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My Little Dashie: The Visual Novel (link in desc.)

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After 3 years of doing absolutely nothing, WE DID IT. Thank you to everyone who waited this long because I certainly wouldn't have. Friends were made, skills were developed, time was wasted, and now I'd like to present the My Little Dashie visual novel. :dummy:

Windows: :star: www.mediafire.com/download/suh… :star: (just download, extract, click on the application)
Mac: :star: www.mediafire.com/download/fj9… :star:

Also on Equestria Daily: www.equestriadaily.com/2015/02…

(make sure you see the credits because this was not done completely by myself)

MLP (c) Hasbro
MLD (c) ROBCakeran53
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robocart9Student General Artist
there should be a visual novel for MLD 2, the sequel. I would LOVE for that to happen, but, ass i see, this is about a year old, and i dont know how to code yet XD and i cant really make my own vsual novels XD
AlicornCapony's avatar
This is fantastic. It's been a while since something's made me cry. It made me feel a little like I did when I first started watching MLP almost 5 years ago. Thank you. <3
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I came across with My Little Dashie today. It made me have feels, and I wanted to say thank you for making this fine peace of work.
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DonsssssssHobbyist General Artist
This is the best! I love this! And I thought I was over the story, by the way...guess you really proved me wrong. Waaaah! 
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Thanks ;u;
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sweetymimy22Hobbyist General Artist
and where I can play it
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XeronikHobbyist Writer
okay, i have good and bad things to say, and dammit, i hate to be THAT guy who actually has standards, but i grill even Key/VisualArts for stuff they write.  i can't believe i am the only person who has critiques to express, am i just that analytical?  well, here we go, watch me as every fan of this VN crucifies me, here we go.

now, i'm not here to bash you, and i'm not here to put down your hard work, but there are some things i must address.  i have not made specific notes yet, but if you really need me to, i can make a more defined list, but as is there are

1: spelling errors
2: grammatical errors
3: bad pacing and plot progression during the bulk of the middle of the story
4: soundtrack cuts out for many scenes during the early mid, and late mid story
5: the way he explained his motives for moving seemed half backwards
6: plotholes: we get very limited information of backplot and world building, goes hand and hand with the pacing issue, but specifically: what job does he work?  what friends did he have?  how did he not have any close calls of having a rainbow colored pony?  how did RD earn her Cutie Mark in this world, a self-realization never really was expressed in this plot?

and a few more nitpicks, it seemed like the writer stopped watching the show after season 2, since A: no Twilicorn, and B: the idea that he couldn't go with her to Equestria (considering the mirror from EqG could have solved that problem).  i can understand for the drama element, that this contrivance was in order to make this more emotional, but that is just a personal issue i had i suppose, and not a big deal anyway.

another nitpick, which also makes me believe that the writer wrote this forever ago, The Hub is now Discover Family.

now granted, if i'm not already nailed to a crucifix by you all yet, i will say that aside from obvious errors, lackluster pacing and a weak contrived plot progression throughout most of the story, it does finish with a flurry, and what it lacks in substance early on, it picks up a mean punch towards the end that almost got a tear out of me.

but i'm sorry, i will not be a sheep, i gotta be honest, this story needs work, i would not pass this as a quality story, but there is hope!  fix the grammar and spelling as you find it, elaborate a more deeper plot progression, and then i'd say it's solid.  the last 20~ scenes work as is, but they lack the force behind a good story to make it that much more powerful.

but in this story, everything feels like you're flipping through a montage, there's not enough buildup and emotion in a lot of these early to late middle scenes.  i'm sorry if i'm busting you hard on this, but i hate seeing wasted potential  :(  i hope you can take my thoughts and opinions as inspiration to made a second version, and i'm not even asking for more art, i'm asking for more words, better elaborated words, spelled and grammatically correct words.

but really, i liked this concept, but i feel like you could have written it much better, or maybe it was ROBCakeran53?  whoever wrote the story could have done better, and i implore you to attempt an updated version with more heart and soul into a complete story, instead of putting all your energy in the final scenes, which this is what i felt like this was, a weak setup for a hard hitting ending.

