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Martyr title page. by DriRose Martyr title page. by DriRose
[link] Colored.

Please look at the colored version and critique it here! The color is more important to me that this sketch. xD

So, :iconpreludet0death: and I are writing a story together. The first chapter is now in it's revision phase. :clap:

My ref- (c) C. Lijewski's Re:play. Or :iconnyanko-chan: is her deviantart.
She kind've reminds me of Nyu/Lucy from Elfen lied. :nod:
But no, this is the story's leading lady, December. The amulet she wears around her neck is also a crucial part of the story.

So um...here's a summary (god am I bad at these)
December gets sent to earth by her father, king of the dominos realm. There she meets Templar, a man who cannot remember anything about himself. The two are somehow linked, however, and as the story progresses the mystery of Templar's purpose is revealed. o_o

A new deviantart page will be made for the story, don't worry y'all will be informed. :nod:
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:iconburtzman:
Burtzman Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2007
I love the colored version a lot!
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:iconpreludet0death:
Preludet0Death Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2007
Awesome. I like the colored version better though. But the draft looks great. I like the pose here. But it does look more amplified colored.
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:icondrirose:
DriRose Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2007  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks. :hug:
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:iconyumixtobiko:
yumixtobiko Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2007
i agree with zatou kun. i really love the design, but if this is a cover page, you gotta make it pop! but amazing work, none the less. can't wait to see th enew d.a page!
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:iconbanzatou:
Banzatou Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2007  Professional Digital Artist
Woops, accidentally pressed 'send' before I could finish off what I was trying to say. <_<"

Well, since you've asked for critiquing, I'll point out a couple:

1) Unless this is just for you and several friends to read, this is good enough, you don't need to make any more corrections. However, if you really want to grab other readers' attentions, then I highly suggest to figure out how to blend the character and the background together a little more to show that she's part of the background instead of looking like she was cut out from a magazine. (The title 'Martyr' too looks like it was cut out and pasted onto another piece of paper. Try to blend that with the background somehow as well.)

and 2) I know I said the colouring is simplified enough to look acceptable to the public, but since this is the front cover of the graphic novel, then I would also suggest to add some more detail onto the character, so you can make first-time readers look at the main page and be impressed. Remember, if you can get at least one person to look at the front cover and have an expression that says "Wow, that's pretty good", then you've done your job to suck them into the story. <3

But just remember, whatever I'm saying now isn't set in stone, so you don't really need to do what I've told you; I'm just pointing out what could probably help further the artwork. ^_^ All in all, the concept idea feels promising, and if you can play your cards right, then I give you a thumbs up for that. =)
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:icondrirose:
DriRose Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2007  Professional Traditional Artist
Thank you so much!! I really appreciate it!! :hug:
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:iconbanzatou:
Banzatou Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2007  Professional Digital Artist
The colouring is simplified, but it's good enough to serve its purpose~ :)
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:icondemiton:
Demiton Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2007  Student Digital Artist
the lines in the hair are an odd color, and you might want to try and contrast the background and the red hair some more. but all in all great job it looks good.
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:icondrirose:
DriRose Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2007  Professional Traditional Artist
Thanks!
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