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Into the Universe

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Here we have the commissioned background for the Edubuntu 11.04 Ubuntu release. It's made to envoke wonder at the vastness of the universe, from the very small to the very large.

It'll be set as the default background for the release and I'm very excited to have my art appear on so many kids computers. Here we have the svg and a large wide screen 2550x1600 png for your consumption.

Set as 'Zoom' to get the correct effect.

This art is Creative Commons, Attribution, Share Alike. Do not create a derivative from the svg unless your work is the same license and to attribute you should link to this page and print my full name.

Created in Inkscape on Ubuntu 10.10, Revision 16
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SinisterSeduction's avatar
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

This is such an interesting piece. It reminds me of a geography map that shows elevations with the way the colors go lighter or darker in a circular fashion. That said I don't love everything about it.

The outline around the mountain:
This is the only thing in the picture with an outline and it draws a large amount of attention to the mountain. You would think that the shading alone would do that but the outline on the mountain detracts from the white crest and makes it look flat. I would suggest trying to wrap the shading so the mountain looks round like a pointed cone instead of like an arrow.

Tones:
You might use just a few more tones to establish dark areas from middle areas because at a glance my eyes see a lot of the same shade of dark green and it makes the picture seem all to dark. If that makes sense. What I mean is that if you took this and made it into a black and white photo I think it would have a lot of areas that would show up just black.

The moon, the sun, the star trail, the plant, the leaf, even the lady bug all look perfect. I think my biggest problems are just coming in with the landscape that you've layered over them.
PomPrint's avatar
Thanks for doing this critique Illyria! i ran out of time to do one myself last night.

I'm glad that martin found it useful. :teamwork:
SinisterSeduction's avatar
...No problem....I've been staring at that smiley for a few minutes...what is it doing?
PomPrint's avatar
If you mouse over it you will see it says 'Team Work'! : teamwork : (without spaces).
SinisterSeduction's avatar
Oh no I caught that. What I can't tell is what it's doing to whatever is hanging over it's head.
PomPrint's avatar
I think you need to get out a bit more Illyria!!!!! :lmao:
doctormo's avatar
Thank you for your critique. I agree with your assessment and there may still be time to modify the image before release.

The power of vector graphics :-D
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PomPrint's avatar
I really like this one. Well done Martin!
doctormo's avatar
Fancy doing a critique? It's already in Ispirare. I guess I could do a critique swap, two for one? (I do two of random in group, you get someone to do one here)?
PomPrint's avatar
No problem Martin. Consider it done. No need for any exchange...friendship is the currency in Ispirare! ;-) I suggest, too that we might affiliate the groups. This would allow your members to enter our contests. Let me know what you think.
doctormo's avatar
It's a good idea, if you haven't already, make it so.
PomPrint's avatar
I have sent the request in. I will get round to doing your critique as soon as I can. I am going out this afternoon, but I might get a chance tonight.
doctormo's avatar
Or you can ask someone else :-) It's up to you.
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You are welcome!
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