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Hamadryad Lament 01 by elsevilla Hamadryad Lament 01 by elsevilla
The hardest thing to do its always start.

This is a first draft so this is not the final dialog, if you have sugestions to make it sound nicely, that will be cool, cause i dont speak english.


As those that had seen past version of Hamadryad lament you will see a lot of changes from past pages.

In manga format, so the page will be smaller, thats why the text looks so big.


Hope you like it.
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:iconkkht311:
kkht311 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2016
Looks interesting.

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Silverwolf51 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Such an interesting start! Please continue!
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Deathstar-pink Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Will there be more of Hamadryad's Lament produced by you?
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
You want me to start the comic again.
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:icondeathstar-pink:
Deathstar-pink Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That would be amazing since the story sounds very interesting and I'm sure more people want to see how it turns out.
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EstiviWinkinson Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Student
I really like the begining. Hope you continue it :)
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OrcaAG101 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012
Any more pages coming or?
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:iconalansteenhouwer:
AlanSteenhouwer Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
This is compelling, but... a little confusing. Can you clarify it for me, or is this girl some character that I need the story about?
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:iconastaryael:
Astaryael Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I think he means Mother Earth?
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:iconnecrochildk:
NecrochildK Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012
Wow! This one gave me chills!
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:iconmichiko1002:
michiko1002 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
o.O awesome!!!!!
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:iconjesse-the-art-maker:
Jesse-the-art-maker Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
wwwooooooooowww.... O___O cool page...
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:icondeath-in-the-orchard:
death-in-the-orchard Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
He could have just lied to me. He could have just told me anything, like "food grows from fairytale creatures named 'Tree' that come from a factory that makes them with love and sugar", and I would have believed him.
I remember his face, so sad, so empty as he looked out the window and said these words which I will never forget:
"You see, little Constanza, all those thing come from a girl they...I mean 'I'...
...am killing."


~Fantastic start. If you continue it, I'm curious to see where you will go with this.
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m0n0cr0me Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
Strong start yo have. I do hope more is coming soon
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:iconredkaylafriend:
REDkaylafriend Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2011
ur good
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:iconizzana:
izzana Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2011  Student General Artist
I cant wait for more!
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Tenshinaki Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2011
Sounds like a good story and reading the comments I think they caught any grammer mistakes but for someone who doesn't speak english you did a great job! especially since I do speak english and still make horrible grammer mistakes XD
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pabloacosta3d Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nice work
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pabloacosta3d Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Excellent work!!
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JoseArocho Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
Super cool! Love it!
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Raidho-Shezamne Featured By Owner May 11, 2011
I think it should be:

"...and I would have believed it" instead of "...and I will believe it"
and

"all those things, come" instead of "comes"

Are you still working on this project? It looks interesting and I'd love to see more :)
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Conkeras Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Student General Artist
the corrections for me, would be :
1. (is okay)
2. I will always regret asking this question. My grandpa has always been too honest with me as far as I can remember (because she can't remember how he was when she was born :XD: everyone forgot their memory from their birth to around 4 years old)
3. ...He could have just told me anything back then...that comes from a factory...that makes it with love and...(because food is singular here)... and I would have believe it.
4. I remember his face. he looked so sad, so empty, as he was looking through the window and said...
5. ...all those things come from...
(the ''...'' are jst to separate the places where the grammar is fine ^_^)
So that would be the corrections I'd make :p hope it helps, even if I think many others already did that ^^;
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WildRedRose14 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
D= So sad! But i want MORE!
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Sushi-Ice-Cream Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2010
Will this be out at bookstores? O.O

:la:
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RavenAspen Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2010
I would hope so.
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neocoolstar Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
He could have lied to me. He could have told me anything like "Food grows from a fairytale creature named 'Tree' which is made of love and sugar" and I would believe him.

I remember his face so sad and empty as he looks out the window and said the words I will never forget

The details are amazing! Loving it so far :)
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southernob Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2010
very impressive page. I'm in love with ur manga already!
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:iconzwoondawl:
Zwoondawl Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010
Their is just one part in the text that bugs me, the last sentence of this paragraphe, and here's how I'd change it to make it sound smoother.

He could have just lied to me, he could have just told me anything, like "Food grows from a fairytale creature named the Tree that comes from factory that makes them with love and sugar." and I would have believed him.

Love the drawing by the way. :)
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elsevilla Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
thanxs
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:iconzwoondawl:
Zwoondawl Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
No probleme. :) I'm naturaly obsessed with grammatical errors, and you gave me the excuse to correct you. :P
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yuki-mekishiko Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
estaba viendo las versiones viejas de Manadryad Lament... esta bien distinto.. xD usaras a los mismos personajes aun asi? por que si si, ya quiero saber como van a encajar en la historia que ahora haces
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cheat20jack Featured By Owner May 11, 2010
Your awesome!
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Nocmin Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I am intrigued! This sounds very cool.

Here's a way the one text box could go:

He could have told me anything, like "Food grows from a fairytale creature called a 'tree' that comes from a factory and makes it all with love and sugar" and I would have believed it.

And in the next box, have "looked" instead of "looks" to keep the past tense up.

Again, very nicely done and interesting stuff!
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T-babe Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
Well I'm interested.
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Voltarrens Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
would like to see more :)
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TalesOfLumin Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2010   Photographer
Loving this series of pictures! Keep up the great work :D
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FalyneVarger Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2010  Professional General Artist
Love the layout. It flows perfectly. :heart:
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neogio Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Professional General Artist
Sup bro! I think if you are making the symbolism of the belief of "Mother Earth" as in the factories are "Killing her" with the pollution it is making, then you should probably say "WE" in large italics font. And "am killing" should probably be changed to "are" killing.

"From" and "A" on the third dialogue box should be separated, because they are two different words.

So far, the art and the story have a great feel to it hermano! Buen trabajo con esto! Sige haciendo mas por favor! :) Faved :D
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SoulfulBubbles Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Student Writer
i really like what you got going so far
i love the ideas, the perspective and the art

the only slightly awkward thing wording wise is " fairytale creature named tree"
The tree, would be more clear
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Sephirot-Unknown Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010
es un "13" lo que veo en la frente de la chica?
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
jajaj si, le entendiste
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:iconasmodexus:
Asmodexus Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010
Is this going to be a comic on your DA or will it be like Leviticus Cross, in book form?
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
if i can find a printer like a printed book
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:iconasmodexus:
Asmodexus Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010
Is this going to be a comic on your DA or will it be like Leviticus Cross, in book form?
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djausdr Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010
Ah Finally !

Another Hamadryad Lament page !

You just cast a sunbeam on my muddy rainy day !

Thank you !
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
thanxs
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Hinotechi Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Makes me think that they're speaking about killing mother earth?
Great work :3
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
thats not it but you are close
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kanaete-onegai Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010
Do you sell your story? and if so, where can i buy them? particularly this one. :D
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:iconelsevilla:
elsevilla Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2010  Professional Digital Artist
i just start it, going to upload pages today
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