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Punk Girl

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A heavily modified version of a image I like original is here danbooru.donmai.us/posts/14913…

This image was done with adobe illustrator there are a few things I plan on adding in such as a potential tatoo on her leg a pinky on her hand and a background but I'm out of time for the contest so this is what I have to submit.

If I add anything else I'll update the image.
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LadyRacheya's avatar
:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

My feedback from the contest:

Lineart-
The lineart is overall fairly consistent but when looking closer at it a number of mistakes can be seen. I think that this can most clearly be seen on the straps across her chest and where they intersect with her tie and her shirt. The blue lines of the straps are on top of the black line of the tie and the grey line of her shirt. I like the use of coloured lines, though, as it fits in well with the overall vector.

Coloring-
The colouring of this vector is very good. Particularly the skirt and tie, which is really well done, and the complexity of her ripped tights. I can also like the complexity of her hair, which I think is best appreciated when you zoom in and actually look at all of the different coloured strands. I think the colouring is what makes this vector interesting and the use of subtle textures/shading on areas like the guitar and the green skirt section gives it some character. If I were to criticize the colouring, I would say that compared to the main body of the guitar, some of the other sections of it fall a bit flat – namely the neck and the brown bit (I really don’t know guitar anatomy – apologies!).

Personal favorite feature-
The skirt. Definitely the skirt. I’ve done a much simpler plaid skirt before myself and this one looks 100x better than that while still being more complex.

Extra comment- Just that I really like your vectors in general, Daul. I also like the creativity involved in making the vector so different from the original image. I know I couldn’t do that – I just trace things - and I think it’s really cool.
daul's avatar
Guitar is a little lacking since I ran out of time and the guitar was what got hit the hardest by it.

Also its daul not Daul.
LadyRacheya's avatar
That makes sense, the uniform is kickass though so I think that gets most of the attention when you look at it.

And sorry, of course, daul :)
Dekodere's avatar
:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Here is the evaluation I gave you for your entry in the contest during judging.

Lineart-
Lineart is a bit rough overall. With that said, lines in genral give a good sense of depth. The use of gradients on lines complements very well with the shading of the jacket. The colors for the outlines were well chosen and help directing the focus throughout the image. Most lines suffer from incosistency and look a bit rushed.

Coloring-
Now this is where this vector shines. Not only was the color palette redone from head to toes but everything has been crafted to a new look. Overall very good use of repeated patterns and textures, especially for the skirt. The shading is also very good on clothes but feels a bit lacking on the skin areas and the guitar. The choice of colors doesn't quite manage to all-togheter mix visually but does come togheter for the style and theme behind the image.

Personal favorite feature-
I like the skirt a lot. The combo between both the shading and the manipulation off the pattern gives an excellent realistic effect.

Extra comment- I've gotta say, when you told me you'd change stuff from the original, I didn't think you were crazy enough to redo everything. You've put up one hell of a fight there.

As for the ranking, sadly, your entry was not voted into top 3 from me.
daul's avatar
Line art looks like most of my line art I do, I tend to actually try to leave the lines a little rough but as I like the effect it can give but I understand if its not what some people like.


Only think I'm not sure on for the coloring is the Hat. I still not sure I like the color but never could find anything I liked better. Skin is blown out since that's how I like it to look. Guitar was a little rushed and I plan on updating it when I get time.

On a side note First and 2nd are what I would have done and third was completely different.
Gribbiy's avatar
Judged as "Gribbiy(G)"

Lineart: Can't explain this. Thick in some parts, very thin in others. Hair is quite consistent. Found multiple goofs in the lineart especially by her right hand-bridging between fingers, loose guitar string not over her fingers, a place where the line looks like another line was laid over it with no smooth transition, and a few places where the coloring doesn't reach the lines(also notice the riveted belt by her tie, below bra). Bra also looks unrealistically low. Guitar strings become progressively thinner-depth again, yay! The guitar looks a tad rushed, but the grain looks pretty cool. A bit of the grain is bleeding onto the side of the guitar, not sure if it should be there or not. Clothing is very thick and very thin at parts, but looks right. Leggings look time consuming and are a very nice use of lines.  Fingers on left hand look a little stubby though. But hell, the shoes even have stitched lines! Lineart is inconsistent all over the place, is mainly thick, but it wound up looking good.

Coloring: Bright and vivid. Incredible textures throughout vector. Buttons on her coat even have skulls and pumpkins. Blurs used very nicely for ruffles and folds in clothes; gradients look great on the guitar. The hat shows many a blur, and looks great from afar. The hair is something else. It's unique and brilliant. The studded belt also has many simple shadows, but again, looks great from a distance. Not sure if leggings would have shadows on them because real leggings are against the skin, but w/e. Nice blurs on the legs as well.

Personal Favorite Feature(s): The hair, leggings, detail in the safety pin, and the irises. They look awesome and are well done.

Extra Comment: I've probably said this in the stream, but the necklace is hilarious. I love it for no apparent reason.

Rating: #3.

The hair was the dealbreaker. Sweet vector!

daul's avatar
Also for what its worth the line art being inconsistent is something I actually make a conscious decision to do I think a lot of the line art that people to is frankly boring and much too consistent. This has more to do with my philosophy in regard to art and personal preference, I respect the time and talent it takes to make something consistent all the way through but that does not mean I have to like it.

I think I mentioned it on stream but the necklace is from a band I like a lot called MxPx, they are an old punk band.
daul's avatar
Np blurs other then that its fair.
Gribbiy's avatar
Perhaps I'm mixing up blurs with gradient meshes.
daul's avatar
Yes you are. Blur is a raster effect that is applied to a shape. Gradient mesh is still in a vector format. you should probably be correct about it because some people will take offence to you saying that you used "Blurs" since there is a bit of a controversy around there use, I don't care since a lot of my older vectors used blurs and I think they can work if you know what you are doing with them.
NakkiNya's avatar
Ya, you are, you did with mine too.  We forgive you.
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