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"I liked the coffee-flavored ones"

What was a boy
but a vacuum bag
of cooties?
What was detention
but a mountain
of dictionaries?
What was the ice cream truck
that never rolled around
my block?
Frankly, I don't know,
but it sure
makes me consider
becoming an ice cream
woman.
Childhood.
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unglitteringold Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2002
I don't quite see the concetion between the title and the poem...
But the poem is cute.
There's a good idea, but the flow seems a bit off.
like,
What was detention
but a mountain
of dictionaries?

Dictionaries just doesn't seem to fit the rhythm... or maybe it's just me.
Nice idea though. And well executed.
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