she said and she looked to Victor. Suddenly, she started to smile. “She just kicked.”

“Can I feel it?” Victor asked.

“Of course you can.” Anita laughed a little bit and she grabbed Victor’s hand. She placed it on her stomach and a little bit later, Victor smiled.

“She will be just like her mother, kicking when she can.”

Anita laughed. “I don’t care. I like the feeling.”

“It’s really amazing.” Victor said. “That you and I are having a baby, a little us.”

Anita laughed. “It’s fantastic and even your mother likes it.”

“She has to, it’s her grandchild we’re expecting.”

Anita smiled and she yawned. “I think I’m going to bed.” she said.

Victor nodded. “I’ll be there soon.” he said.


Not much later, they were both lying in bed and they talked about the future of their baby and what they would do when she was on her way.

“I still think the hospital is the best option.” Victor said. “It’s safe and everyone is right by your side.”

“I don’t care.” Anita sighed. “I want to do it here, at home. Peacefully and only with the ones I love. And the doctor of course.”

Victor smiled. “It’s not time yet.” he said. “This talk can wait.” He suddenly disappeared under the blankets and Anita felt a little kiss on her stomach. “Goodnight, little princess.”

Anita smiled. “I think she’s going to love her father.” she said and Victor laughed.

“She has to, I am her father after all.” he said and he gave Anita a kiss. “Goodnight.”

“Goodnight.” Anita said.

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“Well, it’s still not sad.” Victor said.

“So, we would have a daughter?” Anita said.

“In one fanfic you two get a daughter, in the other you two get a son. It depends on who write it.” Eliza said.

“So, where’s the sad part?” Ray asked.

“Right after it.”

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Anita woke up and she looked to her alarm. It was three ‘o clock in the morning and something woke her up. It wasn’t Victors soft snoring, but she didn’t feel it anymore.  “Victor.” Anita whispered. “Victor, wake up.”

“What is it?” Victor asked, a little bit worried.

“It’s our baby, she doesn’t kick anymore.”

Victor looked to Anita. “Maybe she is just taking a break. Kicking mummy makes you very tired.” he said with a little smile.

Anita looked to him. “I’m not that sure.” she said. “What if there’s something wrong with her?”

Victor looked to her. He saw that she was very worried. “Listen, Anita. Just try to get some sleep. If she’s not moving or kicking in the morning, you’ll go to the doctor. Okay?” he asked and Anita nodded. “And if you have any news, you call me. Promise?”

“I promise.” Anita whispered.

“It’ll be alright.” Victor said. He gave Anita a kiss on her lips and he watched her the whole time when she was trying to sleep. And when she finally fell asleep he looked to her. “I promise that it will be alright.” he whispered before he tried to get some sleep.


The next morning, Victor woke up because of his communicator. “Victor Volt.” he said.

“We need you.” Ray said.

Victor looked to Anita, who was still sleeping. “What’s going on?” he asked. He was planning to go with Anita, in case she needed some support.

“The worse you can imagine. The impostors are back again. Together with Doctor Doctor.”

“Go, I can handle it.” Victor heard and he looked to Anita.

“Are you sure?” he whispered and Anita nodded. “I’m on my way, Ray.” Victor walked to Anita and gave her a kiss on her lips. “If you need me, just call me. You and our daughter are more important to me than anyone else.”

Anita smiled. “I promised I would call you when I have news.” she whispered.

“She still isn’t moving, is she?” Victor asked and Anita shook her head. “I’ll be there when you need me.” he said and he gave her a last kiss on her lips. “It’ll be alright.”


It was a big fight, but it seemed they were winning. The end of the fight was in sight and Victor heard his communicator ringing. He grabbed it, but let it almost fall. “Anita.” he said and the agents who were near him looked at him. “I’m…” Victor lost almost his voice. “I’m coming.” he whispered.

“Just go.” Ray said. “She needs you more than we do.”


A few minutes later, Victor walked into the nursery. He looked to her. They were so happy that they got the chance to get a child, and then… then something like this happens.

“It’ll be alright.” Victor whispered in her ear. He was standing right behind her. He put his arms around her waist and hugged her tight. Anita turned around and she placed her head on his shoulder and cried silently. Victor stroked her hair and whispered sweet words to calm her down.

“This can’t be true.” Anita said a half an hour later. “She suddenly stopped, with everything. This just can’t be true.”

“I’m sorry, Anita.” Victor said.  


