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Bob was a man working in a game store for over 15 years. He is 40 years old and is over 8.2 feet,peopl call him 'The giant of games'. His hair was black and his eye were brown. His life was hard,as he had no family,because all of his family member died,and his rented house was going to be taken away today. Bob try to work hard to get pay,but then he fell and broke the new games that came out in the cloest,and then got fire. After hours of walking in the park,Bob was tired and needed a rest. He then a get a message from his cell,the one who was calling him was his son,Nick. His son was 13 years old,has black hair and blue eye,like his wife. His son was taken when he was 5,and his wife move out of town and went to Miami. "Hey dad,how are you doing. I doing great at school. Life here is great,but not great without you. I hope you may return and help me on how to find the 'perfect' girl. From Nick." Bob felt alone and wish to be with him. Then a old woman was sitting with him near the tree. "What a quite night it is. You wish to be with your son." Bob was shock and amazing,how did she know,he say to himself. "I can grant that wish. But you are too old and weak. I shall gave you the power of rebirth." Bob think she was crazy and try to leave. But then the old lady eye were red and two long fangs grow from her mouth,then she grab him and bite him. She snuck all the blood out of his body and left the body on the ground and vanish. Bob was still alive,but then felt that he was getting younger and he was shranking. He look at the water and saw he was 14 years old,and notice he had pale skin and the skin was smooth. Then felt his manhood gne and his leg were slender. His clothing was falling out,but then his shirt and pant fuse together into a dress with black color. Then a white bow was behind him and the bottom of his dress was like a flower. Then sleeve was on his arm,but show only the top of his skin. Then his muscle was gone from his body,his waist shrank and hip burst out. Then his ear grow long and pointinghis hair grow and the color of it was white.And his face turn into a cute girl with light blue eye. Then he moan as the chest puff and became A cups breast. The last change was a giant bat wing growing behind her back. Then she look in the water,only to find a girl in it. She was tired and weak. "Please,someone help me. I turn into a bat girl." as she walk to a strange fog,the world around her change,the fog was gone and she was near a sign saying,"Welcome to Miami". Then she realize she was close to her son and didn't want him to see his father turn into a bat girl. But then she fell to salt water and she didn't know how to swim. But before she was about to sink,someone grab her arm and save her. As she woke up,she see her hero,her son Nick. She was amazing how young and hansome he was. "Are you alright miss. I found you fell and began to sink,so i came to save you." Bob had no idea what to do now,to be save by his son and to be in Miami. "Umm...what is you name?" It took 2 minute to think of her name,then decide. "My name is Terra." Nick took Terra hand and take her to her new home,to be with him forever.
This is a little vampire story i thought of. Hope you enjoy this story.
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GobboKilla Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
cool story, bro
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TGFWritter Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's rather well thought through, however, you really need to check the spelling, and give it some more details here and there as well as lengthen it a bit to make it coherent; even though it's quite original, I must say that it needs quite and improvement.

And for the love of God, when you write a story, remember to press Enter every now and then and not end up with a single block of text; anyone that lays eyes upon this would most surely think twice before reading it
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Darth-Drago Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010
Hey, that was a long time ago, man. I have improve alot back then, and now my grammers have are much better, and there is less error in my grammers. And another thing, don't tell me what to do. I know you just trying to help, but some people don't like people telling them what to do or how they should fix their work, so please don't say something that people don't like to listen, okay.
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TGFWritter Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well sorry, I didn't know you didn't want to be told about that; however, if your stile and technique have improved, a good suggestion is to update the old texts in your gallery, I can guarantee it improves the overall image
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its-me-ben Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2009
not a bad story but you need to spell check it, and it would help if you checked the grammar too. They have an AI at wordpress which will even tell you when you have used a word in the wrong context or if it doesn't fit properly, you should try it out. Stories are better when they are easy to read :)
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Josh7890 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009
cute pic may i borrow it sometimes i woun't use the name u gave it i think i had a better name to use for rp on it but if not k then just asking
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PhoenixDaimon Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
nice story.
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