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If I decide to multi-task and begin writing yet another novel, which one should it be, based on the prologues I've posted recently here on dA? 

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10 deviants said Never More--just because I want to see you drive yourself nuts researching that time period.
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8 deviants said The Falconer's Daughter--just because that dude snorting cocain has such a modern sexy feel.
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6 deviants said Your grocery list--just because.
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5 deviants said jon.com/jackson--just because I want to see what happens next in the saga of Jonathan Smythe.
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5 deviants said I have no opinion--just because I didn't read all those dang prologues yet.
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5 deviants said None of them--just because it will slow you down and you'll never finish Fellowship Lost.

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:iconmithgariel:
Mithgariel Featured By Owner May 10, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I haven't had any time to read the prologues yet (esp.since I really, really suck at reading from screen, wish I had one of those fancy e-readers or such...). But still... could I see your grocery list? Pwetty pwease?!
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 10, 2011
Currently, my grocery list includes: toilet paper, toothpaste, a new toothbrush, eggs, milk, tomato juice and some kind of side dish to go with the keilbasa I have in the freezer. Lol.
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davidanaandrake Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Writer
Finally read the prologues and voted!
(Sorry it took so long, been spending all my brain energy on the website and writing my own stuff I haven't left much energy for dA reading. :heart:)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
I know how that goes. Thanks!
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davidanaandrake Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Professional Writer
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:iconjesiryu:
Jesiryu Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Vote complete: Never More

This was a tough choice, as all three prologues had very different things going for them.

As a fan of jon.com, I'm really, really interested to see what sort of twisty-turny story your muse and characters have in mind for the sequel, but the prologue was more like a pair of comfy house shoes than the stiletto heels I know are tucked away somewhere in there. Great for fans of the book who know you'll deliver, but not quite enough to sell me a new pair sight-unseen.

The Falconer's Daughter took a bit of muscling through in the beginning but it smoothed out and started whispering hints of plot and intrigue by the middle. The end of this one grabbed me hard, and I was shouting right along with Keitha by the time they threw him out of the party. The flash-forward at the end was smooth and heart-wrenching, and nearly sold me on this being "the one" to win my vote. But as palpable the emotion was at the end, this struck me as more of a strength within the characters, albeit an awesome one, that needs a few tweaks for me to really sink my teeth into it. Has uber potential, but the time-jumping back and forth in the beginning (from him in the present to him as a kid and I wasn't sure where the flashes to the scene on the road were supposed to fit precisely) was what lost me just enough to toss my vote to the third contender.

Never More was as smooth as silk to read. I was intrigued the entire way through, and the slow illumination to what was really going on tickled at my intellect just enough to have me itching to know if I was right in what I thought was going on throughout the reveal without being the least bit confusing. This is the kind of story that I love: characters who are not ashamed of what they are even knowing they can't be classified as "good", a taste of intrigue in the world to wonder why such measures were necessary that makes me want to see what more the first chapter holds, and enough of a solid presence of of mystery to keep my mind solidly occupied in the happy land of "oh I know" "well maybe not, but" "oh yes, yes, that is what I wanted to see".

Loved all of them, truly dearly. But of the three, Never More definitely wins for me.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
What a complete and welcome analysis!

I've pretty much decided it won't be jon.com/jax for two reasons: I'm not sure I want to reveal what author Jonathan Smythe THOUGHT happened at the end of jon.com. Sort of spoils the intent of the original ending. Plus, I don't have quite as clear an idea about the plot as the other two stories.

Ahhh now, The Falconer's Daughter! That one has been fleshed out in every direction. I even have a binder of notes, character profiles, setting details, and plot notes. It OUGHT to be my hands-down fave.

But that was before I wrote the prologue for Ever More! That story just seemed to beg to be written. I DO have a strong plotline in mind, and the tale is relatively simple--which should make it extremely powerful to write AND to read. The research though! Yikes. I would have to do some heavy digging to build up my knowledge of that time period.