that's my 2 cents, sorry that i didn't blindly love this story, but i hope that you can see my words as constructive, have a good day :)
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(sorry for the super late reply, I haven't been here in a while)

Thank you, it's actually refreshing to hear actual criticism once in a while. xD
Just for the record, it was indeed ROBCakeran that wrote the actual story. I just did the art for the VN. But I think everyone agrees that the story has major problems on multiple fronts.
Although I'd rather stay as far away from visual novels as possible for now, I'll definitely take your points into account with my other projects. I'm glad you took the time to write this out!
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XeronikHobbyist Writer
ah okays, well good work on the art mate, and yeah, i get the feeling that My Little Dashie was just one of those cases of "over-rated".  i want to see a quality story adapted to VN, like Under Her Wings by Karrakaz, but that is just me ^_^

have a good day though, you should read some of Karrakaz's fictions, they are not all brilliant, but i think the ongoing stories The Guardian, and Under Her Wings are well worded and paced <3
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XeronikHobbyist Writer
i'm gonna give this a check out and let you know what i think when i'm done, i haven't touched a VN since i got about 20% through Clannad, and like 6 hours into Rewrite (yeah, i have a thing for Key/Visual Arts, hehe)
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SoulfulMirrorHobbyist Digital Artist
The only one left thing that need to be added is voice acting. With it, the experience will far more wonderful!
spaceman022's avatar
you did an awesome job with the drawings and music.thank you
MoppyPuppy's avatar
Spank it.
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RainbowDash2222's avatar
Finally, I lost hope there had not been an update on daily oat studios for like 3 years :D
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KyoshyuHobbyist General Artist
Can't wait to try it!
britton1999's avatar
That story actually made me cry.but just a little:/
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GreenRaptor15Professional Digital Artist
I just went through the novel and am amazed.  I really would've loved this back in 2012 when I first discovered the story.  I'm amazed with how many illustrations that you did, hope you didn't hurt your wrist.
LivonBrony's avatar
I just finished the VN and... wow! That was so beautiful!
I have actually never read the original but I saw a couple videos and visualizations on Youtube and what you made topped it all! The lovely art style and the dang good music.
In the very end where everypony startes to cry I broke... I just couldn't hold myself anymore and I assume that's most likely what you had in mind.

I want to thank you all for what you made. Especially after all the time that's passed, I really am happy that you finished the VN at all.
To say it with EgonDaLatz words: "You [...] deserve every praise coming from the fans!"
I also want to thank you that you didn't encoded the music and the pics because it all is too awesome to be hidden and locked away.
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And thank you for the comment <3
Ismalith's avatar
WoW I never heard that this had been in production
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EgonDaLatzHobbyist General Artist
The moment near the end of the VN, when the narrator/father says goodbye to RD, and Dashie just stares at you, then starts to cry... It broke me.
It was sad, when I read My Little Dashie; it was very sad, when I saw the movie made from it by :iconstormxf3:; but I think the way you realized the whole thing had the biggest impact on me so far. Oh, why did you have to break my heart again MLD?!

OK, in all seriousness, this VN is fantastic in all its aspects: wonderful art, good background music, and last but not least, not lacking the emotional impact that made the source material famous. (even with the somewhat "altered" ending)
All I have to say is: thank you and anybody else working on the VN for this beautiful masterpiece! You deserved and deserve every praise coming from the fans! Überkudos :peace:
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Hi there. Just wanted to say that I did a live reading of this story using your VN. I have to say I loved the music, it was fantastic. The art was brilliant. Thank you for all the time you put into this. I was worried this would never see the light of day, but you pulled it off. :)

Gotta ask tho. Why? Why did you stop it where you did? 

Anywayz (With a z because that makes it cool) if you wanna hear a terrible live reading of it, here's a linky, but I don't expect you to watch it. I'm sure you wanna get as far away from this project as possible, haha. youtu.be/iOm86CWACnI

Thank you again for making this. You're amazing! 
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It's always great to see people do this :D Thanks!

And we basically just wanted to get it done before we ran out of motivation, otherwise it probably would have taken another year to finish xD
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