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Victim

A sigh
That could obliterate the indestructible
A tear
That can crush any emotional-barrier
A life
That seems beyond cruel
A fear
That is far out of control


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It's impossible almost every night / You're the one who left me traumatized
As my lungs become EVER-so numb / This damage can NEVER be undone
Then my wounded memory floods / You will always be a part of my blood

Gasping for air
Holding my head
Afflicted by despair
I will never be able to forget

Living like this
One can only pretend
There is no such thing as darkness
But I knew I could not prevent the end

A part of me
Has that one wish
There was no tragedy
Ever to begin with

Innocence is held down
By what cannot be seen
Dark images are bound
Thou will forever be a part of me

I want to be set free / From your relentless agony
I'm starting to forget what it's like / To feel a complete soul inside
Though I hope you're doing well / I can't wait to see you here in hell

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A predator
That can destroy you with a touch
A person
Who didn't deserve what they got
A monster
That you will always remember
A victim
Who can't stay strong forever
Another anxiety session
Another dark inspiration
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These are my own standards, I don't care about anyone else's standards on poetry, I'm not some edgar allen poe, I'm not trying to make writing my career, so don't assume I am. I know it's cliche, I know it's stereotypical, you don't need to point it out like so many others have.
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In volume four: Hold My Life
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freaky208 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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exiledfaie Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
nice.
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks.
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I was going to add to that I can relate ^^;
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
awww *hugs* I hope you liked it at least.
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I didn't just like it I loved it lol :XD:
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"A victim
Who can't stay strong forever"
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you for providing attributions for the elements used in your visual's for the cover of the work. Fine visual art.
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BoundlessFlight Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student General Artist
I absolutely LOVE this.
It's so unique! :D
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I'm so glad that you felt that way. :D
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XxIcyMizuxX Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Gorgeous poetry!!
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :D
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KillerKitten87 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for sharing this, it was very beautiful, deep, inspirational and touching. Excellent work!
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kind words, I'm so happy that you found this to your liking. It means a lot.
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KillerKitten87 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh I loved it. nice display pic too. is that Sully?
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, yeah it's him.

<3 Godsmack
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Imxinxmyxownxworld Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student General Artist
wow that is so beautiful!! I have no improvements, it's so perfect! It rhymes perfectly, not too much and not too little, and it wasn't cheesy and annoying whatsoever! I LOVE IT!
I hope you aren't in a lot of pain at the moment, and my prayers are with you for any problems or fears you have, God bless! <3
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kindness, it means a lot to me right now. <3
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Imxinxmyxownxworld Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student General Artist
It's alright, I do really hope everything gets much much better soon. <3
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TheOnlyJester Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
...I relate so much to this.... You're a great writer. <3
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well thank you, comments like these mean a lot to a writer <3
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BlackLuna Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
There's nothing completely unique: we are always inspired my art, nature or life itself. And there's also nothing completely out of stereotypes: we don't know everything about the world so we have to deduct what we don't know by the information we have in our hands.

And even if it was a cliche or stereotypical, what others have to do with it? What if you were trying to make a living with your writings? It's you. Your feelings. Your ideas. Your views. If people have a problem with that let them deal with it. ;)

Now, the real comment: I liked how you play with the structure of the poem. It sets the mood: fragile&dark. It's a favourite. :)
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for your kind words, and I'm so glad you liked this one. :)
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BlackLuna Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem. ;)
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
"A victim

Who can't stay strong forever"

Best line. I love this. Beautiful poem.
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DreamsDeprived Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I was trying my best to integrate a decent ending, and by the time I was to finish it off, that came to me and I just left it like that.
I"m so happy that you liked it, it means a lot. :)
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Xhiao-Yuu Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is beautiful, and it's absolutely full of emotion! >W<
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