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Phew! This one was a beast!
This was a commission for :iconhlpedin: based on her two school mascots: a panther and phoenix (a green phoenix, hence the green feather ;))
This was also my first attempt at doing two horses in one image... X.X
I'm not really sure how many times I repainted all the hair... I'm still not 100% happy with it but as a whole I think it's pretty badass. :D

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Image details
Image size
1104x716px 702.59 KB
Make
SONY
Model
DSC-W120
Shutter Speed
1/1250 second
Aperture
F/9.0
Focal Length
9 mm
ISO Speed
125
Date Taken
Feb 10, 2010, 3:04:45 PM
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xDividedx's avatar
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

This is amazing <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/m/m…" width="15" height="15" alt=":meow:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="578" title="Meow :3"/>
But there are several major flaws I see.
The lightning of your horses are very wrong. The lighting is more above the horses. The black horses' lighting looks ok. Could use some light change on the legs and more on the back. The smoky palomino horses' lighting is off completely. Her lighting is in the middle of her body. Her body needs to be darker in the middle and more light at the top of her back, rump, and face.
Second flaw is the lighting of the hair. Once again, the lighting on the smoky palomino is in the middle. Needs to be darker at the top of the mane for the roots, but room for highlights, and darker at the ends. The tail is perfect. The black horses' mane needs to be lighter at the ends and darker at the roots. The tail could use some lighter strands at the end too.
Third flaw is the shadow. Ok. You need to add reflection too. Shadow comes after the reflection. The shadows are over lapping each other and just doesn't look right. And the black horses' shadow doesn't even match up to his hooves. The lighter horses' shadow looks pretty dead on. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt=":)" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=":) (Smile)"/>
Fourth flaw is the splashes. They are to small. For the lighter horse, she is moving. The splashes need to be bigger and splashing up where her legs are coming out of the water. The black horses' splashes could be a bit bigger too due to a previous movement. The splashes could be going in a slightly downward position.
Fifth flaw is your background. Nothing is blurred. Yes, the main focus is the horses, but the background doesn't say that. It really needs to be blurred in the back where the waves and sky are.
I hope this helps <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="15" height="15" alt=":aww:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="349" title="Aww"/>
Hope I wasn't too nasty.. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/n/n…" width="17" height="16" alt=":nuu:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="596" title="Nuu"/>
I apologize if I was..
You have great talent!! Keep up the good work! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="577" title="La la la la"/>
Feline-Passion's avatar
Wow! This is amazing! You are amazing at these manipulations.
DirtySunshine95's avatar
Thank you so much!
DiamondHoofbeats's avatar
This is so amazing!!!!!!
Korvuus's avatar
Was this lovely picture inspired by a particular song by....Fall out Boy?:D
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Korvuus's avatar
Good taste, good taste ;)
themarchcat's avatar
I loovvee the brightly colored feathers! Your hair painting is getting really good too! =D
DirtySunshine95's avatar
Thanks! I feel like these two are not my best hair paint jobs though :/
hlpedin's avatar
You are absolutely amazing, thank you so much! :)
DirtySunshine95's avatar
So glad you like it!
hlpedin's avatar
It's almost ironic that you made that the title...my two universities actually are rivals in sports, both in-state and league. Ah, I can't get over how wonderful it is! lol
DirtySunshine95's avatar
LoL! That is crazy! I took it from Fall Out Boy's new song "The Phoenix"
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