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Pedals pressed sustain the word
Dolce whispers softly heard,
Keys caressed like lovers cheeks
With notes, phonetics, music speaks.
19 words! This was a lot of fun to write. :D

The "Reverie" of the title is my favourite piano piece, Reverie (Daydream) by Tchaikovsky. I learnt it just over a year ago and can't imagine where I would be without it. :heart:

This is my entry for akarra's short poem contest: [link] , [link] . It challenges you to write a poem in under 30 words, and although I saw it only yesterday the words formed overnight and I had to enter them! :love:
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shadytales Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Writer
this is amazing, i love it
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dweckie Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Student Writer
thank you! I was really proud of this one so it's lovely to hear that (:
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SRSmith Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013   Writer
I love this. I've played piano on and off for years, so the language resonated completely with me. What a fantastic piece of poetry.

One thought, in the last line I get two possible meanings or intentions that raise punctuation questions; 'With notes phonetics, music speaks.', I'm wondering if this shouldn't be 'With notes, phonetics, music speaks.' or 'With note's phonetics, music speaks.' Either music is speaking with notes and phonetics (the former), or music is speaking with the phonetics of the (belonging to) the notes, as in the latter.

Just a thought!
:-)
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you for your compliments! I'm proud of this piece. (:

In response to your thought: I believe I was originally trying to express your solution 'With notes, phonetics, music speaks.' However I may have to think about whether or not to edit it, as that may make for too many breaks in the last line which could make it stand out too much from the rest of the piece.

I hadn't actually noticed so thank you for bringing it to my attention! :heart:
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SRSmith Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013   Writer
I find controlling the pace in the last line a good way to end a piece, and proper punctation trumps all else, besides, I like the way it reads with the pauses the additional comma adds.
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dweckie Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
Then I find myself changing my mind. Also it adds more emphasis to the last two words this way, thus highlighting the message of the piece more clearly. Thanks for your input! (:
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SRSmith Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013   Writer
It was my absolute pleasure, as I said I really love this piece.
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Pretty words and imagery. A lovely piece.
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dweckie Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much. (: ♥
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BeyondJen Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :aww:
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Stormcloud-Kitty Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Good luck! So pretty :3
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dweckie Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you lovey! :meow:
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Stormcloud-Kitty Featured By Owner May 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Np :3
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RadiationAlpha Featured By Owner May 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good luck, this is great! :meow:
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dweckie Featured By Owner May 2, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, and for the fave :dance:
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BreeMumford Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student General Artist
Aaah, this is pretty :3 Also, g'luck! :D
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dweckie Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2012  Student Writer
Ah, thankies. And thankies XD
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Aphrodite-101 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012
That was beautiful! I loved the imagery!
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dweckie Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much, and for the fave as well!
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
good luck on the contest :handshake:
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dweckie Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :highfive:
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TheDarkenedBride Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome :)
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akarra Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much for your submission! It's a really neat poem, fun to read!
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dweckie Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2012  Student Writer
My pleasure, thanks for the prompt, watch and fave!
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