I'm leaning toward one story over all others, but we shall see. Gonna :sleep: on it!
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:iconkeight:
keight Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
The Falconer's Daughter--and NOT just because that dude snorting cocaine has such a modern sexy feel.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
There's a complex -- and potentially controversial -- plot to Falconer's Daughter. I wonder if some people are picking up hints of that that they find intriguing.
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:iconkeight:
keight Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
It is possible; as that is one of the reasons for prologues.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
If they are writtne correctly, yes. Most are not... mine included. They take SO much damn work to refine!
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:iconkeight:
keight Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
Poetry disguised as prose.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Yup. As good a description as any. Wish I was a better poet!
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azrael1984 Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
I obviously have a bias to historical stories, but I did genuinely like the beginning of Ever More and thought it creepy and intriguing. While I'd also like to know what happens to Jackson, Ever More is drawing me in somewhat more. XD
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Can I tell you a secret? It's doing that to me too. The one I thought had the least chance of emerging the winner has come alive with the writing of that prologue. I LOVE them ALL, but EM has an edge right now. I just wish I had your gift for researching and integrating history into fiction. :sigh:
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:iconazrael1984:
azrael1984 Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
Aww hon, I'm very flattered!But you seem to be doing fine so far, and I think once you've got the research done it should be easier. There's a great book somewhere called "What Jane Austen ate and Charles Dickens knew" and it's got lots of info on how everyday-life was run back in the 19th Century (though the focus of that book is quite English-specific, I think it's still really helpful with period research). :)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
Hmmm, I might have to look that up. However, I did have this story set more in the 17th or 18th Century. Do you think what I have written so far can make that couple of hundred years jump?
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:iconazrael1984:
azrael1984 Featured By Owner May 9, 2011
I think so - I don't recall any particularly obvious indications of time period other than it being clear that this was all pre-industrial. Off the top of my head I can't think of a similar kind of guide for the 17th/18th century but if I come across anything I'll let you know. :)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 9, 2011
Thank you muchly, ma'am.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
I vote focus. However your brain works I don't know, but for me I need to focus. So yep. Focus on flost.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
I'm finding I can revive flagging energy by taking mini vacations to other projects. So focus may not be enough for me. :shrug: We will see, we will see.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
INDEED. I haven't written shit in a month so that's a vacation for me! ha ha. >.>
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Sometimes the break is needed. I worry that I won't start up again though, so this new technique of writing ANYTHING that is dancing around in my head is a way to keep my fingers and synapes limbered up while the other story sits idling in neutral.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Uh yeah. I dunno when I'll start writing again. MAYBE TONIGHT. Maybe not. I know I'll write again one day so I don't bother to push things. Haha.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
Exactly. You've learned you WILL return, so it's not as scary to go on hiatus as it was in the early days of your writing... right? At least, that's how I feel.
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LunaticStar Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
I dunno, I never was super serious about writing until I started TD and I haven't stopped since then. XD
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Bitten and duly infected. Still, you had doubts about finishing The Drowned, but you powered through them. Now you know you can come back and finish any job, no matter how stalled you might get.
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:iconwriterofstuff:
WriterOfStuff Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Professional Writer
That's what Good Charlotte Walker's doing for me right now. When I can't focus on the vamps, I channel a little energy on the wolfen. ;)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
I'm starting to understand why Stephen King writes so many novels. I'm betting he has dozens in partial stages of completion that he can flip back and forth between when he needs to rev his creative engines.
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:iconkeight:
keight Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
That was the way Dr. Issac Asimov wrote. (Also why he owned so many selectric typewriters.)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
Oh lord, yes. Back then he couldn't pop open a folder on his computer could he? I can just see typewriters everywhere with half-written pages poking out of the top.
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:iconkeight:
keight Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
From what I've learned, that's just about the way it was, with a couple of extras when one needed servicing.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
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:iconwriterofstuff:
WriterOfStuff Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Professional Writer
I bet you're right. My problem is, I need to knuckle down and finish one of 'em. :giggle: I have Rebirth of the Seer on the editing block, and Good Charlotte Walker and Peter's fifth, The Unavoidable Present, as partials. Got a few more hours in the day? :faint:
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 6, 2011
And I would buy them all, my dear!
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shayerahol22 Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
I'm not really sure :XD: I pretty much love everything you write, so... -shrug- Falconer's daughter has a pretty interesting start, although I generally dislike massive timeskips and the like. The jon.com one was fun too and definitely an interesting read, should you get around to it.

