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lunartuesday's avatar
its "if I was you" second panel
BC-LS's avatar
*I have learned (not I learnt)
*You're no better than Discord (not Your not better than Discord)
okaminekowiesel's avatar
... spelling mistake - last panel: But because of your revenge all of Equestria is in danger. - In that case YOU ARE  / YOU'R not better than Discord. / your position/opinion is not better...
must have been quite a hot summer, for that to go unnoticed. :D (Big Grin) 
SapphireArtemis's avatar
I can't imagine how do you feel - Alice

I recommend to change it to:

I can't imagine how you feel 
ShockWave64's avatar
i would change "learnt" to "learned"
animedoom's avatar
Love this comic but the grammar mistakes are all over the place!
Turtl3L0v3er5678's avatar
If i WERE you
Not where :D
SweetCaptain77's avatar
OHHHHHHHHHHHH SHE SO COOL!!
Comeha's avatar
"If I where you I would try to do the same!"

Needs reivision.

I recommend: "If I were you I would do the same!"
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hvgtd's avatar
"If I where you" that h needs to go if you're trying to say 'were'
GracefulArt693's avatar
Your just as bad as Starlight! You both wanted revenge on the one person, use magic you should never posses, and threaten the safety of Equestria! Granted yours have a lot more since than Starlight but really is everything going to get better afterwards!? Wise up and stop playingthe game of revenge! Cause in the end, no one wins!
crazyappledashlover's avatar
That one line though "but revenge wouldn't bring them back either" can i just- can i just-.....THAT HIT ME IN THE FEELZ! WHY, ES?! WHYYYYY?????!!!! CAN I JUST GET THIS SCENE-THIS FRICKIN' SCENE WITH THE SPEECH BUBBLES AND EVERY THING- CAN I JUST HAVE IT PRINTED ON A T-SHIRT PLEASE? OR A HOODIE, JACKET, SWEATSHIRT, I DON'T CARE. JUST PRINT IT ON SOMETHING SO I CAN PULL IT OUT, WEAR IT, AND TELL THE WHOLE WORLD THAT REVENGE IS NEVER THE ANSWER EVEN IF THEY DID DESERVE IT AND EVEN IF YOU HATE THEM TOO AND WANT REVENGE TOO. okay, now i feel a liiittle better about that....but seriously, though, can someone just make this a t-shirt?


YOU GO, GURL! YOU GO, ALICE! YOU TELL 'IM!
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karkovice1's avatar
He has every right to feel bitter. :/

But look on the bright side: He still has Dumb and Dumber =P (Fire and Ice, are those their names?). 
CasualBrony999's avatar
WOULD YOU STOP CALLING THEM THAT!
P0PitL0ckit-Key's avatar
I believe  it's Ace and Ice. ^^
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P0PitL0ckit-Key's avatar
At least ya got ONE right xD
Kmn483's avatar
Second last panel " I can't even imagine how do you feel" the "do" is unnecessary, and the sentence would be much smoother just as "I can't even imagine how you feel."
You want your life back after all this time? You're probably SOL, but there is one who might be able to help. Just maybe, if you're very lucky, what you desire is within Discord's power. So just maybe, if you're very lucky and Discord likes you enough, he'll give you what yu desire.
CloudySkies17695's avatar
In the second panel, topmost balloon, the wrong "were" is used. ;3c


Use "were", as seen above.
BazieLama's avatar
In last panel, 'your not better than Discord' change to 'you're not better than Discord'
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