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Daily Deviation
November 30, 2007
A bunch of us on the AR team where chatting today about which of *error-message's deviations should get a daily deviation and it really came down to The Message. I personally really enjoy the medium. You can really read into this. Even now as I'm writing this my neck is being craned in order to get every last drop of value out of this piece. Sans-serific!
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Suggested by Photosbykev
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The Message

Hello everyone.

This is a typographic poster that I made using quark only ( class assignment ). I was heavily inspired by Lizzitsky and decided to do something reminiscent of his style ( or at least try ).

Its a poster celebrating " Artistic Rebelliousness " and it reads as so..

my name is
Phuq Hugh
I'm an artist

Nice to meet u

Design is my life
Passion is my Marc
Type is my weapon
You've just been killed

Meet you maker

All opposition is indeed useless

Resistance is futile

Blessing to all of mankind.

hope you guys enjoy it as much as I did creating it.

Till we meet ( or design ) again....

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MSILAER's avatar
It's like a word maze!
forest108299's avatar
Hi, I am Teddy. Once you read this you cannot get out. Finish reading this until it is done! As I said, I am Teddy. I am 7 years old. I have no eyes and blood all over my face. I am dead. If you don't send this to at least 12 people I will come to your house at midnight and I'll hide under your bed. When you're asleep, I'll kill you. Don't believe me? Case 1: Patty Buckles Got this e-mail. She doesn't believe in chain letters. Well, Foolish Patty. She was sleeping when her TV started flickering on and off. Now she's not with us anymore. Ha ha patty, Ha ha! You don't want to be like Patty, do you? Case 2: George M. Simon Hates chain mail, but he didn't want to die that night. He sent it to 4 people. Not good enough George. Now, George is in a coma, we don't know if he'll ever wake up. Ha ha George, Ha ha! Now, do you want to be like George? Case 3: Valarie Tyler She got this letter. Another chain letter she thought. Only had 7 people to send to. Well, That night when she was having a shower she saw bloody Mary in the mirror. It was the BIGGEST fright of her life. Valarie is scarred for life. Case 4: Derek Minse This is the final case I'll tell you about. Well, Derek was a smart person. He sent it to 12 people. Later that day, he found a $100.00 bill on the ground. He was premoted to head officer at his job and his girlfriend said yes to his purposal. Now, Katie and him are living happily ever after.The have 2 beautiful children. Send this to at least 12 people or you'll face the consequences. 0 people- You will die tonight 1-6 people- you will be injured 7-11 people- you will get the biggest fright of your life 12 and over- you are safe and will have good fortune! Do What Teddy Says!!!! Hurry, you must send to 12 people before midnigh
Anime-Luv3r's avatar
lol this is awesome!
Anime-Luv3r's avatar
(BTW I'm not actually laughing, I just always say lol, this was actually an amazing work of art)
DylanBrackett's avatar
This one's my favorite
yorsartythings's avatar
really nice piece of art :)
error-message's avatar
thank you very much.
error-message's avatar
thanks for the comment
milkstache's avatar
This was fun to read! :XD:
It really shows off just YOU.
My favorite part is the "Type is my weapon. You've just been killed."
Awesome, awesome, awesome.
error-message's avatar
thank you . . . thank you

this was a very fun and playful piece for me.
MyLaundryStinks's avatar
You had me at the Star Trek reference.
And your 'name' ;).
Nice job!
error-message's avatar
haha . . . thanks a lot

this was a fun piece.
Element-X-'s avatar
Wow, finding typographic pieces in deviant art is quite a rare sight. I like where this piece is going as well.

A bit of criticism (I kind of wrote this out of order so forgive me for any inconsistency):

Perhaps consider moving the characters 'eet' in 'Meet' slightly higher and/or adjust the tracking so that it aligns with the 'M' and the 'U'.

A big problem in this piece is the 'Hi my name is Phuq Hugh' portion of the image. It seems like you tried to force all those elements together and in turn resulted in what appears to be a 'U' or upside down 'A' in the piece and it took me quite a while to understand that it was a sideways "P". What really threw it off were the upside down characters 'HUQ' which in turn made me read the character "P" as an upside down 'A'. I would try to re assemble this portion of the image as I think its a really important part of the text.

In the section where you wrote 'Design is my life Passion is my Marc Type is my weapon You've just been killed' I think an adjustment on the leading would really help you out so that the characters don't get all jumbled up like that, it just makes it slightly annoying to look at.

Another part that bothers me is the 'all opposition is' portion of the piece. I noticed that you neglected to add a space in between 'all' and 'opposition', if you plan to leave it like that then perhaps you could try putting the word 'all' in bold (the typeface appears to be helvetica so I think it would look ok) to indicate that they are two different words but still one element. Currently it just looks like a typo since you added the space between 'opposition' and 'is'. Then I also noticed your attempt to keep the characters kissing each other but by doing so the characters 'iti' appear to form an 'E' on its side or an 'M' of some sort (at least to me anyway). I would recommend adjusting the kerning on those characters just enough to add a space to where it actually reads as 'opposition'. Then the character 's' sort of resembles a backwards 'a' when its kissing the other characters but I think you could get away with leaving it like that since it doesn't affect the readability quite as much for me. And although those small adjustments may (or may not) help, I would recommend getting away from that direction and increase the tracking in that portion of the text.

Then I believe you could go with a different color choice on 'Blessing to all of mankind', at least make it slightly more orange for readability. I would comment on the words 'Nice' and 'Futile' but then I realized this is a poster so a large print would probably make that easier to read.

I suppose this criticism could be ignored if the piece wasn't intended to be typographically correct but since you have a lot of the characters rotated and such it causes the reader to struggle which is a big deal if you're trying to communicate a message. Although if you purposely designed it like this then I suppose that adds a sort of twisted meaning to the portion.

Type is my weapon
You've just been killed

Just realize that even though the rules of design can sometimes be broken, they can't be ignored.

Overall this piece isn't typographically stable as I already mentioned but if you try to fix some of those small elements then perhaps it'll be easier for you to convey your message and even though it may not totally remedy the composition it may add a slightly better foundation for your design.

I see a lot of potential with this and I would recommend remaking it if possible but your efforts in attempting a typographic poster is admirable. Just finding typography on deviant art is really rare and I didn't really want to ignore this piece. I look forward to seeing more from you. :)
error-message's avatar
I'm almost honor to have received such a long and drawn out critique. Taking so much time to comment on my piece is very much appreciated.

this piece was done in class under a very limited time constrains. the objective was to create a typographic poster while using quarkXpress only. so I was left to render in a very unfamiliar territory. . . but I had a great time doing so! I was thoroughly impressed with the result and all its imperfections, so I decided to share it with everyone else. it pleases me to know that I was able to stop you with the piece and force a comment out of you ( or anyone for that matter ). asking for more is just plain greedy.

thanks again for your time.
Darkdesyre's avatar
Showed this to my design class tonight as a wonderful example of a type based poster! It was much appreciated!
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