Honestly though, I think Ever More caught me the most. I'm not really sure as to why, though, since I just read finished reading it and I'm half-dead. The week's only halfway over and it's already too long xD

What's the exact time period for EM?
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
EM is set roughly in 16th Century England, with flashbacks to more ancient times--thus the need for some research on this one. Edmund is an immortal who keeps trying to recreate his mortal and now dead wife from centuries ago. The next Lady Sarah won't stand for such manipulation. Who will win? Or will they both lose a love that might have transcended time?

As for FD, there really isn't a massive time skip. N'hander Falls--where Pia and Keitha come from--exists in modern times, but the town is cut off from the world. They are sort of Amish-like in that they adhere to a few old ways. And therein lies the problem. The current Falconer wants to bring them into the 21st Century. Keitha and his clan are not certain about moving forward.

Did I just make things tougher for you? Lol.
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shayerahol22 Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Haha, probably xD They're both really good plots :meow:
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
Thanks. I've had them in my head for years now. Time for one or both of them to take their first steps.
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Penfury Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
Just for the record, you posted the last prologue as "Ever More". And I didn't vote so you can't count me. yet. I see pros and cons for each story and I think I have a good idea what to expect from the first 2. Never More (to me) sounds like it has the most potential for being more complicated plotwise. Devious even. Like Deja Few. :D You can't write a bad story, so you have much writing ahead of you. Pick which seems most fun at the moment. :heart:
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
Oops, typo! That title has to change anyway. I've just been told it's the same name of a popular YA series. Actually, Every More has the simplest plot... but the most complicated setting, requiring lots of research to keep it authentic.

Ah, now which one seems the most "fun"? Not an easy decision. It's been good though to get them each out of my head and started on paper.
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:iconpenfury:
Penfury Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
research has its pitfalls, like distracting one from finding just what they need to know and not a wikipedia-full of interesting yet unnecessary bits of info. Oddly, EM had me thinking about Dark Shadows. Yes, I'm old enough to have watched that soap. lol And I know it is not the same era. Perhaps the ambiance?
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 5, 2011
So true. I'm thinking I might do a little sleuthing before I write, and then let the info settle into a back corner of my brain before sitting down at the keyboard. That way, it's there, but it's subliminal. IF I tackle this one, that is.

Hey, I watched DS too! Ran home from school every day so we wouldn't miss it. Barnabas Collins lives! I guess there is a bit of that ambiance here, though it is not intentional... and I think the next Lady Sarah would blow that vibe right out of the cess pool.
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:iconpenfury:
Penfury Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
:D I'll be watching to see.
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 8, 2011
I'm relying on it!
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:iconikkuma:
ikkuma Featured By Owner May 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmm.... I've read both The Falconer's Daughter and Ever More (which, by the way, is the title of a popular young adult fiction series. this may give you some problems.) and I love them both!! TFD was very dark and seemed like it would turn out to be gruesome, and possibly frightening. With EM, I had a brighter image, but it was very gray and sad. And also dark. I love them both, and I simply can't decide. If I ABSOUTELY MUST choose, I choose The Falconer's Daughter, because it seemed like it could turn into a love story - and I'm a sucker for a love story. :)
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
Thanks for the tip on Ever More. The title was tentative, so I don't mind rethinking it. Lol on your reactions! Yes, they both have the potential for darkness... but it won't help you decide if I confess they both are love stories too. At their core, they have the same conflict (one that is somewhat common to Fellowship of Psys as well): An older male dealing with his attraction to a young female who he follows into adulthood--and in the case of EM, tries to mold into the kind of grown woman he could love.
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ikkuma Featured By Owner May 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohhhhhhh! Don't tell me that! I want to read them both now!! Argh, silly, ebil writer lady! ROAR!

(PS, I'm finished school. And at home, all day, usually doing nothing of importance. And it is after May 1st. *hint hint* :) )
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:icondenlm:
denlm Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
Talk about ebil! You really want to add to my already overloaded project To-Do basket? :grumbles at having too many decisions to make:
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:iconikkuma:
ikkuma Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
ahaha, i know the feeling darlin. just do which one you want to write! which one's characters feel stronger in your mind? which plot do you have outlined most? do the one that feels closest to you.
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