Few days passed and Anita and Victor were in a hospital room. They spent the last hours there, together with a doctor. The doctor thought it was the best idea to give Anita something so she would go into labour and she could deliver the baby in the natural way.

“Here she is.” the doctor said and she laid the baby in Anita’s arms. “You can hold her for a few minutes and then I’ll bring her away.”

Anita and Victor just nodded and they looked to their daughter.

“She’s beautiful.” Victor whispered. Something in his mind told him that the baby could be still alive, but he knew she wasn’t.

Anita nodded. “She could be wonderful.” she said.

A soft knock sounded and Mildred came in. “So, is she born?” she asked and she walked to Victor and Anita. “She looks wonderful.” she said. She felt the tears in her eyes, but she knew she had to be strong for Victor and Anita. They didn’t need her tears too, they went trough too many things. “You two need some time with her.” Mildred whispered and before Victor and Anita could say a thing, she was gone.

“She looks just like you, Anita.” Victor smiled. “She has your freckles and her eyes got the same colour as your eyes.”

“But her hair has the same colour as your hair.” Anita said.

“I’m sorry, but I need to take her with me.” the doctor said and Anita and Victor nodded.

“Goodbye, sweetheart.” Anita whispered when she stroke her daughter’s face.

“Goodbye, princess.” Victor whispered and he gave his daughter a last kiss on her forehead.

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“Darn it, I hate that.” Kowalski said while she was wiping her tears away.

Ray gave her his handkerchief.  “This is a sad story.” he admitted.

Eliza nodded. She knew the story, she read it some times before, but it still gave her some shivers. “Most writers don’t write about sad stories, but still, there are a few which are sad.”

“Well, I hope this will never happen to me.” Anita said.

“Me neither.” Victor said. “It’s one of the horrible ways of saying goodbye.”

“Is there an other one like this?” Ray asked and Eliza nodded.

“A good one.” she said.
I've always wanted to write a fanfic like this, but I didn't know what I had to write more.
I hope it wasn't too sad.

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:iconvictorvoltfan1:
VictorVoltfan1 Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Photographer
I feel bad that they lost their baby.
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Me too.
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HOPEINATOR20 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
for some reason, this story never seems that sad to me anymore :(
sorry :(
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TSSFANGIRL18 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2010   Traditional Artist
since Anita's baby died, that means Anita had a Miscarriage :(
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Kez716 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2010  Student General Artist
No, a miscarriage would happen in the first trimester.
This is what would be a stillborn.
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Actually, a miscarriage could happen at any trimester, but it usually happens in the first trimester.
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Kez716 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Student General Artist
wellllll not exactly. There comes a certain point where the terminology changes, generally around the second trimester.
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VoltaliatheMajestic Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Well, Lily Allen had a miscarriage while 7 months pregnant, but that was because of the STD she had (syphillus).
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Kez716 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Student General Artist
no
at that point, if a fetus dies in utero it's a stillbirth
and i read that she suffered from a viral infection
syphillis is bacterial
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You could say it like that, yeah
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TSSFANGIRL18 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009   Traditional Artist
this is so sad why did the
doctor have to take the baby away?
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Well, because she died during the pregnancy :(
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TSSFANGIRL18 Featured By Owner May 3, 2009   Traditional Artist
aww that's sad
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:iconeszies-eszie:
Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner May 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, I know :(
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SangoWings333 Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008
That is a very sad story you made. It made me uncomfortable three times before I could fully read through it. I think you done a very good job on your descriptions. I was just floored by the subject, but things like that can happen no doubt.

Good job.
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, it means a lot to me :)
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SangoWings333 Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008
Your very welcome. ^_^
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
=D
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SangoWings333 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008
^_^
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:iconeszies-eszie:
Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle:
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Now I know why its sad!
Coz Victor and Anita's baby was born but she was dead, right?
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, that's why it's sad
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I thought so :(
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:crying:
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Poor Anita and Victor :(
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
yeah :cries:
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awww :(
Why do they have to say goodbye to her?
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:iconeszies-eszie:
Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I just wanted to write a sad story, maybe it was a little to sad :crying:
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah! :(
But it was cute! :aww:
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:iconeszies-eszie:
Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
yeah
I like your new icon, is that Kira?
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks and yeah ;)
ShadowXJenny made it for me ages ago and I nearly forgot about it lol
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
It's really wonderful. :)
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HedgeCatDragonix Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yay! Thanks :)
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Eszies-Eszie Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
np =D
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